Do You Remember Yesterday

#21 Guest_Rose of Jericho_*

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Posted 18 July 2001 - 05:37 PM

> And thank you for an interesting and thoroughly enjoyable story. It does

> make one think, both on what we all have in common, regardless of society,

> and on just how much of the modern way of thinking we're bringing into the

> worlds based on other kinds of societies.

I have been thinking, lately, that no matter how much money you have or your position in society, everyone probably has a few of the same problems. And, of course, we'll all die someday. Death, the great equalizer...

I hadn't really realized that I put that in the tale. Just goes to show how the mind composts everything for writing.

Thanks!

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#22 Laufey

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Posted 18 July 2001 - 08:20 PM

> I never found her to be strong enough or interesting enough as either a

> thief or a mage to keep her around gamewise. And, the whole "I hate

> cities, they're built on the backs of the poor" and "How does

> running around here help the needy" comments made me feel like I had

> a rhetoric-spouting socialist in the party.

Particularly when she does the "help the needy" line INSIDE HER OWN KEEP! I got the "hate cities" line today and all I really wanted to respond was "I hate Nalia, she's clinging to my back and making me feel really unfortunate."

Rogues do it from behind.

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#23 Guest_Arelius_*

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Posted 18 July 2001 - 08:45 PM

> In the meantime, here's Renai's latest. Comments/critiques welcome. And

> everyone say "Happy Birthday" to me (July 17). I'm 29!! Huzzah!

>

YAY!!! Happy B. Day! Now you can start celebrating the anniversary of this one.

> Someone is crying, and she wonders if it is her. Her face is wet, and

Very nice opening dream sequence. Cool.

> "I'll certainly try your way next, wonder boy," she growled.

*grin*

> "Nalia?" Renai fidgeted as she waited for Nalia to reply. But

> Nalia only stood still as a statue, clutching her the Flail of the Ages

clutching the...

> off. "I can, it is my fault. If I had just been pleasant, if I

> had asked for help instead of being a shrew, I could have come back

> immediately. I could have helped, and my father wouldn't be lying there

> dead. So you see, it is my fault. It's all my fault." Tears again

Nice twist on her tale. No pun intended.

> her and she could not push it away. Remember, it said, this is where

> I started from."

And a great connection here. Liked this story a lot. Gave a good growing experience to Nalia, and delved deep into her mind.

I know I saw another typo/extra word up there somewhere on my first read through as well, but I can't find it now. Seemed like it was at the beginning somewhere. Sorry.

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Posted 18 July 2001 - 08:49 PM

Happy belated birthday!!

This was a great read! Nalia was never a character I liked, something about her always just got to me, and I would boot her out of the party as soon as I was done with her quest. I actually felt sorry for her here.

I like Renai alot. My main character is an archer too, so maybe I'm a little biased to start I hope we see more of her!

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Posted 20 July 2001 - 08:25 AM

> Hey... Men (especially married men) get lectures all...the...time...

> That arched brow? I learned a loooong time ago that is a serious danger

> sign. It means "drop everything and retreat to a known safe zone -

> FAST!"

LOL!

There's an entire language out there that women have at their disposal. The arched brow, the tapping foot, the hard-eyed glare...not to mention the hands on the hips! Fortunately for me, my boyfriend is a smart guy and he knows all these signals well.

*smug look*

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#26 Guest_Rose of Jericho_*

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Posted 22 July 2001 - 02:17 AM

> And a great connection here. Liked this story a lot. Gave a good growing

> experience to Nalia, and delved deep into her mind.

I'm starting to become a great fan of character development.

> I know I saw another typo/extra word up there somewhere on my first read

> through as well, but I can't find it now. Seemed like it was at the

> beginning somewhere. Sorry.

I'll go hunting for it before I post on my story page. Thanks!

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Posted 22 July 2001 - 02:22 AM

> This was a great read! Nalia was never a character I liked, something

> about her always just got to me, and I would boot her out of the party as

> soon as I was done with her quest. I actually felt sorry for her here.

I was kind of surprised where we ended up. I never really liked Nalia much either, and I hadn't really planned to take her in this direction. It's amazing where the pen (or keyboard, in my case) will take you if you just put your faith in it.

> I like Renai alot. My main character is an archer too, so maybe I'm a

> little biased to start I hope we see more of her!

I love archers, probably because I'd love to be one myself! (I've been looking around for lessons, but I've only found bow hunting lessons, not actual archery, and since I'll never hunt unless civilization ends, well ...) I'm particularly fond of the 3rd Edition D&D prestige class of Arcane Archers, and if I can figure it out properly, I'll be putting Renai on that path. This should be fun. Stay tuned!

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