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#1 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 23 June 2003 - 08:23 PM

Here is the next part of Ashes, albeit it is short and gods only know when am I coming with the next with all the other stuff that is going on. I do appreciate your patience and attention, and wanted to thank all my readers who are so nice and supportive. :)

As always - any input be it grammar, typos, plot, or anything else that catches your eye is always welcome.

CHAPTER TWENTY THREE , beginning

11 of Marpenoth 1371, Year of the Unstrung Harp

Master Derk turned out to be a middle-aged halfling with big clever hands, and perpetual expression of mild curiosity painted on his kind myopic face. In a sense, he was an exact opposite of his noisy, over-zealous spouse, but perhaps that was what made their marriage a success – he was too preoccupied with his own thoughts and the many small but important tasks of his profession to have time to be sufficiently irritated with his wife’s bursts of creativity. We went through the shelves of his shop together, sorting through various herbs, roots, blobs of wax, packets of salamander dust, and dried snake tongues in small jars. I felt a strange pang of nostalgia at some point, but it was quickly replaced with an irrational fear of another vision. That was why I deliberately tore my gaze away from the table with some primitive machinery parts. Presumably, it was going to be another household item enhanced with a useful spell or two. The halfling had a practical streak to his character, and most of the projects in his shop were minor improvements of common kitchen appliances. There was for example a steam-pot with self-tightening lid, and a pepper mill that played a little tune as you rotated the crank. Supposedly, it had a ‘low friction’ enchantment woven in, which made the little device very easy to operate. The secondary effect of that spell rendered it virtually immune to day-to-day wear. But by the small gods of cutlery and cupboards - who would need a perpetual pepper machine! I thought amusedly. At least Derk’s hobby was quite harmless, if a little queer.

The halfling showed me his small collection of obscure arcane enchantments that he had collected over many years by buying them off the traveling mages. These were the scrolls for which his well-organized mind could not find any practical application, and that he did not bother to copy to his own sensible little spellbook. Derk kept them primarily for the purpose of exchanging later for something more useful. I could never understand how one could have unknown magic at his fingertips, and not bother to study it, or play with it out of sheer joy of having a new spell at his disposal, even if it was of a rather esoteric nature. Since he refused to take money for these, we had to barter. At the end, I taught him my own variation of the mend cantrip, which I redesigned over the last two weeks of my travels, to deal with the worst effects that the harsh terrain induced on my gear.

In exchange, he let me study and memorize a nonsensical but elegant enchantment that was a nice addition to the trick, which Omwo and I had planned for tonight’s performance. It was called audible glamour, and it pertained to creation of an acoustic illusion at any spot within the specified radius from the focal point of the casting. Simply speaking, one could force any mundane sound or melody to reproduce itself almost indefinitely at a chosen location, without having to pay the musicians and singers for generating the desired noise. I thought with some degree of sarcasm that Omwo should be grateful that Derk did not think of building a magical device with this kind of permanent effect. The moment it will be out on the streets will mark the end of his profession as a lucrative occupation.

Having finished my business with Master Sixthtoe, but still in possession of a few hours before the designated time for the show, I decided to spend an hour or so exploring the village before settling down to the serious business of studying my spellbook, and sorting through all the magical accoutrements that I purchased from the halfling wise man. The most important item that I procured was a wide belt of soft leather, equipped with multitude of tiny compartments, various pockets, and slots. All the vials with multi-colored liquids, desiccated body parts of strange animals, and small bags of bad-smelling powders that I now carried in my pouch required examination, labeling, and creative organizing. I did not really look forward to this work, but it had to be done eventually. On my way out of the Derk’s shop, I passed a small shrine with the crude statue of Arvoreen clutching two short swords to his muscular chest. The stone warrior gave me a stern unsmiling look of his blind eyes, but I ignored the halfling god’s displeasure, and left him to his grim contemplations, no doubt on the nature of the tall people’s perfidy.

Outside the chapel, the world was full of cold, blue brilliance pouring like water from the clear autumn sky framed by majestic outlines of the reddish-brown peaks, some of which were crowned with never-melting snow caps. After the warm and stuffy atmosphere of the shop, the crisp mountain air made me giddy - a sensation not dissimilar to that joyful lightheadedness that one might experience after drinking a full glass of sparkling wine. Since I had never tasted anything of the kind in the life that I claimed as mine own, I wondered briefly if Joneleth was actively channeling these well-forgotten tastes and images into my consciousness, or if I was borrowing from his suppressed memories on my own volition. It hardly mattered at the moment, but the thought gave me a painful jolt. I walked briskly to the edge of the rocky precipice that formed the natural barrier between the village and the narrow valley below, and stopped, taking a deep breath.

The view was magnificent, almost stunningly so. The granite wall under my feet dropped almost vertically, hiding the narrow stone shelf, from which we were lifted up yesterday in the wicker basket. There was a vague trajectory of the river at the bottom of the canyon – a dim silver band woven through the blue-green stalks of the distant trees. I looked up, slowly turning around for a better view. The mountain, upon which the Perch was scattered like a small collection of building blocks thrown by a careless child, did not end at this level, but after forming a kind of a small shoulder continued upwards, soon disappearing from view in the tattered shroud of white clouds. The slope above was covered with a sturdy growth of mountain fir, and tamarack, dotted with an occasional clump of dwarf oaks. And very high above the level of the small plateau upon which I was standing, almost hidden among the swirl of the shifting vapors, I saw the dark, gaping mouth of a cave. Something moved among the clouds, and the thick, wet blanket of fog hid the opening as quickly as it was revealed, as if drawing a curtain over the secret door. I shrugged. My imagination was probably playing tricks with my mind again. After yesterday’s nightmare, it was a miracle that I was not seeing small green dancing men under every bush.

I strolled through the village, ignoring the curious stares of rare passersby, and answering with a polite, silent nod on every circumspect greeting. I imagine, I made a rather ridiculous figure, towering three feet or more over the short but hefty Perch citizens. Omwo reached almost up to my waist, but he was taller than most of his mountain kin. The village consisted of barely a handful of round stone cairns that were built over the entrances into the deeper burrows, and a few more conventional structures, with low walls constructed out of rough grey stone, and roofed over with thin wooden logs, reinforced with clay. The Sixthtoes’ house looked like a palace compared to many of these huts. Almost every house had a small vegetable garden, surrounded by the same gray stone wall. These patches of greenery were now filled with dry stalks of harvested corn, and some brighter spots, where a few late pumpkins and overripe melons were still visible among the dead brown stems and leaves. A number of scrawny chickens, and a milk goat with a small kid haunted the streets. Simply speaking, Perch was the most uninspiring, if picturesque halfling village one could imagine in existence. I was ready to turn around and make my way back to the square box of Olphara’s house, when something unusual finally caught my bored eye.

After the last turn, the single narrow street of the village that followed the mountainside (along which I was currently walking), ended on a small round plaza, paved with the same roughly chiseled flagstones that were used in construction of every other road, and sidewalk in Perch. In the middle of the square stood a low stone arch, built of the same material, and covered with irregular white, orange, and green spots of lichen. I could swear that it looked considerably older than any other building in the hold, including the Sixthtoes’ dwelling and all the low spherical domes that according to Olphara were the oldest houses in the outpost. From the middle of that ancient structure, hung a very old bronze bell, twice as tall as the tallest halfling in Perch. Its tongue was tied with a coil of rope, as thick as the thigh of an adult halfling. The free end of the rope ended with a big knot that almost touched the flagstones. It was quite possible for a halfling to put both of her feet on the knot if desired, and swing freely on the rope, thus ringing the bell that she could not have possibly sounded in any other way. The rope was relatively new compared to the rest of the portico, and there were runes on the bell that looked suspiciously like the letters of an elven alphabet, styled to fit the Common speech. I squinted at the half-visible words.

‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’

The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.

#2 Guest_Lord E_*

Posted 23 June 2003 - 11:26 PM

I felt a strange pang of nostalgia at some point, but it was quickly replaced with an irrational fear of another vision. That was why I deliberately tore my gaze away from the table with some primitive machinery parts.


I love the subtlety of his newfound emotions. And his curiosity is very Jon.

I could never understand how one could have unknown magic at his fingertips, and not bother to study it, or play with it out of sheer joy of having a new spell at his disposal, even if it was of a rather esoteric nature.


I very much agree with him. :) And of course, it is very him.

I thought with some degree of sarcasm that Omwo should be grateful that Derk did not think of building a magical device with this kind of permanent effect. The moment it will be out on the streets will mark the end of his profession as a lucrative occupation.


LOL! There arrogant Jon-Jon is wrong!

On my way out of the Derk’s shop, I passed a small shrine with the crude statue of Arvoreen clutching two short swords to his muscular chest. The stone warrior gave me a stern unsmiling look of his blind eyes, but I ignored the halfling god’s displeasure, and left him to his grim contemplations, no doubt on the nature of the tall people’s perfidy.


He has *so* cool sense of humor!



‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’


The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.


Woo! Now you have me intrigued!

#3 Arcalian

Posted 24 June 2003 - 12:13 AM

Dorotea Dorotea Dorotea figaro! Maginificooooooooo!


>>Outside the chapel, the world was full of cold, blue brilliance pouring like water from the clear autumn sky framed by majestic outlines of the reddish-brown peaks, some of which were crowned with never-melting snow caps. After the warm and stuffy atmosphere of the shop, the crisp mountain air made me giddy - a sensation not dissimilar to that joyful lightheadedness that one might experience after drinking a full glass of sparkling wine. Since I had never tasted anything of the kind in the life that I claimed as mine own, I wondered briefly if Joneleth was actively channeling these well-forgotten tastes and images into my consciousness, or if I was borrowing from his suppressed memories on my own volition. It hardly mattered at the moment, but the thought gave me a painful jolt. I walked briskly to the edge of the rocky precipice that formed the natural barrier between the village and the narrow valley below, and stopped, taking a deep breath.

The view was magnificent, almost stunningly so. The granite wall under my feet dropped almost vertically, hiding the narrow stone shelf, from which we were lifted up yesterday in the wicker basket. There was a vague trajectory of the river at the bottom of the canyon – a dim silver band woven through the blue-green stalks of the distant trees. I looked up, slowly turning around for a better view. The mountain, upon which the Perch was scattered like a small collection of building blocks thrown by a careless child, did not end at this level, but after forming a kind of a small shoulder continued upwards, soon disappearing from view in the tattered shroud of white clouds. The slope above was covered with a sturdy growth of mountain fir, and tamarack, dotted with an occasional clump of dwarf oaks. And very high above the level of the small plateau upon which I was standing, almost hidden among the swirl of the shifting vapors, I saw the dark, gaping mouth of a cave. Something moved among the clouds, and the thick, wet blanket of fog hid the opening as quickly as it was revealed, as if drawing a curtain over the secret door. I shrugged. My imagination was probably playing tricks with my mind again. After yesterday’s nightmare, it was a miracle that I was not seeing small green dancing men under every bush.

I strolled through the village, ignoring the curious stares of rare passersby, and answering with a polite, silent nod on every circumspect greeting. I imagine, I made a rather ridiculous figure, towering three feet or more over the short but hefty Perch citizens. Omwo reached almost up to my waist, but he was taller than most of his mountain kin. The village consisted of barely a handful of round stone cairns that were built over the entrances into the deeper burrows, and a few more conventional structures, with low walls constructed out of rough grey stone, and roofed over with thin wooden logs, reinforced with clay. The Sixthtoes’ house looked like a palace compared to many of these huts. Almost every house had a small vegetable garden, surrounded by the same gray stone wall. These patches of greenery were now filled with dry stalks of harvested corn, and some brighter spots, where a few late pumpkins and overripe melons were still visible among the dead brown stems and leaves. A number of scrawny chickens, and a milk goat with a small kid haunted the streets. Simply speaking, Perch was the most uninspiring, if picturesque halfling village one could imagine in existence. I was ready to turn around and make my way back to the square box of Olphara’s house, when something unusual finally caught my bored eye.<<

I include this whole big chunk because it shows your amazing descriptive abilities, which I, in my terse, shorthand style, could not hope to match even if I tried. You move excellent from a general environmental exposition to a great analysis of the halfling town.

>>After the last turn, the single narrow street of the village that followed the mountainside (along which I was currently walking), ended on a small round plaza, paved with the same roughly chiseled flagstones that were used in construction of every other road, and sidewalk in Perch.>>

No need for the comma after "road" here.

<<‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’

The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.<<

Hmmmm......eh, Jonny, don't go ringing the bell, nuh?

Story of a girl without a Name!!!!![/i]
The road to the abyss may be paved with good intentions, but it is those with bad intentions that race down that road as fast as they can.

#4 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 24 June 2003 - 02:20 AM

I love the subtlety of his newfound emotions. And his curiosity is very Jon.


Nod. I am trying to go from very straightforward stuff like learning to laugh and to feel guilt to more subtle and complicated things ... hopefully by the end of the journey he will be able to move on.

I very much agree with him. And of course, it is very him.


The passion for magic? Oh yes, I think this very much defines him as a personality.

The moment it will be out on the streets will mark the end of his profession as a lucrative occupation.

LOL! There arrogant Jon-Jon is wrong!


Heh, I am delighted you loved this one, I guess here your 'professional' vision kicks in. Why do you never write bard characters by the way? Or did I miss one? ;)

He has *so* cool sense of humor!


:twisted:

Woo! Now you have me intrigued!


I am happy I managed it. :wink: I shall try to write the next part quick. :)

Thanks for reading and commenting!

#5 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 24 June 2003 - 02:26 AM

I include this whole big chunk because it shows your amazing descriptive abilities, which I, in my terse, shorthand style, could not hope to match even if I tried. You move excellent from a general environmental exposition to a great analysis of the halfling town.


Well, you never know until you try, do you? I was not always that hot about descriptions, but I find thinking about them half of the fun of writing the story, so I guess I am getting into 'verbal painting' mode every now and then. If you like this kind of stuff - why don't you try to elaborate every now and then instead of doing shorthand style? The thing though - it takes a lot of time and my stories tend to evolve extremely slow because of it. :wink:

No need for the comma after "road" here.


thanks!

Hmmmm......eh, Jonny, don't go ringing the bell, nuh?


Let's wait and see, will we? :twisted:

Thanks for reading and commenting!

#6 Laufey

Posted 24 June 2003 - 04:27 AM

Here is the next part of Ashes, albeit it is short and gods only know when am I coming with the next with all the other stuff that is going on. I do appreciate your patience and attention, and wanted to thank all my readers who are so nice and supportive. :wink:


Always enjoy Ashes. ;)


Master Derk turned out to be a middle-aged halfling with big clever hands, and perpetual expression of mild curiosity painted on his kind myopic face. In a sense, he was an exact opposite of his noisy, over-zealous spouse, but perhaps that was what made their marriage a success – he was too preoccupied with his own thoughts and the many small but important tasks of his profession to have time to be sufficiently irritated with his wife’s bursts of creativity. We went through the shelves of his shop together, sorting through various herbs, roots, blobs of wax, packets of salamander dust, and dried snake tongues in small jars. I felt a strange pang of nostalgia at some point, but it was quickly replaced with an irrational fear of another vision. That was why I deliberately tore my gaze away from the table with some primitive machinery parts. Presumably, it was going to be another household item enhanced with a useful spell or two. The halfling had a practical streak to his character, and most of the projects in his shop were minor improvements of common kitchen appliances. There was for example a steam-pot with self-tightening lid, and a pepper mill that played a little tune as you rotated the crank. Supposedly, it had a ‘low friction’ enchantment woven in, which made the little device very easy to operate. The secondary effect of that spell rendered it virtually immune to day-to-day wear. But by the small gods of cutlery and cupboards - who would need a perpetual pepper machine! I thought amusedly. At least Derk’s hobby was quite harmless, if a little queer.


Imagine feeling nostalgic about snake tongues. :) And what a nice little hobby, it really makes Derk come alive as a character.


In exchange, he let me study and memorize a nonsensical but elegant enchantment that was a nice addition to the trick, which Omwo and I had planned for tonight’s performance. It was called audible glamour, and it pertained to creation of an acoustic illusion at any spot within the specified radius from the focal point of the casting. Simply speaking, one could force any mundane sound or melody to reproduce itself almost indefinitely at a chosen location, without having to pay the musicians and singers for generating the desired noise. I thought with some degree of sarcasm that Omwo should be grateful that Derk did not think of building a magical device with this kind of permanent effect. The moment it will be out on the streets will mark the end of his profession as a lucrative occupation.


LOL! Not to mention what would happen if the Realms acquire a magical version of Kazaa...

Having finished my business with Master Sixthtoe, but still in possession of a few hours before the designated time for the show, I decided to spend an hour or so exploring the village before settling down to the serious business of studying my spellbook, and sorting through all the magical accoutrements that I purchased from the halfling wise man. The most important item that I procured was a wide belt of soft leather, equipped with multitude of tiny compartments, various pockets, and slots. All the vials with multi-colored liquids, desiccated body parts of strange animals, and small bags of bad-smelling powders that I now carried in my pouch required examination, labeling, and creative organizing. I did not really look forward to this work, but it had to be done eventually. On my way out of the Derk’s shop, I passed a small shrine with the crude statue of Arvoreen clutching two short swords to his muscular chest. The stone warrior gave me a stern unsmiling look of his blind eyes, but I ignored the halfling god’s displeasure, and left him to his grim contemplations, no doubt on the nature of the tall people’s perfidy.


Again, like the little details you always provide, such as this description of the belt and spell components.

Outside the chapel, the world was full of cold, blue brilliance pouring like water from the clear autumn sky framed by majestic outlines of the reddish-brown peaks, some of which were crowned with never-melting snow caps. After the warm and stuffy atmosphere of the shop, the crisp mountain air made me giddy - a sensation not dissimilar to that joyful lightheadedness that one might experience after drinking a full glass of sparkling wine. Since I had never tasted anything of the kind in the life that I claimed as mine own, I wondered briefly if Joneleth was actively channeling these well-forgotten tastes and images into my consciousness, or if I was borrowing from his suppressed memories on my own volition. It hardly mattered at the moment, but the thought gave me a painful jolt. I walked briskly to the edge of the rocky precipice that formed the natural barrier between the village and the narrow valley below, and stopped, taking a deep breath.


Ah...he's slowly regaining a little of his old self. :P


‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’


The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.


Now why do I get the feeling we'll hear that bell sounded before Jon-Jon leaves? :twisted:
Rogues do it from behind.

#7 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 24 June 2003 - 05:21 AM

Imagine feeling nostalgic about snake tongues. And what a nice little hobby, it really makes Derk come alive as a character.


The funny part - I feel Jonny would feel nostalgic about his marinated men and snake tongues (and the machine that was spewing electric mephits and the cambion in the glass dome) He is that kind of a guy. :wink:

And I like writing halflings - I view them as very domestic and industrious - exact opposite of me. :P

LOL! Not to mention what would happen if the Realms acquire a magical version of Kazaa...


:twisted: They would have to have a magical version of the internet first - but elven spirit is sorta like it . ;)

Again, like the little details you always provide, such as this description of the belt and spell components.


It helps to visualize. I don't know how you write - but in order to tell a good yarn I have to 'see' the scene. :)

Ah...he's slowly regaining a little of his old self.


And it is not always a good thing ...

Now why do I get the feeling we'll hear that bell sounded before Jon-Jon leaves?


yeah - if there is a rifle on the scene it should be fired in the 3 rd act ...

Thanks for reading and commenting!

#8 Guest_Theodur_*

Posted 24 June 2003 - 08:29 AM

The halfling showed me his small collection of obscure arcane enchantments that he had collected over many years by buying them off the traveling mages. These were the scrolls for which his well-organized mind could not find any practical application, and that he did not bother to copy to his own sensible little spellbook. Derk kept them primarily for the purpose of exchanging later for something more useful. I could never understand how one could have unknown magic at his fingertips, and not bother to study it, or play with it out of sheer joy of having a new spell at his disposal, even if it was of a rather esoteric nature. Since he refused to take money for these, we had to barter. At the end, I taught him my own variation of the mend cantrip, which I redesigned over the last two weeks of my travels, to deal with the worst effects that the harsh terrain induced on my gear.


Ah, this is where Jonny can probably strike gold... it's kinda like finding a really valuable piece of art amongst the junk in the antique shop where it has slipped the attention of not-so-bright owner.

Since I had never tasted anything of the kind in the life that I claimed as mine own, I wondered briefly if Joneleth was actively channeling these well-forgotten tastes and images into my consciousness, or if I was borrowing from his suppressed memories on my own volition. It hardly mattered at the moment, but the thought gave me a painful jolt.


Interesting, though I wonder how exactly it happens since as you correctly reminded me he has a soul of a human and is still seperated from that elven 'communal spirit'. What have I missed this time? :shock:

The view was magnificent, almost stunningly so. The granite wall under my feet dropped almost vertically, hiding the narrow stone shelf, from which we were lifted up yesterday in the wicker basket. There was a vague trajectory of the river at the bottom of the canyon – a dim silver band woven through the blue-green stalks of the distant trees. I looked up, slowly turning around for a better view. The mountain, upon which the Perch was scattered like a small collection of building blocks thrown by a careless child, did not end at this level, but after forming a kind of a small shoulder continued upwards, soon disappearing from view in the tattered shroud of white clouds. The slope above was covered with a sturdy growth of mountain fir, and tamarack, dotted with an occasional clump of dwarf oaks. And very high above the level of the small plateau upon which I was standing, almost hidden among the swirl of the shifting vapors, I saw the dark, gaping mouth of a cave. Something moved among the clouds, and the thick, wet blanket of fog hid the opening as quickly as it was revealed, as if drawing a curtain over the secret door. I shrugged. My imagination was probably playing tricks with my mind again. After yesterday’s nightmare, it was a miracle that I was not seeing small green dancing men under every bush.


Hehe, now what was that vision all about? Lovely descriptions as always and reminded me of my acrophobia... :twisted:

‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’


The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.


Argh. Of course he's going to scrape off the crust in the next chapter... :wink:

#9 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 24 June 2003 - 01:36 PM

Ah, this is where Jonny can probably strike gold... it's kinda like finding a really valuable piece of art amongst the junk in the antique shop where it has slipped the attention of not-so-bright owner.


:twisted: I don't imply Derk is not-so-bright. He just has different priorities.

Interesting, though I wonder how exactly it happens since as you correctly reminded me he has a soul of a human and is still seperated from that elven 'communal spirit'. What have I missed this time?


I assume he was granted all his physical and emotional memories back with the new soul. But he deliberately blocked them simply because most of them are too painful to endure. He will get it all out eventually, as well as his connection. But it will probably take me another year to write.

Hehe, now what was that vision all about? Lovely descriptions as always and reminded me of my acrophobia...


We will soon find out - I really want to write thisnext part. :shock: I have to confess to being afraid of heights as well ...

Argh. Of course he's going to scrape off the crust in the next chapter...


Heh ...

We will sonnfind out.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

#10 Guest_Domi_*

Posted 24 June 2003 - 07:16 PM

Here is the next part of Ashes, albeit it is short and gods only know when am I coming with the next with all the other stuff that is going on. I do appreciate your patience and attention, and wanted to thank all my readers who are so nice and supportive. :shock:


I guess risking to enter the Serials forum did pay off for me - thank you for the new chapter!

Master Derk turned out to be a middle-aged halfling with big clever hands, and perpetual expression of mild curiosity painted on his kind myopic face. In a sense, he was an exact opposite of his noisy, over-zealous spouse, but perhaps that was what made their marriage a success –


or at least made a marriage :twisted:


In exchange, he let me study and memorize a nonsensical but elegant enchantment that was a nice addition to the trick, which Omwo and I had planned for tonight’s performance. It was called audible glamour, and it pertained to creation of an acoustic illusion at any spot within the specified radius from the focal point of the casting. Simply speaking, one could force any mundane sound or melody to reproduce itself almost indefinitely at a chosen location, without having to pay the musicians and singers for generating the desired noise. I thought with some degree of sarcasm that Omwo should be grateful that Derk did not think of building a magical device with this kind of permanent effect. The moment it will be out on the streets will mark the end of his profession as a lucrative occupation.


never happend though. good for Omwo

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Outside the chapel, the world was full of cold, blue brilliance pouring like water from the clear autumn sky framed by majestic outlines of the reddish-brown peaks, some of which were crowned with never-melting snow caps. After the warm and stuffy atmosphere of the shop, the crisp mountain air made me giddy - a sensation not dissimilar to that joyful lightheadedness that one might experience after drinking a full glass of sparkling wine. Since I had never tasted anything of the kind in the life that I claimed as mine own, I wondered briefly if Joneleth was actively channeling these well-forgotten tastes and images into my consciousness, or if I was borrowing from his suppressed memories on my own volition. It hardly mattered at the moment, but the thought gave me a painful jolt. I walked briskly to the edge of the rocky precipice that formed the natural barrier between the village and the narrow valley below, and stopped, taking a deep breath.


interesting paragraph, very associative, recreates well the way people think. :)

After the last turn, the single narrow street of the village that followed the mountainside (along which I was currently walking), ended on a small round plaza, paved with the same roughly chiseled flagstones that were used in construction of every other road, and sidewalk in Perch. In the middle of the square stood a low stone arch, built of the same material, and covered with irregular white, orange, and green spots of lichen. I could swear that it looked considerably older than any other building in the hold, including the Sixthtoes’ dwelling and all the low spherical domes that according to Olphara were the oldest houses in the outpost. From the middle of that ancient structure, hung a very old bronze bell, twice as tall as the tallest halfling in Perch. Its tongue was tied with a coil of rope, as thick as the thigh of an adult halfling. The free end of the rope ended with a big knot that almost touched the flagstones. It was quite possible for a halfling to put both of her feet on the knot if desired, and swing freely on the rope, thus ringing the bell that she could not have possibly sounded in any other way. The rope was relatively new compared to the rest of the portico, and there were runes on the bell that looked suspiciously like the letters of an elven alphabet, styled to fit the Common speech. I squinted at the half-visible words.


‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’


The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.


you do like to finish the chapters on mysterious findings...very interesting one this time!

#11 Weyoun

Posted 24 June 2003 - 10:22 PM

The halfling showed me his small collection of obscure arcane enchantments that he had collected over many years by buying them off the traveling mages. These were the scrolls for which his well-organized mind could not find any practical application, and that he did not bother to copy to his own sensible little spellbook. Derk kept them primarily for the purpose of exchanging later for something more useful. I could never understand how one could have unknown magic at his fingertips, and not bother to study it, or play with it out of sheer joy of having a new spell at his disposal, even if it was of a rather esoteric nature. Since he refused to take money for these, we had to barter. At the end, I taught him my own variation of the mend cantrip, which I redesigned over the last two weeks of my travels, to deal with the worst effects that the harsh terrain induced on my gear.


Laska : Hey, that's a handy spell. Does it also fix broken bottles?

Weyoun : Clean up your own mess, Laska. You can't cast any spells anyway.

Laska : *grumbles and fetches a broom*

Having finished my business with Master Sixthtoe, but still in possession of a few hours before the designated time for the show, I decided to spend an hour or so exploring the village before settling down to the serious business of studying my spellbook, and sorting through all the magical accoutrements that I purchased from the halfling wise man. The most important item that I procured was a wide belt of soft leather, equipped with multitude of tiny compartments, various pockets, and slots. All the vials with multi-colored liquids, desiccated body parts of strange animals, and small bags of bad-smelling powders that I now carried in my pouch required examination, labeling, and creative organizing. I did not really look forward to this work, but it had to be done eventually. On my way out of the Derk’s shop, I passed a small shrine with the crude statue of Arvoreen clutching two short swords to his muscular chest. The stone warrior gave me a stern unsmiling look of his blind eyes, but I ignored the halfling god’s displeasure, and left him to his grim contemplations, no doubt on the nature of the tall people’s perfidy.


Yeah! Tall people suck!

Laska : You didn't mention you are 183 cm tall, Wey...

Weyoun : Quiet ruining the illusion!


The view was magnificent, almost stunningly so. The granite wall under my feet dropped almost vertically, hiding the narrow stone shelf, from which we were lifted up yesterday in the wicker basket. There was a vague trajectory of the river at the bottom of the canyon – a dim silver band woven through the blue-green stalks of the distant trees. I looked up, slowly turning around for a better view. The mountain, upon which the Perch was scattered like a small collection of building blocks thrown by a careless child, did not end at this level, but after forming a kind of a small shoulder continued upwards, soon disappearing from view in the tattered shroud of white clouds. The slope above was covered with a sturdy growth of mountain fir, and tamarack, dotted with an occasional clump of dwarf oaks. And very high above the level of the small plateau upon which I was standing, almost hidden among the swirl of the shifting vapors, I saw the dark, gaping mouth of a cave. Something moved among the clouds, and the thick, wet blanket of fog hid the opening as quickly as it was revealed, as if drawing a curtain over the secret door. I shrugged. My imagination was probably playing tricks with my mind again. After yesterday’s nightmare, it was a miracle that I was not seeing small green dancing men under every bush.


Wow... Again, I admire the worldcrafting you do through the details.

‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’


The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.


Hey, hey, clean off the green, then! I wanna know what it says! *pouts*

Great stuff,
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#12 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 25 June 2003 - 01:28 AM

I guess risking to enter the Serials forum did pay off for me - thank you for the new chapter!


Chuckle. I guess half of the regular visitors cannot make a desicion to come and check here these days. Hopefully the things will go back to normal soon.

or at least made a marriage


Chortle. This is a very familiar situation to me somehow ... you may say it is written from personal observation.

The moment it will be out on the streets will mark the end of his profession as a lucrative occupation.

never happend though. good for Omwo


C'mon. Jon is just being his usual 'lovable' self.

interesting paragraph, very associative, recreates well the way people think.


Really? Hmm... I hoped so. :) I definitely think this way sometimes when I am having the blues ( which is fairly often)

you do like to finish the chapters on mysterious findings...very interesting one this time!


It hangs over me too - now I have to write the next one. :)

Thanks for reading and commenting!

#13 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 25 June 2003 - 01:33 AM

Laska : Hey, that's a handy spell. Does it also fix broken bottles?

Weyoun : Clean up your own mess, Laska. You can't cast any spells anyway.

Laska : *grumbles and fetches a broom*


Unless the bottle will make a saving throw I guess it should work ... :)

Yeah! Tall people suck!

Laska : You didn't mention you are 183 cm tall, Wey...

Weyoun : Quiet ruining the illusion!


Heh. I will find out soon enough anyway. :)

Wow... Again, I admire the worldcrafting you do through the details.


Grumble. And the action and plot on the mean time are still in the same spot. Did you notice I only had about a month pass so far from chapter 1? sigh.

Hey, hey, clean off the green, then! I wanna know what it says! *pouts*


Soon.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

#14 Guest_Broken Phoenix_*

Posted 25 June 2003 - 09:35 AM

WHAT?! I posted a reply to this half an hour ago and now the board seems to have eaten it! Crap!
*sigh* okay, here we go again...
*makes back-up copy to be certain*

Master Derk turned out to be a middle-aged halfling with big clever hands, and perpetual expression of mild curiosity painted on his kind myopic face.

What is it with wizards and eyesight? :shock:

There was for example a steam-pot with self-tightening lid, and a pepper mill that played a little tune as you rotated the crank.

Nice details! There were things like that in Torment too, I think. Planar versions.

who would need a perpetual pepper machine!

A desert halfling!

I could never understand how one could have unknown magic at his fingertips, and not bother to study it, or play with it out of sheer joy of having a new spell at his disposal, even if it was of a rather esoteric nature.

Yes, that is very like him-- but not everyone has a scientific nature.

It was called audible glamour

Don't know that one.

I thought with some degree of sarcasm that Omwo should be grateful that Derk did not think of building a magical device with this kind of permanent effect. The moment it will be out on the streets will mark the end of his profession as a lucrative occupation.

The Faerunian portable hi-fi installation!

The most important item that I procured was a wide belt of soft leather, equipped with multitude of tiny compartments, various pockets, and slots.

Ah, very handy, taken that you do not mix up the snake tongues, lizards' tails and seagull feathers... I'm not sure labeling will solve that either!

way out of the Derk’s shop

It's 'the' Derk now? :shock:

I passed a small shrine with the crude statue of Arvoreen clutching two short swords to his muscular chest.

Various internet sites, my book and Mazzy in the game claim Arvoreen to be female, while FR lore experts say it's a male god. I'm confused here.

I had never tasted anything of the kind in the life that I claimed as mine own, I wondered briefly if Joneleth was actively channeling these well-forgotten tastes and images into my consciousness, or if I was borrowing from his suppressed memories on my own volition.

Paranoid, are we...?

After yesterday’s nightmare, it was a miracle that I was not seeing small green dancing men under every bush.

Wonderful sarcasm, LOL!
(Although this being the Realms, there could be pixies in the bushes... or Nac Mac Feegles, if you are unlucky :))

I imagine, I made a rather ridiculous figure, towering three feet or more over the short but hefty Perch citizens.

Carry yourself with dignity... or arrogance, as Jon goes :)

and there were runes on the bell that looked suspiciously like the letters of an elven alphabet, styled to fit the Common speech. I squinted at the half-visible words.

‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’

The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.

Mysterious.. something tells me that won't remain safely hidden for long... a pact with elves?
I'm no ridiculously powerful wizard, but I *am* mortally curious!

#15 Guest_Bjorn_*

Posted 25 June 2003 - 04:13 PM

The halfling had a practical streak to his character, and most of the projects in his shop were minor improvements of common kitchen appliances. There was for example a steam-pot with self-tightening lid, and a pepper mill that played a little tune as you rotated the crank. Supposedly, it had a ‘low friction’ enchantment woven in, which made the little device very easy to operate. The secondary effect of that spell rendered it virtually immune to day-to-day wear. But by the small gods of cutlery and cupboards - who would need a perpetual pepper machine! I thought amusedly. At least Derk’s hobby was quite harmless, if a little queer.


Using magic to enhance kitchen appliances may not be very interesting to Jon, but the halfling housewives probably appreciate it.

The halfling showed me his small collection of obscure arcane enchantments that he had collected over many years by buying them off the traveling mages. These were the scrolls for which his well-organized mind could not find any practical application, and that he did not bother to copy to his own sensible little spellbook. Derk kept them primarily for the purpose of exchanging later for something more useful. I could never understand how one could have unknown magic at his fingertips, and not bother to study it, or play with it out of sheer joy of having a new spell at his disposal, even if it was of a rather esoteric nature. Since he refused to take money for these, we had to barter. At the end, I taught him my own variation of the mend cantrip, which I redesigned over the last two weeks of my travels, to deal with the worst effects that the harsh terrain induced on my gear.


'out of the sheer joy'. Can't imagine Jon being very good at bartering - he'd be too impatient to look at the scroll to spend much time arguing over the price.

In exchange, he let me study and memorize a nonsensical but elegant enchantment that was a nice addition to the trick, which Omwo and I had planned for tonight’s performance. It was called audible glamour, and it pertained to creation of an acoustic illusion at any spot within the specified radius from the focal point of the casting. Simply speaking, one could force any mundane sound or melody to reproduce itself almost indefinitely at a chosen location, without having to pay the musicians and singers for generating the desired noise. I thought with some degree of sarcasm that Omwo should be grateful that Derk did not think of building a magical device with this kind of permanent effect. The moment it will be out on the streets will mark the end of his profession as a lucrative occupation.


You don't need the comma after 'to the trick'. 'pertained to the creation', 'the moment it was out on the streets would mark'.

Having finished my business with Master Sixthtoe, but still in possession of a few hours before the designated time for the show, I decided to spend an hour or so exploring the village before settling down to the serious business of studying my spellbook, and sorting through all the magical accoutrements that I purchased from the halfling wise man. The most important item that I procured was a wide belt of soft leather, equipped with multitude of tiny compartments, various pockets, and slots. All the vials with multi-colored liquids, desiccated body parts of strange animals, and small bags of bad-smelling powders that I now carried in my pouch required examination, labeling, and creative organizing. I did not really look forward to this work, but it had to be done eventually. On my way out of the Derk’s shop, I passed a small shrine with the crude statue of Arvoreen clutching two short swords to his muscular chest. The stone warrior gave me a stern unsmiling look of his blind eyes, but I ignored the halfling god’s displeasure, and left him to his grim contemplations, no doubt on the nature of the tall people’s perfidy.


'that I had purchased', 'that I had procured'.

Yep - he'd probably much rather be studying than organising his spell components. Has to be done though, I suppose.


Outside the chapel, the world was full of cold, blue brilliance pouring like water from the clear autumn sky framed by majestic outlines of the reddish-brown peaks, some of which were crowned with never-melting snow caps. After the warm and stuffy atmosphere of the shop, the crisp mountain air made me giddy - a sensation not dissimilar to that joyful lightheadedness that one might experience after drinking a full glass of sparkling wine. Since I had never tasted anything of the kind in the life that I claimed as mine own, I wondered briefly if Joneleth was actively channeling these well-forgotten tastes and images into my consciousness, or if I was borrowing from his suppressed memories on my own volition. It hardly mattered at the moment, but the thought gave me a painful jolt. I walked briskly to the edge of the rocky precipice that formed the natural barrier between the village and the narrow valley below, and stopped, taking a deep breath.


Would be weird and disconcerting to remember things and then realise you didn't know where the memory came from. He can try to suppress the important memories, but the little things like the taste of sparking wine are harder to keep out.

The view was magnificent, almost stunningly so. The granite wall under my feet dropped almost vertically, hiding the narrow stone shelf, from which we were lifted up yesterday in the wicker basket. There was a vague trajectory of the river at the bottom of the canyon – a dim silver band woven through the blue-green stalks of the distant trees. I looked up, slowly turning around for a better view. The mountain, upon which the Perch was scattered like a small collection of building blocks thrown by a careless child, did not end at this level, but after forming a kind of a small shoulder continued upwards, soon disappearing from view in the tattered shroud of white clouds. The slope above was covered with a sturdy growth of mountain fir, and tamarack, dotted with an occasional clump of dwarf oaks. And very high above the level of the small plateau upon which I was standing, almost hidden among the swirl of the shifting vapors, I saw the dark, gaping mouth of a cave. Something moved among the clouds, and the thick, wet blanket of fog hid the opening as quickly as it was revealed, as if drawing a curtain over the secret door. I shrugged. My imagination was probably playing tricks with my mind again. After yesterday’s nightmare, it was a miracle that I was not seeing small green dancing men under every bush.


LOL! Hope the twins don't find out abnout the cave, or they'll probably want to go exploring and search for more treasure :shock:

No comma is needed after 'narrow stone shelf' or after 'mountain fir'.

‘We have made a covenant with thee, and this is our agreement ... should hang the bell under the arch and sound it at the time of ...’


The rest of the phrase was covered under the thick layers of green and white crust.


Interesting...

Nice chapter :shock: .

#16 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 25 June 2003 - 07:03 PM

WHAT?! I posted a reply to this half an hour ago and now the board seems to have eaten it! Crap!
*sigh* okay, here we go again...
*makes back-up copy to be certain*


Happens to me all the time. Sigh. But I have to post through the firewall...

What is it with wizards and eyesight?


Reading scrolls in abysmally badly light conditions? :( Good things elves are mostly immune to this.

Nice details! There were things like that in Torment too, I think. Planar versions.


Yeah, I do rememeber something of a kind. :?

A desert halfling!


Oh - Omwo would love it, to torture Jon with more spicy food.

Yes, that is very like him-- but not everyone has a scientific nature.


Or even inquisitive one. :D True.

It was called audible glamour

Don't know that one.


AD&D Wizards Spells compendioum in 4 tomes. That is what I spend my salary on. Sigh.

The Faerunian portable hi-fi installation!


:D

Ah, very handy, taken that you do not mix up the snake tongues, lizards' tails and seagull feathers... I'm not sure labeling will solve that either!


It is crazy what the wizard has to carry in her pocketsies to be able to cast. If you think of it ... I first run into this when I was writing A Girl without Name.

It's 'the' Derk now?


Sheesh ... :D

Various internet sites, my book and Mazzy in the game claim Arvoreen to be female, while FR lore experts say it's a male god. I'm confused here.


Both my 2 ed and 3 ed Faiths and Avatars and Deities of Faerun, as well as Races of Faerun says it is a 'he'. I follow the FR books ...

Paranoid, are we...?


Sure we are ...

Wonderful sarcasm, LOL!
(Although this being the Realms, there could be pixies in the bushes... or Nac Mac Feegles, if you are unlucky )


Gee - that's the thing about the realms - everyhting is possible, and I mean 'everything'. Is not it disturbing?

Carry yourself with dignity... or arrogance, as Jon goes


Oh, he does not have to borrow this quality!

Mysterious.. something tells me that won't remain safely hidden for long... a pact with elves?
I'm no ridiculously powerful wizard, but I *am* mortally curious!


'Some' of it is to be disclosed in the part I just posted. :wink:

Thanks for reading and commenting!

#17 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 25 June 2003 - 07:10 PM

Using magic to enhance kitchen appliances may not be very interesting to Jon, but the halfling housewives probably appreciate it.


I certainly would have. :?

'out of the sheer joy'. Can't imagine Jon being very good at bartering - he'd be too impatient to look at the scroll to spend much time arguing over the price.


Thanks!

Agree about bartering - I can't see him rich either. he probably spent all he owned on various magical junk.

You don't need the comma after 'to the trick'. 'pertained to the creation', 'the moment it was out on the streets would mark'.


Uh-huh. Now I am a comma-excessive addict. :D Thanks!

'that I had purchased', 'that I had procured'.

Yep - he'd probably much rather be studying than organising his spell components. Has to be done though, I suppose.



Thanks - and yeah, it usually is overlooked, but wizards are carrying around tons of junk.

Would be weird and disconcerting to remember things and then realise you didn't know where the memory came from. He can try to suppress the important memories, but the little things like the taste of sparking wine are harder to keep out.


As far as I know - that is usually the case with self-induced amnesias. :( I am trying to be very consistent with his memory patterns.

LOL! Hope the twins don't find out abnout the cave, or they'll probably want to go exploring and search for more treasure

No comma is needed after 'narrow stone shelf' or after 'mountain fir'.


:D We will find out about the cave soon. And I am glad Kessen is down there or he will be up and digging already. :wink:

Thanks for the commas!

Interesting...


Thanks for reading and commenting!




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