Well, time for Theo to meet Keldy and Nalia once again.
Rush Of Blood To The Head, part 6.5.
Esmeltaran is a city of medium size and of an interesting shape – it is stretched out like a snake, encircling at least the third of the lake. Brisk and refreshed we go around the lake and soon the first luxurious villas open up to our view. Soon we turn off from the shore to continue our way through the narrow, paved streets as walking on the thick, white sand is quite grueling. Besides, Edwin is getting rather vocal about his needs to find a suitable inn as quickly as possible.
“Here’s one, I see it now! Lemme see… ‘The Broken… Harp’” Imoen points towards a brown three-storied building.
“Yes, that will do nicely,” Edwin mutters and turns straight towards the inn, but is stopped unceremoniously by Jaheira. “What is it now?” our wizard is not amused, “do not tempt your fate, druid. I am in no mood to tolerate your foolishness.”
“Any other inn, Edwin, but not this one,” Jaheira replies sternly, “this is a meeting place for Harper enemies. I guess it does not matter much as I am no longer a Harper, but still I will not tolerate anyone speaking ill of them. Besides, someone might recognize me from my days as an active Harper and that could create… problems.”
“In that case we will definitely look for another inn,” I agree much to Edwin’s dismay, “Jaheira’s well being is more important to me than your personal hygiene, Eddie. You really should have taken a swim back there…”
Edwin only snorts and we continue on our way looking for an inn that Jaheira would find suitable. Having scanned another section of the city, Viconia is the first to spot the next inn – a white two-storied mansion, its facade neatly decorated with exotic figurines from pink marble.
“‘Days Of Eleint’… I think this should be appropriate - it looks to be a tavern of high quality. We can afford a bit of luxury, Theodur, am I right?” Viconia asks.
“No. Any other inn, except for this,” Jaheira growls, turns around and walks in the opposite direction.
“What now? What is wrong with her - is she having her… days?” Edwin exclaims, exasperated.
“Eddie, Jaheira lost her family during the Ten Black Days… you have to understand that she does not want to be reminded of that in such fashion,” I try to explain it to our wizard, but he seems rather excited.
“Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose. Imoen immediately grabs me by the shoulders and Viconia jumps on Edwin to keep us separated.
“Edwin, you should know better than to taunt him like that. There are just some subjects with Theo that are better left untouched – you will do well to learn that quickly,” Viconia explains as she turns Edwin around and leads him in the direction that Jaheira left moments ago.
“Bro, ignore him – he is just irritated and doesn’t really mean what he says,” Imoen tries to calm me down, but it is pointless as my anger has already left me, “but I sure hope that we find another inn soon and Jaheira better like it…”
Quiet summer forenoon and Keldorn is once again happily stretching his slightly rusty limbs in the comfortable hammock – however his thoughts are not very sunny at this moment. Nalia’s fate weighs heavily on his mind – the girl, while being a capable mage, able to defend herself, seems to be still too naïve and trustful. Letting her travel alone to Athkatla is something that Keldorn does not wish to do, especially knowing that most likely that Nalia would end up where most young women without any means of subsistence end up – on the street.
On the other hand, Keldorn knows that keeping her here would create some inconveniences in a long term, besides Nalia is quite determined to leave soon in any case. He looks at his elder daughter, deeply enraptured in the conversation with their guest – those two have formed a friendship quickly and Nalia’s tales of her adventuring days are keeping Leona away from any mischief.
Then a thought, a possible solution crosses Keldorn’s mind – however, the loud arguing coming from the street distracts it…
“We have been marching around for a couple of hours and yet I see no inns. Druid, I issue a warning to you – if we don’t come across a tavern during the next half an hour, there will be a fireball heading right towards your face,” an angry, piercing male voice startles Keldorn.
“Edwin, calm down. I told you that I have been here before and this place has many inns and taverns. It is just a matter of time and patience, a virtue that you sadly do not possess,” the thick accented female voice is unmistakable and Keldorn instinctively rushes towards the street forgetting that he is in the hammock. As a result he lands on the ground, entangled in the cloth.
“Indeed, Edwin. And stop threatening Jaheira, I am already very displeased with your behavior,” Keldorn recognizes this voice too, as he slowly picks himself up from the ground and quickly heads towards the street accompanied by the giggles of the two girls, still amused by his clumsy fall.
He instantly recognizes Theodur, Jaheira and that irritating drow in the group of five people. The other two are strangers – one of them is a… pink-haired roguish girl who is jumping around the group like an excited puppy and the other is a young human male wearing robes of the… Thayvian Red Wizards!
“Theodur! Theodur! Hold on, lad!” Keldorn speaks aloud and the group of people turns around to stare at him. I have to confess that at first I don’t recognize who this middle aged man is, I have only seen Keldorn when he was wearing his full plate and helmet.
“Keldorn? Is that you?” I overcome the moment of surprise, “what are you doing here? Enjoying your retirement?”
“That I am lad,” Keldorn replies, “but come on in, I would gladly welcome you and your friends in my estate. And there is someone here who will be extremely glad to see you again.”
“See me again?” I ask perplexed, following Keldorn through the small gate leading into his garden. I shoot a questioning look towards Jaheira, but she looks equally puzzled as I. My mouth drops wide open as I see Nalia marching towards me across the freshly mowed lawn, though instead of a happy hug of reunion, I receive a harsh slap on my cheek…
“Why… why did you not come looking for me, Theodur? I was locked up for at least a month… and where is Yoshimo? What happened to him and who are these people?” Nalia showers us with questions, but while the initial reaction was caused by anger, now she looks more worried than angry.
“Perhaps we can go inside and then Theodur can tell us about his adventures of late,” Keldorn suggests and I happily agree. Even Edwin seems to have calmed down a notch and is seemingly forgotten about his needs for a clean and nice inn.
“So, that’s the short summary of our sad tale – my sister and I both lack our souls and we need to get them back as soon as possible,” I finish my story amidst Keldorn’s snort of disgust and Nalia’s condolences.
“I understand why you were in such hurry… and you probably would never think of looking for me here,” Nalia sighs, “Roenalls bought the mansion secretly so the purchase does not show up in any registries. Was it not for Keldorn, I would have been stuck up there for ages…”
“Girl, Theodur did something to alleviate your situation,” Viconia speaks, “he bargained with the Shadow Thieves for them to kill that slime which you called your husband.”
“I can’t say that I approve of such act, it would have been much more sensible to settle this dispute in a legal manner,” Keldorn says sternly, but after looking at Nalia, he adds, “but knowing what the young lady underwent during her capture… I am sure that the young Roenall deserved no better fate than that.”
“What… what about Yoshi? Is he… is he dead?” Nalia asks barely oppressing the tears. Immediately I feel Jaheira’s body stiffening, she is sitting alongside me in a large armchair – due to the lack of seats we have been forced to squeeze a bit tighter and she is almost sitting in my lap despite her finding such position quite humiliating.
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation.
“Theodur… Theodur, will you take me with you?” Nalia looks at me as she has finished crying, her eyes still red, “There is nothing here for me to do…”
“Do not be so hasty, young Nalia,” Keldorn interrupts her, “I have a little proposition for you that we should discuss before you make any rash decisions. But in the end it will require that both of us travel to Athkatla and since that is Theodur’s destination as well, we might as well accompany him. Now, before we make any further plans, I realize that you are looking for a place to rest? Or does our young friend Edwin has a strange habit of pronouncing the word ‘tavern’ every five minutes without any reason?”
“I have a very good reason for that, old man. And address me once again as ‘young friend’ and I will force you to eat those words. Literally,” Edwin snorts.
“Yes, well, in that case would you allow me to recommend you the finest inn in the town? The Golden Sands Inn is just down the street and the neighborhood is very quiet – you will be able to rest undisturbed.”
“I believe in that case we will head over there immediately. Will you be ready to leave tomorrow morning, Keldorn?” I ask.
“Yes, I think so. I will have to convince Lady Maria first and that might prove… dangerous,” Keldorn chuckles.
“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
Rush Of Blood To The Head, part 6.5.
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“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
well Theo, not every girl likes it like that Great chapter, keep up the good work.
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“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
Oh, yes. Jaheira normally likes it
, but she won't stand for familiarities in the public. Theo can use a reminder now and then. Great chapter, keep up the good work.
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Oh, yes. Jaheira normally likes it
Is that so
I also wondered if Jaheira liked it rough 
I bet Khalid must of had hours of fun
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“In that case we will definitely look for another inn,” I agree much to Edwin’s dismay, “Jaheira’s well being is more important to me than your personal hygiene, Eddie. You really should have taken a swim back there…”
Hehe, poor Eddie!
“No. Any other inn, except for this,” Jaheira growls, turns around and walks in the opposite direction.
“What now? What is wrong with her - is she having her… days?” Edwin exclaims, exasperated.
This is funny
I can understand Eddie's exasperation.“Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose. Imoen immediately grabs me by the shoulders and Viconia jumps on Edwin to keep us separated.
Bad, Edwin, bad!
He instantly recognizes Theodur, Jaheira and that irritating drow in the group of five people. The other two are strangers – one of them is a… pink-haired roguish girl who is jumping around the group like an excited puppy and the other is a young human male wearing robes of the… Thayvian Red Wizards!
"Irritating" sounds a bit off to me. Too mild, somehow. "Vexing"? "Aggravating"? "Impossible"?
“I can’t say that I approve of such act, it would have been much more sensible to settle this dispute in a legal manner,” Keldorn says sternly, but after looking at Nalia, he adds, “but knowing what the young lady underwent during her capture… I am sure that the young Roenall deserved no better fate than that.”
*nod* Keldy is Lawful, but he is only human.
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation.
BAWL! I really like Theo for lying.
“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
You capture the unique erotic tension between the two very well!
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“In that case we will definitely look for another inn,” I agree much to Edwin’s dismay, “Jaheira’s well being is more important to me than your personal hygiene, Eddie. You really should have taken a swim back there…”
Hehe, poor Eddie!
He's one sweaty wizard right now!
“What now? What is wrong with her - is she having her… days?” Edwin exclaims, exasperated.
This is funny
Yep, it certainly sounds like he's the one having those... days...
“Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose. Imoen immediately grabs me by the shoulders and Viconia jumps on Edwin to keep us separated.
Bad, Edwin, bad!
That is *not* the thing to say to Theo.
He instantly recognizes Theodur, Jaheira and that irritating drow in the group of five people. The other two are strangers – one of them is a… pink-haired roguish girl who is jumping around the group like an excited puppy and the other is a young human male wearing robes of the… Thayvian Red Wizards!
"Irritating" sounds a bit off to me. Too mild, somehow. "Vexing"? "Aggravating"? "Impossible"?
I'll think about it. It should not be a particularly harsh word, since Keldy spent only a day in the party with Vic, so he doesn't know the full extent of her bitchiness.
“I can’t say that I approve of such act, it would have been much more sensible to settle this dispute in a legal manner,” Keldorn says sternly, but after looking at Nalia, he adds, “but knowing what the young lady underwent during her capture… I am sure that the young Roenall deserved no better fate than that.”
*nod* Keldy is Lawful, but he is only human.
It's impossible to live as long as he did and not to develop some common sense. He would know that the lawful path is not always an option.
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation.
BAWL! I really like Theo for lying.
Yeah, me too. It's not like the truth here would do anyone good, it would upset both Nalia and Jaheira, instead.
“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
You capture the unique erotic tension between the two very well!
Thanks!
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Oh, yes. Jaheira normally likes it
Is that so
Um, I will leave it to the imagination of the readers. And I am absolutely convinced that Khalid did indeed have hours of fun.
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“In that case we will definitely look for another inn,” I agree much to Edwin’s dismay, “Jaheira’s well being is more important to me than your personal hygiene, Eddie. You really should have taken a swim back there…”
Nah, I reckon the personal hygiene thing's just an excuse, and what he really wants is to find himself a mirror
.“Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose.
He's got a point, though, however much Theo may not want to acknowledge it.“We have been marching around for a couple of hours and yet I see no inns. Druid, I issue a warning to you – if we don’t come across a tavern during the next half an hour, there will be a fireball heading right towards your face,” an angry, piercing male voice startles Keldorn.
And then there will be Theo's sword protruding from your guts, Eddie.
“Edwin, calm down. I told you that I have been here before and this place has many inns and taverns. It is just a matter of time and patience, a virtue that you sadly do not possess,” the thick accented female voice is unmistakable and Keldorn instinctively rushes towards the street forgetting that he is in the hammock. As a result he lands on the ground, entangled in the cloth.
LOL! Slow down, Keldorn.
“Theodur! Theodur! Hold on, lad!” Keldorn speaks aloud and the group of people turns around to stare at him. I have to confess that at first I don’t recognize who this middle aged man is, I have only seen Keldorn when he was wearing his full plate and helmet.
The change of pov mid-paragraph is a bit confusing here - maybe you could either split it or write the whole thing from Theo's pov?
“Keldorn? Is that you?” I overcome the moment of surprise, “what are you doing here? Enjoying your retirement?”
Well, he was until you came along to muck it up for him...
“See me again?” I ask perplexed, following Keldorn through the small gate leading into his garden. I shoot a questioning look towards Jaheira, but she looks equally puzzled as I. My mouth drops wide open as I see Nalia marching towards me across the freshly mowed lawn, though instead of a happy hug of reunion, I receive a harsh slap on my cheek…
Heh, can't say you didn't deserve that, Theo
.“Girl, Theodur did something to alleviate your situation,” Viconia speaks, “he bargained with the Shadow Thieves for them to kill that slime which you called your husband.”
Hmm - should that not be 'who called himself your husband'? Because Nalia probably didn't acknowledge him as her husband, really.
“I can’t say that I approve of such act, it would have been much more sensible to settle this dispute in a legal manner,” Keldorn says sternly, but after looking at Nalia, he adds, “but knowing what the young lady underwent during her capture… I am sure that the young Roenall deserved no better fate than that.”
And trying to settle things legally in Athkatla would have been a rather expensive and time consuming process that would probably have failed anyway.
“What… what about Yoshi? Is he… is he dead?” Nalia asks barely oppressing the tears. Immediately I feel Jaheira’s body stiffening, she is sitting alongside me in a large armchair – due to the lack of seats we have been forced to squeeze a bit tighter and she is almost sitting in my lap despite her finding such position quite humiliating.
Bet Theo's quite happy about it, though
.“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation.
Guess he's probably right and it would hurt her more to find out the truth, but I hope this won't be another lie that comes back to haunt him.“Do not be so hasty, young Nalia,” Keldorn interrupts her, “I have a little proposition for you that we should discuss before you make any rash decisions. But in the end it will require that both of us travel to Athkatla and since that is Theodur’s destination as well, we might as well accompany him. Now, before we make any further plans, I realize that you are looking for a place to rest? Or does our young friend Edwin has a strange habit of pronouncing the word ‘tavern’ every five minutes without any reason?”
Aw, poor Eddie
. “Yes, I think so. I will have to convince Lady Maria first and that might prove… dangerous,” Keldorn chuckles.
LOL!
“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
You should have seen that one coming, Theo.Nice chapter
. Hmm - so what's Keldorn planning for Nalia, then?
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“In that case we will definitely look for another inn,” I agree much to Edwin’s dismay, “Jaheira’s well being is more important to me than your personal hygiene, Eddie. You really should have taken a swim back there…”
Nah, I reckon the personal hygiene thing's just an excuse, and what he really wants is to find himself a mirror
He wouldn't really like the sight though, his beard is in terrible shape.
“Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose.
Yes, but you know, at this stage Theo is starting to get more and more frustrated about every reminder.
“We have been marching around for a couple of hours and yet I see no inns. Druid, I issue a warning to you – if we don’t come across a tavern during the next half an hour, there will be a fireball heading right towards your face,” an angry, piercing male voice startles Keldorn.
And then there will be Theo's sword protruding from your guts, Eddie.
Probably, but you know that Edwin's bark is worse than his bite.
“Edwin, calm down. I told you that I have been here before and this place has many inns and taverns. It is just a matter of time and patience, a virtue that you sadly do not possess,” the thick accented female voice is unmistakable and Keldorn instinctively rushes towards the street forgetting that he is in the hammock. As a result he lands on the ground, entangled in the cloth.
LOL! Slow down, Keldorn.
Heh, the man just got a bit too excited.
“Theodur! Theodur! Hold on, lad!” Keldorn speaks aloud and the group of people turns around to stare at him. I have to confess that at first I don’t recognize who this middle aged man is, I have only seen Keldorn when he was wearing his full plate and helmet.
The change of pov mid-paragraph is a bit confusing here - maybe you could either split it or write the whole thing from Theo's pov?
Yes, I was waiting for someone to point it out, I know it's considered a bad style, but when I read it, it seemed rather smooth. I'll change it to Theo's pov, eventually - that would be better.
“Keldorn? Is that you?” I overcome the moment of surprise, “what are you doing here? Enjoying your retirement?”
Well, he was until you came along to muck it up for him...
Well... Theo didn't exactly ask Keldorn to join them...
“See me again?” I ask perplexed, following Keldorn through the small gate leading into his garden. I shoot a questioning look towards Jaheira, but she looks equally puzzled as I. My mouth drops wide open as I see Nalia marching towards me across the freshly mowed lawn, though instead of a happy hug of reunion, I receive a harsh slap on my cheek…
Heh, can't say you didn't deserve that, Theo
Theo: *winces*
“Girl, Theodur did something to alleviate your situation,” Viconia speaks, “he bargained with the Shadow Thieves for them to kill that slime which you called your husband.”
Hmm - should that not be 'who called himself your husband'? Because Nalia probably didn't acknowledge him as her husband, really.
True. Then again, it is Viconia speaking, would she care about the details? But I will most likely rephrase it.
“I can’t say that I approve of such act, it would have been much more sensible to settle this dispute in a legal manner,” Keldorn says sternly, but after looking at Nalia, he adds, “but knowing what the young lady underwent during her capture… I am sure that the young Roenall deserved no better fate than that.”
And trying to settle things legally in Athkatla would have been a rather expensive and time consuming process that would probably have failed anyway.
And I think that Keldorn is likely to realize it.
“What… what about Yoshi? Is he… is he dead?” Nalia asks barely oppressing the tears. Immediately I feel Jaheira’s body stiffening, she is sitting alongside me in a large armchair – due to the lack of seats we have been forced to squeeze a bit tighter and she is almost sitting in my lap despite her finding such position quite humiliating.
Bet Theo's quite happy about it, though
He's probably looking awfully content and smug right now...
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation.
I don't think that it will. Jaheira won't talk about it, I'm sure.
“Do not be so hasty, young Nalia,” Keldorn interrupts her, “I have a little proposition for you that we should discuss before you make any rash decisions. But in the end it will require that both of us travel to Athkatla and since that is Theodur’s destination as well, we might as well accompany him. Now, before we make any further plans, I realize that you are looking for a place to rest? Or does our young friend Edwin has a strange habit of pronouncing the word ‘tavern’ every five minutes without any reason?”
Aw, poor Eddie
Well, he'll get his wish fulfilled
“Yes, I think so. I will have to convince Lady Maria first and that might prove… dangerous,” Keldorn chuckles.
LOL!
I can't see Maria being terribly excited about the news. Even if it is only an innocent trip to Athkatla.
“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
He became a bit too overconfident and paid for it...
Nice chapter
Wait and see?
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[quote] “Here’s one, I see it now! Lemme see… ‘The Broken… Harp’” Imoen points towards a brown three-storied building. [/quote] That name doesn’t bode well.
[quote] “Any other inn, Edwin, but not this one,” Jaheira replies sternly, “this is a meeting place for Harper enemies. I guess it does not matter much as I am no longer a Harper, but still I will not tolerate anyone speaking ill of them. Besides, someone might recognize me from my days as an active Harper and that could create… problems.” [/quote] and they overcharged her for a flaming mai-tai seven years ago.
[quote] “Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose. Imoen immediately grabs me by the shoulders and Viconia jumps on Edwin to keep us separated. [/quote] well actually the only other inn here is called the ‘Stuttering Half-Elf’ but I don’t think that will bring up any memories for Jaheira.
[quote] Quiet summer forenoon and Keldorn is once again happily stretching his slightly rusty limbs in the comfortable hammock – however his thoughts are not very sunny at this moment. Nalia’s fate weighs heavily on his mind – the girl, while being a capable mage, able to defend herself, seems to be still too naïve and trustful. Letting her travel alone to Athkatla is something that Keldorn does not wish to do, especially knowing that most likely that Nalia would end up where most young women without any means of subsistence end up – on the street. [/quote] something tells me Nalia has more resources than most give her credit for.
[quote] On the other hand, Keldorn knows that keeping her here would create some inconveniences in a long term, besides Nalia is quite determined to leave soon in any case. [/quote] stubborn is the word.
[quote] He looks at his elder daughter, deeply enraptured in the conversation with their guest – those two have formed a friendship quickly and Nalia’s tales of her adventuring days are keeping Leona away from any mischief. [/quote] but possibly filling her head with other notions.
[quote] He instantly recognizes Theodur, Jaheira and that irritating drow in the group of five people. The other two are strangers – one of them is a… pink-haired roguish girl who is jumping around the group like an excited puppy and the other is a young human male wearing robes of the… Thayvian Red Wizards! [/quote] Theo does keep interesting company.
[quote] “See me again?” I ask perplexed, following Keldorn through the small gate leading into his garden. I shoot a questioning look towards Jaheira, but she looks equally puzzled as I. My mouth drops wide open as I see Nalia marching towards me across the freshly mowed lawn, though instead of a happy hug of reunion, I receive a harsh slap on my cheek… [/quote] not entirely undeserved
[quote] “What… what about Yoshi? Is he… is he dead?” Nalia asks barely oppressing the tears. Immediately I feel Jaheira’s body stiffening, she is sitting alongside me in a large armchair – due to the lack of seats we have been forced to squeeze a bit tighter and she is almost sitting in my lap despite her finding such position quite humiliating.
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation. [quote] probably much better than the truth at this point.
[quote] “I have a very good reason for that, old man. And address me once again as ‘young friend’ and I will force you to eat those words. Literally,” Edwin snorts. [/quote] One would have thought that respecting ones elders would have been a lesson the red wizards would have ground into Edwin at an early age.
[quote]“Yes, I think so. I will have to convince Lady Maria first and that might prove… dangerous,” Keldorn chuckles. [/quote] kind of makes an undead beholder look friendly doesn’t she?
[quote] “Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath. [/quote] lucky she didn’t aim lower.
Interesting way to bring Keldon and Nalia back into the story. It is always good to know that NPC’s don’t just hang around waiting for you to come and have them join your party.
[quote] “Any other inn, Edwin, but not this one,” Jaheira replies sternly, “this is a meeting place for Harper enemies. I guess it does not matter much as I am no longer a Harper, but still I will not tolerate anyone speaking ill of them. Besides, someone might recognize me from my days as an active Harper and that could create… problems.” [/quote] and they overcharged her for a flaming mai-tai seven years ago.
[quote] “Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose. Imoen immediately grabs me by the shoulders and Viconia jumps on Edwin to keep us separated. [/quote] well actually the only other inn here is called the ‘Stuttering Half-Elf’ but I don’t think that will bring up any memories for Jaheira.
[quote] Quiet summer forenoon and Keldorn is once again happily stretching his slightly rusty limbs in the comfortable hammock – however his thoughts are not very sunny at this moment. Nalia’s fate weighs heavily on his mind – the girl, while being a capable mage, able to defend herself, seems to be still too naïve and trustful. Letting her travel alone to Athkatla is something that Keldorn does not wish to do, especially knowing that most likely that Nalia would end up where most young women without any means of subsistence end up – on the street. [/quote] something tells me Nalia has more resources than most give her credit for.
[quote] On the other hand, Keldorn knows that keeping her here would create some inconveniences in a long term, besides Nalia is quite determined to leave soon in any case. [/quote] stubborn is the word.
[quote] He looks at his elder daughter, deeply enraptured in the conversation with their guest – those two have formed a friendship quickly and Nalia’s tales of her adventuring days are keeping Leona away from any mischief. [/quote] but possibly filling her head with other notions.
[quote] He instantly recognizes Theodur, Jaheira and that irritating drow in the group of five people. The other two are strangers – one of them is a… pink-haired roguish girl who is jumping around the group like an excited puppy and the other is a young human male wearing robes of the… Thayvian Red Wizards! [/quote] Theo does keep interesting company.
[quote] “See me again?” I ask perplexed, following Keldorn through the small gate leading into his garden. I shoot a questioning look towards Jaheira, but she looks equally puzzled as I. My mouth drops wide open as I see Nalia marching towards me across the freshly mowed lawn, though instead of a happy hug of reunion, I receive a harsh slap on my cheek… [/quote] not entirely undeserved
[quote] “What… what about Yoshi? Is he… is he dead?” Nalia asks barely oppressing the tears. Immediately I feel Jaheira’s body stiffening, she is sitting alongside me in a large armchair – due to the lack of seats we have been forced to squeeze a bit tighter and she is almost sitting in my lap despite her finding such position quite humiliating.
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation. [quote] probably much better than the truth at this point.
[quote] “I have a very good reason for that, old man. And address me once again as ‘young friend’ and I will force you to eat those words. Literally,” Edwin snorts. [/quote] One would have thought that respecting ones elders would have been a lesson the red wizards would have ground into Edwin at an early age.
[quote]“Yes, I think so. I will have to convince Lady Maria first and that might prove… dangerous,” Keldorn chuckles. [/quote] kind of makes an undead beholder look friendly doesn’t she?
[quote] “Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath. [/quote] lucky she didn’t aim lower.
Interesting way to bring Keldon and Nalia back into the story. It is always good to know that NPC’s don’t just hang around waiting for you to come and have them join your party.
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That name doesn’t bode well.“Here’s one, I see it now! Lemme see… ‘The Broken… Harp’” Imoen points towards a brown three-storied building.
Nay, they better not go in there.
and they overcharged her for a flaming mai-tai seven years ago.“Any other inn, Edwin, but not this one,” Jaheira replies sternly, “this is a meeting place for Harper enemies. I guess it does not matter much as I am no longer a Harper, but still I will not tolerate anyone speaking ill of them. Besides, someone might recognize me from my days as an active Harper and that could create… problems.”
Hehe, and the consequences of that would not be easy to forget...
well actually the only other inn here is called the ‘Stuttering Half-Elf’ but I don’t think that will bring up any memories for Jaheira.“Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose. Imoen immediately grabs me by the shoulders and Viconia jumps on Edwin to keep us separated.
Oooh, that's mean! I should have thought of that!
something tells me Nalia has more resources than most give her credit for.Quiet summer forenoon and Keldorn is once again happily stretching his slightly rusty limbs in the comfortable hammock – however his thoughts are not very sunny at this moment. Nalia’s fate weighs heavily on his mind – the girl, while being a capable mage, able to defend herself, seems to be still too naïve and trustful. Letting her travel alone to Athkatla is something that Keldorn does not wish to do, especially knowing that most likely that Nalia would end up where most young women without any means of subsistence end up – on the street.
That's true... though her thief skills are quite lacking...
stubborn is the word.On the other hand, Keldorn knows that keeping her here would create some inconveniences in a long term, besides Nalia is quite determined to leave soon in any case.
Stubborness is an attribute I associate with Nalia.
but possibly filling her head with other notions.He looks at his elder daughter, deeply enraptured in the conversation with their guest – those two have formed a friendship quickly and Nalia’s tales of her adventuring days are keeping Leona away from any mischief.
And those could be much more dangerous.
Theo does keep interesting company.He instantly recognizes Theodur, Jaheira and that irritating drow in the group of five people. The other two are strangers – one of them is a… pink-haired roguish girl who is jumping around the group like an excited puppy and the other is a young human male wearing robes of the… Thayvian Red Wizards!
I love a bit of strife in the party... it would be boring if they would all get along, all the time...
not entirely undeserved“See me again?” I ask perplexed, following Keldorn through the small gate leading into his garden. I shoot a questioning look towards Jaheira, but she looks equally puzzled as I. My mouth drops wide open as I see Nalia marching towards me across the freshly mowed lawn, though instead of a happy hug of reunion, I receive a harsh slap on my cheek…
No argument there.
probably much better than the truth at this point.
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation.
Besides, would that kind of truth do anyone good?
One would have thought that respecting ones elders would have been a lesson the red wizards would have ground into Edwin at an early age.“I have a very good reason for that, old man. And address me once again as ‘young friend’ and I will force you to eat those words. Literally,” Edwin snorts.
He probably respects his elders. Back in Thay, that is.
kind of makes an undead beholder look friendly doesn’t she?“Yes, I think so. I will have to convince Lady Maria first and that might prove… dangerous,” Keldorn chuckles.
I think Keldorn will choose Maria any day, despite the danger...
lucky she didn’t aim lower.“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
It's not in her interests to do that.
Interesting way to bring Keldon and Nalia back into the story. It is always good to know that NPC’s don’t just hang around waiting for you to come and have them join your party.
Yep, I agree. I had to somehow free Nalia from her predicament and I like writing Keldorn, so I figured out a way to bring them back both at once. I felt I needed a bit more musclepower to make the fights in Suldanessellar more credible.
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“In that case we will definitely look for another inn,” I agree much to Edwin’s dismay, “Jaheira’s well being is more important to me than your personal hygiene, Eddie. You really should have taken a swim back there…”
He does get grouchy if he doesn't get to wash.
“Eddie, Jaheira lost her family during the Ten Black Days… you have to understand that she does not want to be reminded of that in such fashion,” I try to explain it to our wizard, but he seems rather excited.
“Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose. Imoen immediately grabs me by the shoulders and Viconia jumps on Edwin to keep us separated.
Ah, classical Edwin Diplomacy.
Quiet summer forenoon and Keldorn is once again happily stretching his slightly rusty limbs in the comfortable hammock – however his thoughts are not very sunny at this moment. Nalia’s fate weighs heavily on his mind – the girl, while being a capable mage, able to defend herself, seems to be still too naïve and trustful. Letting her travel alone to Athkatla is something that Keldorn does not wish to do, especially knowing that most likely that Nalia would end up where most young women without any means of subsistence end up – on the street.
Think there's an extra 'that' in the final sentence. It should be 'knowing that most likely Nalia'
“We have been marching around for a couple of hours and yet I see no inns. Druid, I issue a warning to you – if we don’t come across a tavern during the next half an hour, there will be a fireball heading right towards your face,” an angry, piercing male voice startles Keldorn.
He instantly recognizes Theodur, Jaheira and that irritating drow in the group of five people. The other two are strangers – one of them is a… pink-haired roguish girl who is jumping around the group like an excited puppy and the other is a young human male wearing robes of the… Thayvian Red Wizards!
“Theodur! Theodur! Hold on, lad!” Keldorn speaks aloud and the group of people turns around to stare at him. I have to confess that at first I don’t recognize who this middle aged man is, I have only seen Keldorn when he was wearing his full plate and helmet.
You switch POV here, from Keldorn to Theo. I think it might be a good idea to put in a little breaker or something between the paragraphs, to ease the transition.
“See me again?” I ask perplexed, following Keldorn through the small gate leading into his garden. I shoot a questioning look towards Jaheira, but she looks equally puzzled as I. My mouth drops wide open as I see Nalia marching towards me across the freshly mowed lawn, though instead of a happy hug of reunion, I receive a harsh slap on my cheek…
Well, I can't blame her really.
“Perhaps we can go inside and then Theodur can tell us about his adventures of late,” Keldorn suggests and I happily agree. Even Edwin seems to have calmed down a notch and is seemingly forgotten about his needs for a clean and nice inn.
'has seemingly forgotten'
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation.
Probably far better this way, yes.
“Do not be so hasty, young Nalia,” Keldorn interrupts her, “I have a little proposition for you that we should discuss before you make any rash decisions. But in the end it will require that both of us travel to Athkatla and since that is Theodur’s destination as well, we might as well accompany him. Now, before we make any further plans, I realize that you are looking for a place to rest? Or does our young friend Edwin has a strange habit of pronouncing the word ‘tavern’ every five minutes without any reason?”
“I have a very good reason for that, old man. And address me once again as ‘young friend’ and I will force you to eat those words. Literally,” Edwin snorts.
*grin* And yet more Edwin Diplomacy...
“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
LOL! Theo definitely deserved *that* one!
Rogues do it from behind.
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“In that case we will definitely look for another inn,” I agree much to Edwin’s dismay, “Jaheira’s well being is more important to me than your personal hygiene, Eddie. You really should have taken a swim back there…”
He does get grouchy if he doesn't get to wash.
You mean, more grouchy than usual, of course
“Of course… and if the next inn will be called ‘Faithful Wife’, what then? Will she turn down that one as well?” Edwin barks out mockingly, but quickly jumps a few paces back to avoid my fist heading in the direction of his nose. Imoen immediately grabs me by the shoulders and Viconia jumps on Edwin to keep us separated.
Ah, classical Edwin Diplomacy.
Yes, a very good example of that...
Quiet summer forenoon and Keldorn is once again happily stretching his slightly rusty limbs in the comfortable hammock – however his thoughts are not very sunny at this moment. Nalia’s fate weighs heavily on his mind – the girl, while being a capable mage, able to defend herself, seems to be still too naïve and trustful. Letting her travel alone to Athkatla is something that Keldorn does not wish to do, especially knowing that most likely that Nalia would end up where most young women without any means of subsistence end up – on the street.
Think there's an extra 'that' in the final sentence. It should be 'knowing that most likely Nalia'
Yep.
“We have been marching around for a couple of hours and yet I see no inns. Druid, I issue a warning to you – if we don’t come across a tavern during the next half an hour, there will be a fireball heading right towards your face,” an angry, piercing male voice startles Keldorn.
Eddie's temper is as fiery as his red robe...
“Theodur! Theodur! Hold on, lad!” Keldorn speaks aloud and the group of people turns around to stare at him. I have to confess that at first I don’t recognize who this middle aged man is, I have only seen Keldorn when he was wearing his full plate and helmet.
You switch POV here, from Keldorn to Theo. I think it might be a good idea to put in a little breaker or something between the paragraphs, to ease the transition.
You are correct. Some folks are very perceptive to these POV changes, I am not amongst them, I'm afraid...
“See me again?” I ask perplexed, following Keldorn through the small gate leading into his garden. I shoot a questioning look towards Jaheira, but she looks equally puzzled as I. My mouth drops wide open as I see Nalia marching towards me across the freshly mowed lawn, though instead of a happy hug of reunion, I receive a harsh slap on my cheek…
Well, I can't blame her really.
Yes, I think so too and Theo does not protest about it either.
“Perhaps we can go inside and then Theodur can tell us about his adventures of late,” Keldorn suggests and I happily agree. Even Edwin seems to have calmed down a notch and is seemingly forgotten about his needs for a clean and nice inn.
'has seemingly forgotten'
Thanks.
“I am sorry, Nalia. He died… we… we were ambushed and overwhelmed. He fought bravely, but there was nothing we could do. His passing was easy, he did not suffer,” I lie, as I do not want to make Nalia even more upset than she already is. Luckily Jaheira soon relaxes and does not raise any objections about these white lies. Nalia takes a little time to weep quietly, before we can resume our conversation.
Probably far better this way, yes.
It's one of those occasions where nobody would benefit from the truth.
“I have a very good reason for that, old man. And address me once again as ‘young friend’ and I will force you to eat those words. Literally,” Edwin snorts.
*grin* And yet more Edwin Diplomacy...
And he doesn't even know yet that Keldy's a paladin...
“Well… I wish you luck with that, Keldorn. We shall be going then and will see you both again in the morning,” I speak and gently tap on Jaheira’s bottom in order to get her moving. Her response is an elbow in my stomach and I leave Keldorn’s estate clutching my belly and fighting hard to recover my breath.
LOL! Theo definitely deserved *that* one!
Oh, most definitely - Jae doesn't like being pawed in public!
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