The last chapter of the Underdark section… I am not particularly happy with this one, but it will have to do. I will probably kick off the Chapter 6 on Monday.
I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing. And because of that pace, I am currently suffering with a bit of a burnout… well, the good thing is that I've got to the point where Irenicus is a history – I was a bit tired of the slightly linear game-plot that started as the party left for Spellhold… it’s time to write the ‘relatively-original’ stuff.
Rush Of Blood To The Head, part 5.25.
“Vic? Vicky? Are you already asleep?” Imoen’s quiet voice cuts off Viconia’s trail of thoughts as the drow has found it impossible to find sleep again.
“I am awake… what is it you want, Imoen?” Viconia sighs, turning around to face Imoen, but the latter is looking away from her as she speaks.
“I… I wanted to… no, its nothing… oh, actually I was supposed to be sleeping, silly me,” Imoen yawns theatrically and falls silent.
“Oh no… don’t play these games with me, little one. Nobody disturbs my rest over nothing,” Viconia’s voice takes an edge, “now, I demand that you tell me what you intended to say.”
“Er… I forgot what it was…” Imoen tries to wiggle out.
“It won’t work, Imoen,” Viconia adds a warning, “speak, unless you want to make me angry.”
“Umm… Vic? I just wanted you to ask something… but I’m afraid you won’t like it… promise you won’t be angry, Vic?” Imoen sounds pleading.
“How can I promise that I won’t be angry if I don’t know what your question will be?” Viconia asks, but seeing that Imoen is about to turn away, adds, “very well, I promise… I’ll not be mad at you, regardless of the question.”
“Aww… you are so sweet, Vic…” Imoen purrs, “So… ah, yes… well, I wanted to know, seeing how disdainful you are towards Theo and Jaheira… have you ever been… in love, Vic?”
“In… love? What kind of question is that?”
“Well… you know all that caring about someone stuff and so on…” Imoen sounds just as confused as the Drow beside her…
“Caring about someone… that stirs up memories,” Viconia sighs, “memories, that I never wanted to touch again. Yes… I suppose, I did care about someone, once in the past – my poor, foolish brother. Valas.”
“Why poor, Vic? Something… bad happened to him?”
“You can say that, little one… do you want to hear the tale?” Viconia asks and Imoen hastily confirms her interest with a nod of the head.
“He was… not like any other drow male… He was my childhood friend… perhaps my only friend, ever. He was a shifty and cunning boy, always tended to cause mischief and pull pranks on those stone-faced handmaidens… you remind me of him a bit, Imoen…” Viconia adds with a sigh, before continuing, “He grew up to become a useful wizard…”
“Awww, just like me?” Imoen asks in a hopeful voice.
“Yes… much like you,” Viconia admits after a brief thought, “and he protected and watched over me, and in return I ensured that he was spared many of the indignities that a drow male can be exposed to. In the end, he… saved my life.”
“What happened, Vic? Vic, are you alright?” Imoen asks concerned before sneaking over to rest beside the drow, “Are those tears in your eyes, Vic? Please… tell me everything…”
“I was about to be sacrificed on the Lolth’s altar, Imoen,” Viconia’s voice is trembling, “he… he freed me with his magic and then killed our mother so I could flee. Lolth was outraged about his act of defiance… she… she turned him into a drider, a half-drow, half-spider creature. He was wiped away… replaced by that monster…”
“Aw… I’m so sorry, Vic… you poor thing, lemme hold you and you’ll feel much better,” Imoen wraps her hands around Viconia’s waist and snuggles closer to the Drow. Viconia finds herself too weak to push the young woman away and her lack of strength disgusts her at first, but… the feeling of Imoen’s warm body against hers is much more pleasant than she could ever dare to admit…
“Vicky? But the love you felt for Valas is different from what… for example, what Theo and Jaheira feel for each other… have you ever loved any of your… well… partners in bed?” Imoen silently whispers in Viconia’s ear.
“No, that kind of feelings are a weakness I cannot allow… to leave yourself so dependant from another person is outright disgusting… it only makes one weak and submissive,” Viconia pulls back from Imoen’s embrace, but Imoen draws her back.
“That is… well, that is just a load of bullshit and you know it, Vicky…” Imoen’s voice is more determined than Viconia ever remembers it to be, “just look at Theo and Jaheira – how much strength they draw from each other… love does not make one weaker, it gives you another source of strength… I believe that.”
“I have never heard you speak with such conviction, Imoen,” Viconia chuckles, “but… what would you know of love? And… why are you telling me this?”
“I… don’t know much, if anything, of love, Vic… but I know that I want to find out everything there is to find… and I thought… well, perhaps… I…” the light in the cavern is bright enough for Viconia to see that Imoen’s cheeks have taken a shade of red…
“Imoen… little one… just rest here with me while I think over what you just said,” Viconia’s voice is gentle.
“After we get out of this hole… Do you remember that surprise I promised for you, Imoen? Want to hear what I had in mind?” Viconia asks quietly after a while and Imoen nods excitedly. Viconia leans even closer and her warm breath as she whispers in Imoen’s ear, makes the young mage slightly giddy.
“You really think so, Vic? I mean… isn’t that a little radical?” Imoen sounds unconvinced, but Viconia continues to whisper arguments in her ear until Imoen gives up, “oh… alright… but that will be weird… jeez, I can’t imagine… Vic, are you sure? I wonder what Theo and the others will say…”
“But you do like to surprise your friends, don’t you?” Viconia grins, “now, let us try to resume sleeping… you… you can stay here, with me if you wish…” she adds hesitantly and Imoen smiles broadly.
“Ahem, I apologize for interrupting you, but we should start getting ready,” I look at the two sleeping women, embraced, holding each other close – at my words they wake slowly and disengage from each other as soon as they realize what is going on.
“So… let me guess,” I snicker, “Vic had a bad dream and you came to comfort her, right?”
“I don’t see it being any concern of yours, jaluk,” Viconia retorts angrily, seeing the blush on Imoen’s face.
“I am not concerned,” I shrug, “whatever is going on between you two, I wish you the best. But we have a long road ahead of us and this is perhaps not the best time for…”
“Jaheira up already?” Imoen senses that the conversation is becoming too embarrassing for her and swiftly changes the topic.
“Er… yeah, but she’s a bit… drowsy so don’t hurry too much with your preparations…” now is my turn to blush.
“Ah, so you managed to wear her out… well done, Theo,” Viconia laughs.
“Well… she’s not in her top-form yet…” I laugh back, before retreating back to my sleeping place, where Jaheira is still wallowing around in her blankets.
“What… what was that all about?” Imoen exclaims absentmindedly, watching as I leave.
“I have no idea, whatsoever…” Viconia replies, “as I said, love only makes you act like a complete fool… and Theo is the fool, I meant,” she adds quickly.
I try to stifle the laughter about their cluelessness all the way back... Jaheira is still drowsing as I return, so I choose to sit beside her and play with locks of her hair until she finally opens her sleepy eyes and smiles at me warmly.
“Morning, beautiful,” I chuckle, “rested well? You seem a bit… exhausted…”
“Nonsense…” she mutters, “though I seem to have… ah… misjudged the level of my endurance after that unfortunate mishap in the caves…”
“Oh, worry not… you have always been so strong and unbreakable during our travels so this period of weakness comes as a sudden, unexpected, but also in a way… pleasant change. And I think that you also enjoy being nursed for once, am I right?” I smile before leaning down to kiss her.
“As I have said before…” she exclaims in-between the kisses, “I don’t mind if you take… mmmph… initiative from time to time…”
“Oh, judging by that bickering, Vic and Immy have waked up Eddie,” I conclude, disengaging from her grasp, “we better get moving as he is not known for his enormous patience… if we tarry for too long there will be fireballs flying around soon…”
“Well, it is not that I care of what Edwin thinks, but on the other hand I suppose we should get going,” Jaheira says and tosses aside her blanket leaving me breathless once again… While she slowly and teasingly dresses herself, I vainly try to extinguish the burning flames of desire burning inside me. Having excused myself, I make a short walk to the small pool in the middle of the grotto and dump my head in the ice-cold water…
Rush Of Blood To The Head, part 5.25.
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Thank you. I'm still slightly... hmm, unconvinced, about what *seems* to be happening between those two. And when the writer can't really convince himself, then obviously something is not fully right. Hopefully I can figure it out before too long. Anyways, I'm glad that you liked it. 
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Thank you. I'm still slightly... hmm, unconvinced, about what *seems* to be happening between those two. And when the writer can't really convince himself, then obviously something is not fully right. Hopefully I can figure it out before too long. Anyways, I'm glad that you liked it.
Well with the way you are portraying them I would say that they would make a pretty good couple as they seem to be growing steadily closer and I liked it very muchly
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I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks
*Sighs* I envy you - today it took me an hour to write 89 words, which was a little depressing.
, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing. And because of that pace, I am currently suffering with a bit of a burnout… well, the good thing is that I've got to the point where Irenicus is a history – I was a bit tired of the slightly linear game-plot that started as the party left for Spellhold… it’s time to write the ‘relatively-original’ stuff.
Yes - it's hard to be original with the end of the game plot, really.
“I have never heard you speak with such conviction, Imoen,” Viconia chuckles, “but… what would you know of love? And… why are you telling me this?”
“I… don’t know much, if anything, of love, Vic… but I know that I want to find out everything there is to find… and I thought… well, perhaps… I…” the light in the cavern is bright enough for Viconia to see that Imoen’s cheeks have taken a shade of red…
Heh - yes, this has been coming for a long time now.
As for it being convincing - I'm not sure. I have to say I look forward a lot more to the chapters about Theo and Jaheira than the chapters about Immy and Vic - but that is probably because whilst I don't dislike either Immy or Vic, neither of them are among my favourite NPCs.
I thought the friendship that you developed between them was very believable, but when it comes to going further than that maybe I'm not 100% convinced. It's difficult, though, because the first person perspective makes it hard for you to show their povs.
But it is not a case of 'oh no, this relationship just does not work for me and is going to spoil the whole story', or anything like that. I am glad things seem to be working out for Immy and Vic and I will be interested to see what happens between them - it's just that I don't care as much about them as I do about Theo and Jaheira.
“I am not concerned,” I shrug, “whatever is going on between you two, I wish you the best. But we have a long road ahead of us and this is perhaps not the best time for…”
Uh...Theo? I seem to remember that last night someone made the group stop early because he was desperate to spend some time with a certain druid...
I try to stifle the laughter about their cluelessness all the way back... Jaheira is still drowsing as I return, so I choose to sit beside her and play with locks of her hair until she finally opens her sleepy eyes and smiles at me warmly.
Aww...
“Oh, judging by that bickering, Vic and Immy have waked up Eddie,” I conclude, disengaging from her grasp, “we better get moving as he is not known for his enormous patience… if we tarry for too long there will be fireballs flying around soon…”
LOL! Get Eddie to cook breakfast while he's waiting, then.
“Well, it is not that I care of what Edwin thinks, but on the other hand I suppose we should get going,” Jaheira says and tosses aside her blanket leaving me breathless once again… While she slowly and teasingly dresses herself, I vainly try to extinguish the burning flames of desire burning inside me. Having excused myself, I make a short walk to the small pool in the middle of the grotto and dump my head in the ice-cold water…
Only his head?
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[quote] The last chapter of the Underdark section… I am not particularly happy with this one, but it will have to do. I will probably kick off the Chapter 6 on Monday. [/qutoe] Can’t wait.
[quote]I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing. And because of that pace, I am currently suffering with a bit of a burnout… well, the good thing is that I've got to the point where Irenicus is a history – I was a bit tired of the slightly linear game-plot that started as the party left for Spellhold… it’s time to write the ‘relatively-original’ stuff. [/quote] sounds like you need a vacation to recover from your vacation.
[quote] “Aww… you are so sweet, Vic…” Imoen purrs, “So… ah, yes… well, I wanted to know, seeing how disdainful you are towards Theo and Jaheira… have you ever been… in love, Vic?”
“In… love ? What kind of question is that?” [/quote] A very difficult question. Good questions are usually those difficult to answer honestly.
[quote] “Caring about someone… that stirs up memories,” Viconia sighs, “memories, that I never wanted to touch again. Yes… I suppose, I did care about someone, once in the past – my poor, foolish brother. Valas.” [/quote] It is hard to imagine Vic as a child, any drow as a child really.
[quote] “I was about to be sacrificed on the Lolth’s altar, Imoen,” Viconia’s voice is trembling, “he… he freed me with his magic and then killed our mother so I could flee. Lolth was outraged about his act of defiance… she… she turned him into a drider, a half-drow, half-spider creature. He was wiped away… replaced by that monster…” [/quote] I really have to start wondering how the drow survive at all.
[quote] “Aw… I’m so sorry, Vic… you poor thing, lemme hold you and you’ll feel much better,” Imoen wraps her hands around Viconia’s waist and snuggles closer to the Drow. Viconia finds herself too weak to push the young woman away and her lack of strength disgusts her at first, but… the feeling of Imoen’s warm body against hers is much more pleasant than she could ever dare to admit… [/quote] Theodur, have you been reading the “Baldur’s Gate” novels?
[quote] “No, that kind of feelings are a weakness I cannot allow… to leave yourself so dependant from another person is outright disgusting… it only makes one weak and submissive,” Viconia pulls back from Imoen’s embrace, but Imoen draws her back. [/quote] and lonely
[quote] “Nonsense…” she mutters, “though I seem to have… ah… misjudged the level of my endurance after that unfortunate mishap in the caves…” [/quote] um…sure…I buy that excuse.
[quote] “Oh, judging by that bickering, Vic and Immy have waked up Eddie,” I conclude, disengaging from her grasp, “we better get moving as he is not known for his enormous patience… if we tarry for too long there will be fireballs flying around soon…” [/quote] Just give Eddie a mirror, he will be happy.
I am getting very eager to know just what surprise Imoen and Vic have in store.
[quote]I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing. And because of that pace, I am currently suffering with a bit of a burnout… well, the good thing is that I've got to the point where Irenicus is a history – I was a bit tired of the slightly linear game-plot that started as the party left for Spellhold… it’s time to write the ‘relatively-original’ stuff. [/quote] sounds like you need a vacation to recover from your vacation.
[quote] “Aww… you are so sweet, Vic…” Imoen purrs, “So… ah, yes… well, I wanted to know, seeing how disdainful you are towards Theo and Jaheira… have you ever been… in love, Vic?”
“In… love ? What kind of question is that?” [/quote] A very difficult question. Good questions are usually those difficult to answer honestly.
[quote] “Caring about someone… that stirs up memories,” Viconia sighs, “memories, that I never wanted to touch again. Yes… I suppose, I did care about someone, once in the past – my poor, foolish brother. Valas.” [/quote] It is hard to imagine Vic as a child, any drow as a child really.
[quote] “I was about to be sacrificed on the Lolth’s altar, Imoen,” Viconia’s voice is trembling, “he… he freed me with his magic and then killed our mother so I could flee. Lolth was outraged about his act of defiance… she… she turned him into a drider, a half-drow, half-spider creature. He was wiped away… replaced by that monster…” [/quote] I really have to start wondering how the drow survive at all.
[quote] “Aw… I’m so sorry, Vic… you poor thing, lemme hold you and you’ll feel much better,” Imoen wraps her hands around Viconia’s waist and snuggles closer to the Drow. Viconia finds herself too weak to push the young woman away and her lack of strength disgusts her at first, but… the feeling of Imoen’s warm body against hers is much more pleasant than she could ever dare to admit… [/quote] Theodur, have you been reading the “Baldur’s Gate” novels?
[quote] “No, that kind of feelings are a weakness I cannot allow… to leave yourself so dependant from another person is outright disgusting… it only makes one weak and submissive,” Viconia pulls back from Imoen’s embrace, but Imoen draws her back. [/quote] and lonely
[quote] “Nonsense…” she mutters, “though I seem to have… ah… misjudged the level of my endurance after that unfortunate mishap in the caves…” [/quote] um…sure…I buy that excuse.
[quote] “Oh, judging by that bickering, Vic and Immy have waked up Eddie,” I conclude, disengaging from her grasp, “we better get moving as he is not known for his enormous patience… if we tarry for too long there will be fireballs flying around soon…” [/quote] Just give Eddie a mirror, he will be happy.
I am getting very eager to know just what surprise Imoen and Vic have in store.
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I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks
*Sighs* I envy you - today it took me an hour to write 89 words, which was a little depressing.
Oh... well, I must admit that I sometimes have real trouble when I resume writing - I might spend the first hour writing a paragraph and deleting it over and over again. So, sometimes I don't even write a word in the first hour of writing... but when I get over the start, it seems to get better.
, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing. And because of that pace, I am currently suffering with a bit of a burnout… well, the good thing is that I've got to the point where Irenicus is a history – I was a bit tired of the slightly linear game-plot that started as the party left for Spellhold… it’s time to write the ‘relatively-original’ stuff.
Yes - it's hard to be original with the end of the game plot, really.
There will be twists along the way, I promise!
“I have never heard you speak with such conviction, Imoen,” Viconia chuckles, “but… what would you know of love? And… why are you telling me this?”
“I… don’t know much, if anything, of love, Vic… but I know that I want to find out everything there is to find… and I thought… well, perhaps… I…” the light in the cavern is bright enough for Viconia to see that Imoen’s cheeks have taken a shade of red…
Heh - yes, this has been coming for a long time now.
Yes, not that I really tried to hide it.
As for it being convincing - I'm not sure. I have to say I look forward a lot more to the chapters about Theo and Jaheira than the chapters about Immy and Vic - but that is probably because whilst I don't dislike either Immy or Vic, neither of them are among my favourite NPCs.
I don't think you have to be concerned about Theo and Jaheira losing air time. Maybe a bit, but I will not be concentrating on Viconia and Imoen that much.
I thought the friendship that you developed between them was very believable, but when it comes to going further than that maybe I'm not 100% convinced. It's difficult, though, because the first person perspective makes it hard for you to show their povs.
You're echoing my own doubts here. On both points - about it not being fully convincing and about that it would be hard to make it more convincing from my chosen writing perspective.
But it is not a case of 'oh no, this relationship just does not work for me and is going to spoil the whole story', or anything like that. I am glad things seem to be working out for Immy and Vic and I will be interested to see what happens between them - it's just that I don't care as much about them as I do about Theo and Jaheira.
Ok. One thing I will reveal then. I did not bring those two together to write a 'they-lived-happily-ever-after' romance. Oh no. It serves a purpose - it will create more dynamic interactions between the party... especailly considering who will be joining them shortly. I have some very specific twists that require that Imoen and Viconia are together... and they will be... hmm, interesting.
Hope that addresses your concerns a bit. As always, your feedback was greatly appreciated.
“I am not concerned,” I shrug, “whatever is going on between you two, I wish you the best. But we have a long road ahead of us and this is perhaps not the best time for…”
Uh...Theo? I seem to remember that last night someone made the group stop early because he was desperate to spend some time with a certain druid...
Leader's privileges...
I try to stifle the laughter about their cluelessness all the way back... Jaheira is still drowsing as I return, so I choose to sit beside her and play with locks of her hair until she finally opens her sleepy eyes and smiles at me warmly.
Aww...
Yes, I know... can't stop being mushy...
“Oh, judging by that bickering, Vic and Immy have waked up Eddie,” I conclude, disengaging from her grasp, “we better get moving as he is not known for his enormous patience… if we tarry for too long there will be fireballs flying around soon…”
LOL! Get Eddie to cook breakfast while he's waiting, then.
Ah, I needed to mention somewhere that Eddie's the party's cook.
“Well, it is not that I care of what Edwin thinks, but on the other hand I suppose we should get going,” Jaheira says and tosses aside her blanket leaving me breathless once again… While she slowly and teasingly dresses herself, I vainly try to extinguish the burning flames of desire burning inside me. Having excused myself, I make a short walk to the small pool in the middle of the grotto and dump my head in the ice-cold water…
Only his head?
That will do, I think... for now...
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Can’t wait.The last chapter of the Underdark section… I am not particularly happy with this one, but it will have to do. I will probably kick off the Chapter 6 on Monday.
You're piling a great weight of expectations on my shoulders...
sounds like you need a vacation to recover from your vacation.I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing. And because of that pace, I am currently suffering with a bit of a burnout… well, the good thing is that I've got to the point where Irenicus is a history – I was a bit tired of the slightly linear game-plot that started as the party left for Spellhold… it’s time to write the ‘relatively-original’ stuff.
LOL, what concerns writing, yes...
“Aww… you are so sweet, Vic…” Imoen purrs, “So… ah, yes… well, I wanted to know, seeing how disdainful you are towards Theo and Jaheira… have you ever been… in love, Vic?”
A very difficult question. Good questions are usually those difficult to answer honestly.“In… love ? What kind of question is that?”
Especially, if you don't really know the answer...
It is hard to imagine Vic as a child, any drow as a child really.“Caring about someone… that stirs up memories,” Viconia sighs, “memories, that I never wanted to touch again. Yes… I suppose, I did care about someone, once in the past – my poor, foolish brother. Valas.”
Ah, you need to read Weyoun's 'Little Vierna' (Viconia's daughter) stories then...
Though, she didn't grow up in the Underdark... which is a difference. I really have to start wondering how the drow survive at all.“I was about to be sacrificed on the Lolth’s altar, Imoen,” Viconia’s voice is trembling, “he… he freed me with his magic and then killed our mother so I could flee. Lolth was outraged about his act of defiance… she… she turned him into a drider, a half-drow, half-spider creature. He was wiped away… replaced by that monster…”
Considering that elven period of gestation is 2 years (iirc), it's quite unbelievable. I suppose their females should be 'always' pregnant, just to balance out the death toll.
Theodur, have you been reading the “Baldur’s Gate” novels?“Aw… I’m so sorry, Vic… you poor thing, lemme hold you and you’ll feel much better,” Imoen wraps her hands around Viconia’s waist and snuggles closer to the Drow. Viconia finds herself too weak to push the young woman away and her lack of strength disgusts her at first, but… the feeling of Imoen’s warm body against hers is much more pleasant than she could ever dare to admit…
GAH! NO! But I've been told enough to know what they revolve about... I will never touch them. I think that their authors should be beaten and tortured and made sure that they never write again. GRRR!
No, I don't think that Imoen has a fetish for drow-females...
But I seem to recall a few interjections in the game where Imoen was quite protective of Viconia... so I took it a step further. um…sure…I buy that excuse.“Nonsense…” she mutters, “though I seem to have… ah… misjudged the level of my endurance after that unfortunate mishap in the caves…”
Poor Jaheira...
Just give Eddie a mirror, he will be happy.“Oh, judging by that bickering, Vic and Immy have waked up Eddie,” I conclude, disengaging from her grasp, “we better get moving as he is not known for his enormous patience… if we tarry for too long there will be fireballs flying around soon…”
First thing they will buy on the surface...
I am getting very eager to know just what surprise Imoen and Vic have in store.
Hmm... yes, I thought about giving more clues in this chapter, but decided against it. It's not really realistic to guess, but it will soon be revealed.
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The last chapter of the Underdark section… I am not particularly happy with this one, but it will have to do. I will probably kick off the Chapter 6 on Monday.
I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing. And because of that pace, I am currently suffering with a bit of a burnout… well, the good thing is that I've got to the point where Irenicus is a history – I was a bit tired of the slightly linear game-plot that started as the party left for Spellhold… it’s time to write the ‘relatively-original’ stuff.
Yeah, I know how that is - when I try to force myself to write too quickly I wind up feeling burnt out afterwards. Get some rest, would you?
“Oh no… don’t play these games with me, little one. Nobody disturbs my rest over nothing,” Viconia’s voice takes an edge, “now, I demand that you tell me what you intended to say.”
“Er… I forgot what it was…” Imoen tries to wiggle out.
Right.
“Caring about someone… that stirs up memories,” Viconia sighs, “memories, that I never wanted to touch again. Yes… I suppose, I did care about someone, once in the past – my poor, foolish brother. Valas.”
“Why poor, Vic? Something… bad happened to him?”
You could say that.
“He was… not like any other drow male… He was my childhood friend… perhaps my only friend, ever. He was a shifty and cunning boy, always tended to cause mischief and pull pranks on those stone-faced handmaidens… you remind me of him a bit, Imoen…” Viconia adds with a sigh, before continuing, “He grew up to become a useful wizard…”
“Awww, just like me?” Imoen asks in a hopeful voice.
Oh yes, I hadn't thought about that, but it *would* appeal to Vic!
“No, that kind of feelings are a weakness I cannot allow… to leave yourself so dependant from another person is outright disgusting… it only makes one weak and submissive,” Viconia pulls back from Imoen’s embrace, but Imoen draws her back.
“That is… well, that is just a load of bullshit and you know it, Vicky…” Imoen’s voice is more determined than Viconia ever remembers it to be, “just look at Theo and Jaheira – how much strength they draw from each other… love does not make one weaker, it gives you another source of strength… I believe that.”
Immy is right - but for a wounded person like Viconia it is hard to believe.
“After we get out of this hole… Do you remember that surprise I promised for you, Imoen? Want to hear what I had in mind?” Viconia asks quietly after a while and Imoen nods excitedly. Viconia leans even closer and her warm breath as she whispers in Imoen’s ear, makes the young mage slightly giddy.
“You really think so, Vic? I mean… isn’t that a little radical?” Imoen sounds unconvinced, but Viconia continues to whisper arguments in her ear until Imoen gives up, “oh… alright… but that will be weird… jeez, I can’t imagine… Vic, are you sure? I wonder what Theo and the others will say…”
Interesting!
I try to stifle the laughter about their cluelessness all the way back... Jaheira is still drowsing as I return, so I choose to sit beside her and play with locks of her hair until she finally opens her sleepy eyes and smiles at me warmly.
Awwww! That was a sweet and tender scene.
“Oh, judging by that bickering, Vic and Immy have waked up Eddie,” I conclude, disengaging from her grasp, “we better get moving as he is not known for his enormous patience… if we tarry for too long there will be fireballs flying around soon…”
“Well, it is not that I care of what Edwin thinks, but on the other hand I suppose we should get going,” Jaheira says and tosses aside her blanket leaving me breathless once again… While she slowly and teasingly dresses herself, I vainly try to extinguish the burning flames of desire burning inside me. Having excused myself, I make a short walk to the small pool in the middle of the grotto and dump my head in the ice-cold water…
I bet Theo needs some cold water right about now.
Rogues do it from behind.
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Yeah, I know how that is - when I try to force myself to write too quickly I wind up feeling burnt out afterwards. Get some rest, would you?
Oh, I will... I'm taking this weekend off, hehe...
“Er… I forgot what it was…” Imoen tries to wiggle out.
Right.
“Why poor, Vic? Something… bad happened to him?”
You could say that.
Not a happy story that. But then again - you don't expect them from an exiled Drow, do you?
“Awww, just like me?” Imoen asks in a hopeful voice.
Oh yes, I hadn't thought about that, but it *would* appeal to Vic!
I didn't think of it before... the line just kinda wrote itself. Heh, it made sense to me.
“That is… well, that is just a load of bullshit and you know it, Vicky…” Imoen’s voice is more determined than Viconia ever remembers it to be, “just look at Theo and Jaheira – how much strength they draw from each other… love does not make one weaker, it gives you another source of strength… I believe that.”
Immy is right - but for a wounded person like Viconia it is hard to believe.
Coming from Imoen, I think it would be easier to believe. She wouldn't expect her to lie, manipulate or use her...
“You really think so, Vic? I mean… isn’t that a little radical?” Imoen sounds unconvinced, but Viconia continues to whisper arguments in her ear until Imoen gives up, “oh… alright… but that will be weird… jeez, I can’t imagine… Vic, are you sure? I wonder what Theo and the others will say…”
Interesting!
Hmmm...
I try to stifle the laughter about their cluelessness all the way back... Jaheira is still drowsing as I return, so I choose to sit beside her and play with locks of her hair until she finally opens her sleepy eyes and smiles at me warmly.
Awwww! That was a sweet and tender scene.
Thank you! They deserve it!
“Well, it is not that I care of what Edwin thinks, but on the other hand I suppose we should get going,” Jaheira says and tosses aside her blanket leaving me breathless once again… While she slowly and teasingly dresses herself, I vainly try to extinguish the burning flames of desire burning inside me. Having excused myself, I make a short walk to the small pool in the middle of the grotto and dump my head in the ice-cold water…
I bet Theo needs some cold water right about now.
Hehe, you can say that...
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Posted 04 October 2003 - 05:20 PM
I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing.
Wow.
I think you need another vacation.“Oh no… don’t play these games with me, little one. Nobody disturbs my rest over nothing,” Viconia’s voice takes an edge, “now, I demand that you tell me what you intended to say.”
“Er… I forgot what it was…” Imoen tries to wiggle out.
Yeah, no, won't work with Vic.
“He was… not like any other drow male… He was my childhood friend… perhaps my only friend, ever. He was a shifty and cunning boy, always tended to cause mischief and pull pranks on those stone-faced handmaidens… you remind me of him a bit, Imoen…” Viconia adds with a sigh, before continuing, “He grew up to become a useful wizard…”
Hmmmm. Interesting deepening of the relationship.
Viconia finds herself too weak to push the young woman away and her lack of strength disgusts her at first, but… the feeling of Imoen’s warm body against hers is much more pleasant than she could ever dare to admit…
Oh, my.
I sure didn't see that coming. I just thought they were going to become really good friends. In the innocent sense.“After we get out of this hole… Do you remember that surprise I promised for you, Imoen? Want to hear what I had in mind?” Viconia asks quietly after a while and Imoen nods excitedly. Viconia leans even closer and her warm breath as she whispers in Imoen’s ear, makes the young mage slightly giddy.
“You really think so, Vic? I mean… isn’t that a little radical?” Imoen sounds unconvinced, but Viconia continues to whisper arguments in her ear until Imoen gives up, “oh… alright… but that will be weird… jeez, I can’t imagine… Vic, are you sure? I wonder what Theo and the others will say…”
Gosh. Are they whispering what I think they're whispering? 
“I am not concerned,” I shrug, “whatever is going on between you two, I wish you the best. But we have a long road ahead of us and this is perhaps not the best time for…”
Well, I'm glad Theo's happy for her. Seems like everyone's getting paired up...Theo and Jaheira, Immy and Vic, Eddie and a mirror...
I try to stifle the laughter about their cluelessness all the way back...
Yeah, I'm sure they were doing that to you earlier, Mister Couldn't-Wait-To-Boff-Jaheira.
Having excused myself, I make a short walk to the small pool in the middle of the grotto and dump my head in the ice-cold water…
Yes, that will help.
Now I'm very interested to see Vic and Immy's surprise.
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I managed to fulfill the quota that I set for my vacation and actually penned seventeen chapters over the two weeks, but… I feel that I forced myself too much and thus the quality might not be the best – they will require lots and lots of proofing.
Wow.
So I've been told...
“Er… I forgot what it was…” Imoen tries to wiggle out.
Yeah, no, won't work with Vic.
Fat chance...
“He was… not like any other drow male… He was my childhood friend… perhaps my only friend, ever. He was a shifty and cunning boy, always tended to cause mischief and pull pranks on those stone-faced handmaidens… you remind me of him a bit, Imoen…” Viconia adds with a sigh, before continuing, “He grew up to become a useful wizard…”
Hmmmm. Interesting deepening of the relationship.
Err... interesting, yes...
Viconia finds herself too weak to push the young woman away and her lack of strength disgusts her at first, but… the feeling of Imoen’s warm body against hers is much more pleasant than she could ever dare to admit…
Oh, my.
Oh yes... it's not easy to fathom, really. In a way it makes sense... I think that Viconia's 'bad-girl' image could be attractive to Immy. And this relationship is bound to create a bit of a tension in party...
“You really think so, Vic? I mean… isn’t that a little radical?” Imoen sounds unconvinced, but Viconia continues to whisper arguments in her ear until Imoen gives up, “oh… alright… but that will be weird… jeez, I can’t imagine… Vic, are you sure? I wonder what Theo and the others will say…”
Err... wait and see?
“I am not concerned,” I shrug, “whatever is going on between you two, I wish you the best. But we have a long road ahead of us and this is perhaps not the best time for…”
Well, I'm glad Theo's happy for her. Seems like everyone's getting paired up...Theo and Jaheira, Immy and Vic, Eddie and a mirror...
Awww... poor Edwin...
But remember - the story is far from finished. Very far, actually... people will come and go... pairings may not necessarily last or stay the same...
I try to stifle the laughter about their cluelessness all the way back...
Yeah, I'm sure they were doing that to you earlier, Mister Couldn't-Wait-To-Boff-Jaheira.
LOL!
Having excused myself, I make a short walk to the small pool in the middle of the grotto and dump my head in the ice-cold water…
Yes, that will help.
For a short while, at least...
Now I'm very interested to see Vic and Immy's surprise.
Soon, very soon...
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