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#21 Guest_Hunter_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 08:55 AM

> They moved into the next room, and Imoen shivered as she felt a cold

> breeze blow across her neck. She stopped short as she saw a cloud of vapor

> take shape and coalesce into three forms. She saw the ice cold eyes of

> Bodhi sweep the group mockingly as the two vampires behind her gave them

> feral grins.

> “Here, mousey, mousey. The kitty has caught you,” Bodhi said with a leer.

> “I'm so very thirsty.”

Ohh now she's really gonna get it.

> Jarran raised his axe defensively. “Do you think we are surprised? You

> would never let us reach Irenicus.”

> “You are smarter than you look, Bhaalspawn. The hunt has been enjoyable,

> but the outcome was decided long ago. One last battle, and then your blood

> will be mine!”

> Imoen felt rage bubbling up inside of her, and she shot a round of magic

> missiles towards the vampire. She heard Jarran's roar of outrage as he and

> Bodhi clashed.

> Suddenly the roar changed, becoming more sibilant and shrill. She froze,

> afraid that her brother had been terribly wounded. She was not prepared

> for what she saw. No one was.

Bye bye bodhi.

> Bodhi staggered back, her eyes wide in shock. “What… what is this?” She

> screamed as the monster raked her with his claws. “No, no! Get away from

> me!”

give your greetings to the devil when you meet him

> Imoen could only stand and watch in horror as the creature grabbed one of

> the vampires by the neck and throttled it with a sharp wrench. Bodhi and

> the other vampire turned to run, and the monster slashed Bodhi's back. She

> screamed again, and cried out, “Damn you, Irenicus! What have you

> created?” She managed to turn herself into vapor a single second before

> claws cut the air where she had once been. The other vampire was not so

> lucky. The creature sank its teeth into the undead's shoulder.

It's nice to hear fear in bodhi's woice for once.

Goos chapter

Hunter

111 chapters!!!! You're rather dedicated aren't you.


#22 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 11:41 AM

> Hmmmmmmm. Slayers and vampires... That reminds me of a TV show but I can't

> remember which one ;) A very nice fic Silrana and I like the way that

> Jarran didn't manage to rip apart most of his friends. (Unlike little

> Bobby who decide to change into the Slayer at the most inoppotune time and

> chunked both Jaheira and Viconia.

Hehehe, yes, a very good TV show. The new season starts tonight, can't wait!

I'm glad you liked the story. I am playing a game concurrently with writing the story, because unexpected game events are a great story inspiration. In my game, for some reason the slayer just stood there after Bodhi ran. I guess the others were far enough away that it didn't trigger the Slayer to chase them. I thought it was an interesting detail, so I used it.

Jaheira and Viconia both? Ouch! I hope you used the magic spell Reload Game.



#23 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 11:49 AM

> I really liked the focus on Imoen in this chapter. Fun to watch her

> getting to know Anomen. ;)

In the Spellhold segment, the focus is usually on the PC, but Imoen has a lot to deal with, too. I thought she deserved some 'screen time'.

> Woo! What a speech for Anomen! Please be tolerant?! My, the boy has grown!

> *grin*

Hehe, not only that, but Valygar is his friend. Naturally he's going to stick up for him.

> LOL!

*grin* She hasn't lost her sense of humor.

> Sounds like she's met Edwin!

Imoen: Nobody insults Gorion!

> Uh oh. Here we go!

Uh oh indeed.

> Run guys!

They settled for backing off to a safe distance.

> Guess he would be in shock after that, no?

It's more that everytime he has a major dose of Bhaal, he feels cold. In some of my earlier stories I've had the comment that he felt a rush of cold just before a bit of Bhaal sneaks in.

> *shakes head sadly* Poor Jarran!

He certainly is less than happy right now. I sure would be upset.

> Good for Valygar!

Behind the gruffness, he has a good heart.

> Good treatment of this scene. You made it very fresh and new; a really

> good read! :)

> j.

Thanks! That's the hardest part of doing such well-known material, finding a way to make it different enough to be engaging.



#24 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 11:54 AM

> Ohh now she's really gonna get it.

She's certainly in for a surprise.

> Bye bye bodhi.

> give your greetings to the devil when you meet him

Hehe, don't I wish.

> It's nice to hear fear in bodhi's woice for once.

In the game she has fear, but the words were far too gamish for my liking. I wanted to go with what I felt was a more natural response.

> Goos chapter

Thanks!

> Hunter

> 111 chapters!!!! You're rather dedicated aren't you.

*grin* I have to be. The characters would never let me rest if I didn't tell their stories. They nag me enough as it is. You should hear the complaining I get from Sarevok!



#25 Guest_Lord E_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 12:50 PM

> She closed her eyes as fatigue threatened to overcome her. The brave face

> she had put up for Jarran could only last so long, and it was so hard

> forcing the memories away. The knives, the cold eyes, the pain….

Poor Immy.

> Imoen smiled at him. He's cute. A bit too serious, but cute. At least he

> doesn't look at me like I'm a snake about to strike like that ranger does.

> Ah, that reminds me…. “That's good to hear. So he hasn't been spending

> all his time romancing Jaheira?”

Awwwww! He is just like a knight from Imoen's romance novels!

> “Why should I be like the mages you've met? Hey, you're a ranger, where's

> your hamster? Minsc has one.”

Good one!

> Even Valygar had to laugh at that. “I would not dream of insulting your

> father, Imoen. Very well, I will accept that you chose your profession

> with the purest of motives. But have a care. The very power of magic

> twists a mage's soul a little each day. There's always one more spell to

> learn or cast. Before you know it you've spent your life in the library,

> having never seen the light of day, never truly lived. Believe me, I know

> this only too well.”

Nothing wrong with ambition or intellectual passion as such, I think.

> Valygar's dark eyes twinkled. “We have heard about you nearly every day.

> We have heard stories about your childhood, about your adventures… we felt

> as if we already knew you. It is easy to be kind… to a friend.”

> Imoen looked around to see smiles on the other's faces. “Thanks. Thank you

> for being my friend, and for being Jarran's. I think we both are going to

> need all the friends we can get.”

Awwwww!


Road of redemption

#26 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 01:07 PM

> Poor Immy.

She has a lot to deal with.

> Awwwww! He is just like a knight from Imoen's romance novels!

*grin* Except he doesn't have a white horse.

> Good one!

Hehehe, I thought so.

> Nothing wrong with ambition or intellectual passion as such, I think.

True, there is nothing wrong as such. It's where you let it lead you that can cause the problems.

> Awwwww!

Imoen needs all the Awwws she can get right now.



#27 Guest_Kismet_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 03:06 PM

Heh, after reading everybody else's posts and their thoughts on whether it'll be Anomen or Valygar that'll get Imoen (not to mention Silrana being oh so mysterious about it all), that I felt the need to chime in with a few umm...different suggestions. I hope you don't mind too much :)

In no particular order:

1. Imoen says "so what if we're both Bhaalspawn" and battles Jaheira for Jarran's affections;

2. Imoen falls for Saemon and gets her heart horribly broken when he screws the party over time and again;

3. Imoen says "so what if he's married" and falls for Keldorn;

4. Imoen falls for Solaufein;

5. After returning to Athkatla, the party gets re-arranged again and Imoen falls for either Edwin, Cernd, Minsc, Jan, Haer'Dalis or possibly Kelsey (if you've downloaded the mod -- which I can heartily recommend, btw);

6. After being brutalized by Irenicus, Imoen has decided to give men a miss for a while and doesn't fall for anyone.

7. Imoen has feelings for both Anomen and Valygar and we get an interesting love triangle happening.

Kismet



#28 Weyoun

Posted 24 September 2002 - 04:30 PM

> The group sat quietly resting in a large room. They had discovered a

> disk on the floor that provided healing, and they had gratefully made use

> of it to close their wounds. However, the healing could not remove the

> weariness from their bodies.

> Imoen was idly looking through one of the scroll cases that Jarran had

> given to her. She had to hand it to her brother, he had obtained some

> truly powerful spells. She only hoped she would live long enough to scribe

> them.

> She closed her eyes as fatigue threatened to overcome her. The brave face

> she had put up for Jarran could only last so long, and it was so hard

> forcing the memories away. The knives, the cold eyes, the pain….

> “Are you well, my lady?”

Let's see... stolen soul, stolen freedom, stolen from her friends, stolen two months from her life... NO, she ain't BLOODY WELL, Anomoron! :D

> Her eyes snapped open. Who…? Oh, the knight. Well, talking to him would be

> a welcome distraction from her unpleasant thoughts. She gave him a quick

> smile. “I'm just a bit tired. I guess I'm out of practice.”

> “Perhaps we should give you some time to sleep.”

> “Oh, no, we don't need to do that.” Not sleep. The dreams came when she

> slept.

*sniff*

> Anomen leaned closer to her and said in a low voice, “Your words when you

> chastised us for being too protective showed great strength and

> determination, my lady, and I admire you for your courage. That being

> said, however, there is no shame in admitting that you need assistance.”

One notch up for possible Imoen/Anomen romance. :D

> “Can you tell me about Jarran's life since I was taken? Has he been all

> right? When it took so long for him to come, I worried that… that he had

> been killed. That another Bhaalspawn like Sarevok had come after him, or

> that Irenicus' servants had gotten him, or…or….”

Oh, yeah! Imoen has a lot of catching up to do... :)

> “I cannot speak for the whole time, but since I joined this party, your

> brother has fought evil bravely and well. He has saved many lives, and

> there are entire towns in Amn that owe him a debt of gratitude. Yet there

> was not a single day that he did not speak of you, my lady. You were ever

> in his thoughts. He was happy to help others, but his goal of gathering

> the strength of arms to challenge the wizards was foremost.”

> Imoen smiled at him. He's cute. A bit too serious, but cute. At least he

> doesn't look at me like I'm a snake about to strike like that ranger does.

> Ah, that reminds me….

One notch up for Imoen/Anomen, one down for Imoen/Valygar.

> “Please be tolerant, my lady. Valygar comes from a family that known much

> tragedy, and nearly all of it because of wizardry. His ancestors' research

> into necromancy has left a shadow over his family name. Even his own

> mother fell to the influence of evil magic. She became a lich, and he was

> forced to kill her and the zombie she had transformed his father into.”

> “That's awful! Gee, I guess I understand a little better now. Poor guy.

> Well, I'll just have to show him that I'm not like that.”

Okay, one more notch for Imoen/Valygar...

> “So power means nothing to you? Or exploring the depths of magic?”

> “Power to do what?”

To dye your hair without using hair-dye? :)

> Even Valygar had to laugh at that. “I would not dream of insulting your

> father, Imoen. Very well, I will accept that you chose your profession

> with the purest of motives. But have a care. The very power of magic

> twists a mage's soul a little each day. There's always one more spell to

> learn or cast. Before you know it you've spent your life in the library,

> having never seen the light of day, never truly lived. Believe me, I know

> this only too well.”

> Imoen made a face. “Spend my life in a library? No thanks! I spent my

> childhood trying to stay out of one.”

LOL!

> Jarran's eyes had gone dead and black, and he grew taller. His skin

> reddened and cracked, his fingers lengthened and claws burst from the

> ends. In less time than it would take to describe, he became a nightmarish

> creature with sharp teeth and protruding spikes.

Yikes! Scary!

> Bodhi staggered back, her eyes wide in shock. “What… what is this?” She

> screamed as the monster raked her with his claws. “No, no! Get away from

> me!”

LOL! And the hunter becomes the hunted...

> The warmth seemed to help as the shivering stopped. After a few minutes,

> Jarran carefully sat up. Trying to smile, he said, “Well, that was

> unpleasant.”

I'll say... :)

> “You. You were the best part of me.”

Awwww....

> She angrily met his gaze, and was surprised to see sympathy, not disgust.

> The ranger continued, “There is no reason for you to worry. You have

> survived the foul mage's evil treatment of you, which shows that you have

> plenty of strength. If the worst happens and you change, you will have the

> will to return to normal. I have no doubt that you could do it.”

> She wiped away her tears and managed to smile when Rose climbed into her

> lap. The pseudodragon's chirps sounded suspiciously like an agreement.

> “Gee, everyone has been so good to me. Where did Jarran find such nice

> people?”

> Valygar's dark eyes twinkled. “We have heard about you nearly every day.

> We have heard stories about your childhood, about your adventures… we felt

> as if we already knew you. It is easy to be kind… to a friend.”

> Imoen looked around to see smiles on the other's faces. “Thanks. Thank you

> for being my friend, and for being Jarran's. I think we both are going to

> need all the friends we can get.”

More awwww...

Great stuff,

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#29 Guest_Winter_Bloom_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 07:49 PM

> The group sat quietly resting in a large room. They had discovered a

> disk on the floor that provided healing, and they had gratefully made use

> of it to close their wounds. However, the healing could not remove the

> weariness from their bodies.

> Imoen was idly looking through one of the scroll cases that Jarran had

> given to her. She had to hand it to her brother, he had obtained some

> truly powerful spells. She only hoped she would live long enough to scribe

> them.

I hope so too.

> She closed her eyes as fatigue threatened to overcome her. The brave face

> she had put up for Jarran could only last so long, and it was so hard

> forcing the memories away. The knives, the cold eyes, the pain….

> “Are you well, my lady?”

> Her eyes snapped open. Who…? Oh, the knight. Well, talking to him would be

> a welcome distraction from her unpleasant thoughts. She gave him a quick

> smile. “I'm just a bit tired. I guess I'm out of practice.”

> “Perhaps we should give you some time to sleep.”

> “Oh, no, we don't need to do that.” Not sleep. The dreams came when she

> slept.

> Anomen leaned closer to her and said in a low voice, “Your words when you

> chastised us for being too protective showed great strength and

> determination, my lady, and I admire you for your courage. That being

> said, however, there is no shame in admitting that you need assistance.”

Heh, I give another vote for Immy + Ano. ;p

> From across the room Valygar grumbled, “I do have ears, you know.” Imoen

> jumped, for she and Anomen had been speaking quietly. “I have a question

> as well. If you are not like other mages, then why are you a wizard?”

> “Why should I be like the mages you've met? Hey, you're a ranger, where's

> your hamster? Minsc has one.”

Heh, heh...

> “Here, mousey, mousey. The kitty has caught you,” Bodhi said with a leer.

> “I'm so very thirsty.”

> Jarran raised his axe defensively. “Do you think we are surprised? You

> would never let us reach Irenicus.”

Uh-Oh, here it comes...

> “You are smarter than you look, Bhaalspawn. The hunt has been enjoyable,

> but the outcome was decided long ago. One last battle, and then your blood

> will be mine!”

> Imoen felt rage bubbling up inside of her, and she shot a round of magic

> missiles towards the vampire. She heard Jarran's roar of outrage as he and

> Bodhi clashed.

> Suddenly the roar changed, becoming more sibilant and shrill. She froze,

> afraid that her brother had been terribly wounded. She was not prepared

> for what she saw. No one was.

> Jarran's eyes had gone dead and black, and he grew taller. His skin

> reddened and cracked, his fingers lengthened and claws burst from the

> ends. In less time than it would take to describe, he became a nightmarish

> creature with sharp teeth and protruding spikes.

Ulp.

> The group slowly backed away as the thing that had been Jarran tore the

> vampire apart. Then it turned to face them. It took a staggering step

> forward.

> Imoen saw the party ready their weapons. “No,” she whimpered. “That's

> Jarran! Don't hurt him!” She did not dare tell them that the creature was

> horribly familiar.

> Mazzy said as gently as she could while edging backwards, “That was

> Jarran. We must be careful.”

> The creature stopped and swayed. Its shoulders sagged, and it seemed to

> shrink. In a few moments its skin had lightened and the hideous body was

> disappearing. Finally Jarran's familiar form appeared. He sank to the

> floor, his face ashen.

Poor Jarran. ;)

> “When Irenicus took my soul, I dreamed that I saw an image of Bhaal that

> said it was my instinct. I think it meant the part of me that comes from

> my father. The rage, the bloodlust, the hate… if that was left behind,

> does Irenicus have my human soul? The part of me that was good and

> decent?”

I don't think Leatherface took all of it.

> Imoen said in a rush, “That can't be true, Jarran! You've been so nice to

> me… you would have been mean if there wasn't any of the real you left!”

> Jarran looked up at her and a strange smile came to his face. “There was

> another image in my dream. It represented the good part of me, the part

> that wanted to fight the instinct. It showed me how to resist it. It was

> you, Imoen.”

> “Me?”

> “You. You were the best part of me.”

Awww...


Blades and Magic

#30 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 11:39 PM

> Heh, after reading everybody else's posts and their thoughts on whether

> it'll be Anomen or Valygar that'll get Imoen (not to mention Silrana being

> oh so mysterious about it all), that I felt the need to chime in with a

> few umm...different suggestions. I hope you don't mind too much ;)

Not at all!

> In no particular order:

> 1. Imoen says "so what if we're both Bhaalspawn" and battles

> Jaheira for Jarran's affections;

Not a chance.

> 2. Imoen falls for Saemon and gets her heart horribly broken when he

> screws the party over time and again;

Lord E is handling Saemon... though I think you'll enjoy his appearance in the next chapter.

> 3. Imoen says "so what if he's married" and falls for Keldorn;

Not likely, since he's not in the party. They won't have much time in Athkatla in Chapter 6.

> 4. Imoen falls for Solaufein;

An interesting possibility.

> 5. After returning to Athkatla, the party gets re-arranged again and Imoen

> falls for either Edwin, Cernd, Minsc, Jan, Haer'Dalis or possibly Kelsey

> (if you've downloaded the mod -- which I can heartily recommend, btw);

Edwin - too evil

Cernd - too boring

Minsc - he's happy where he is

Jan - he's carrying a torch

Haer'Dalis - where's my gun?

Kelsey - that mod wasn't out when I scripted the plots for AC, and I wouldn't change at that late date.

> 6. After being brutalized by Irenicus, Imoen has decided to give men a

> miss for a while and doesn't fall for anyone.

The novel handled that one *shiver*

> 7. Imoen has feelings for both Anomen and Valygar and we get an

> interesting love triangle happening.

Another interesting possibility.

> Kismet

Do I even need to say (all together now) wait and see?



#31 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 24 September 2002 - 11:50 PM

> Let's see... stolen soul, stolen freedom, stolen from her friends, stolen

> two months from her life... NO, she ain't BLOODY WELL, Anomoron! :D

*grin* He means at the moment. He also means something he can help with.

> *sniff*

She'll get better

> One notch up for possible Imoen/Anomen romance. :)

*Silrana takes out a scorecard*

> Oh, yeah! Imoen has a lot of catching up to do... ;)

And she will have plenty of willing storytellers.

> One notch up for Imoen/Anomen, one down for Imoen/Valygar.

*marks the card again*

> Okay, one more notch for Imoen/Valygar...

Up or down?

> To dye your hair without using hair-dye? :)

*MY* Imoen didn't dye her hair. After I bought a good graphics card, it wasn't pink anymore. It's a light red.

> LOL!

Imoen: Boooooring!

> Yikes! Scary!

Very!

> LOL! And the hunter becomes the hunted...

And she's so deserving, too.

> I'll say... :D

Jarran: My joints will never be the same.

> Awwww....

> More awwww...

Awws are always appreciated.

> Great stuff,

> ---Weyoun

Thanks!



#32 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 25 September 2002 - 12:00 AM

> I hope so too.

Would I kill off Imoen?

> Heh, I give another vote for Immy + Ano. ;p

My scorecard is getting a workout.

> Heh, heh...

*grin*

> Uh-Oh, here it comes...

> Ulp.

> Poor Jarran. ;)

I would be having a heart attack if I saw something like that happen.

> I don't think Leatherface took all of it.

We can't be sure.

> Awww...

A little sibling love helps a lot.

Thanks for commenting!






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