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A Cappella Part 99 - Loose Ends


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#21 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 18 August 2002 - 11:41 PM

> I really liked the way you set up this chapter as a series of vignettes. I

> particularly enjoyed Anomen's conversation with Blethyn in regards to

> Mazzy and the revelation to Mazzy that Patrick (i'm assuming!)was close to

> her. Certainly this is a release for them both and it was quite well done.

> j.

Thanks! Yes, Anomen and Mazzy have developed a bond between them, though what that will mean for their futures has yet to be seen. But it was good for all the party members to get things out into the open.

Thanks for the comments!



#22 Guest_Lord E_*

Posted 19 August 2002 - 01:12 AM

> If Tyr didn't want a gay man serving him, Blethyn never would have been

> accepted as a paladin.

Good for Tyr. And yep - it is up to him and not the Order.

> Unfortunately the game doesn't leave the room for character development

> that she needs. It was "Poor Patrick is dead... let's go slay

> evil." Her grief was pretty well ignored.

Yes, I'm sure I could have liked the character if she was handled a bit differently.

> He's one of the nicer gods, that's for sure. His openness and desire to

> ease suffering are excellent qualities.

Certainly my favourite of the pally-sponsoring lot, perhaps of all of them (Olidammara is another one I like, but he is not in Faerunian pantheon).

> That sort of thing is so personal you can't really say that one side or

> the other is right.

Agree absolutely. Who is to say which is a 'proper' way to grieve?

> I never liked the Cowled Wizards. Talk about totalitarian.

Peri: "They yield nice loot, though."


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#23 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 19 August 2002 - 09:19 PM

Wheeeee! Another episode -- two in one quiz. Yippee! :)

Don't know whether anyone mentioned this yet, but -- whooo! Loved the multiple meanings behind your title. You, as an author, are tying up some loose ends. The characters are tying up loose ends. And, in fact, the first three characters portrayed *are* themselves loose ends, as they aren't connected w/ a sig. other / haven't tied the knot. And it amuses the bejeebers out of me that the theme of "loose ends" should be the connecting thread of all the minisegments. You obviously put a lot of thought into this.

> Oh, that reminds me.

> When we return, Jarran's sister will need a room. I want you to fix up the

> front bedchamber for her. I want it well-aired and cheerful.”

> “A good choice.”

> “Yes, it is the only guestroom with windows, and after her ordeal I want

> her to feel as free as possible.”

That is just *so* sweet of him! I appreciate this peek into his psyche; he's always been a bit of a mystery to me.

> Hervo gave a polite cough. “Speaking of freedom, are you planning to open

> the locked rooms?”

Huh?

> His thoughts made the logical jump from Trademeet to Mazzy.

Oh yes; very logical jump indeed. :-)

> From behind he heard a voice say, “Good day, cousin.”

> He turned and said with a smile, “Sir Blethyn, it is good to see you. You

> are still in Athkatla?”

> The older knight seemed to study him sadly. “Yes, and I should have spent

> a great deal more time here in the past. I have heard much that has

> disturbed me. But enough of the past, it is time we spoke of the future,

> you and I.”

Thank you for including Sir Blethyn! Was wondering if he'd ever make another appearance.

Btw...I don't mean to bother you w/ useless questions, but about how much older *is* Blethyn? Approx. how old is Ano anyways?

> “By Helm, Blethyn, you go too far!”

> “Do I? Is it any coincidence that the only true lover you have ever had

> was when you were staying at your grandparent's estate, far away from your

> father?”

And that he never mentioned the person's gender...?

> “There is someone I have feelings for, but not… those sort of feelings.”

> “Are you sure? Many a love has started with friendship.”

> “I do not care for her in that way, Blethyn. She is more like… an older

> sister...”

LOL! And Ano just loves to compare his female Charnames to Moira too. You're right; I hadn't anticipated this bend.

> The cleric looked thoughtful for a moment, then placed her hands on

> Mazzy's shoulders. She closed her eyes and her lips moved silently. After

> a few minutes, a small smile appeared on her face. “There is another soul

> very close to you, but I can barely sense its presence. I cannot tell you

> the identity of the soul, but I can say this… it is a halfling, and it is

> male.”

This is sweet. :)

> His voice deepened and his eyes

> began to glow a harsh golden color.

Foreshadowing for slayer change?

Hmm, gold eyes, silver eyes...I'm looking forward to what evolves from this.

A (belated) thanks for posting this! :) Enjoyed it a lot.



#24 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 20 August 2002 - 01:28 AM

> Wheeeee! Another episode -- two in one quiz. Yippee! :)

*blush* I'm trying to pick up the pace a bit, but I've just had a lot of irons in the fire. We are going to refinance our mortgage, so we are doing a lot of fix-it projects so that we'll get a good valuation.

> Don't know whether anyone mentioned this yet, but -- whooo! Loved the

> multiple meanings behind your title. You, as an author, are tying up some

> loose ends. The characters are tying up loose ends. And, in fact, the

> first three characters portrayed *are* themselves loose ends, as they

> aren't connected w/ a sig. other / haven't tied the knot. And it amuses

> the bejeebers out of me that the theme of "loose ends" should be

> the connecting thread of all the minisegments. You obviously put a lot of

> thought into this.

*blinks* Who, me?

*grin* Actually, a lot of it seemed to fall into place. I had a number of points I wanted to make that weren't big enough for their own stories, and I had come to think of them as my plot loose ends. So when it came time to name the chapter, it just seemed a natural one to choose.

> That is just *so* sweet of him! I appreciate this peek into his psyche;

> he's always been a bit of a mystery to me.

From his dialogue in the game, I think Val is a lot deeper than people give his credit for. He's the kind that doesn't say much, but notices everything.

> Huh?

That was from part 87. Valygar keeps some rooms locked because they either have unpleasant memories or he thinks he will have no use for them. One room was a nursery.

> Oh yes; very logical jump indeed. :D

For Anomen, anyway.

> Thank you for including Sir Blethyn! Was wondering if he'd ever make

> another appearance.

> Btw...I don't mean to bother you w/ useless questions, but about how much

> older *is* Blethyn? Approx. how old is Ano anyways?

My rough guess for Anomen's age is about 23-24, and Blethyn is in his thirties.

> And that he never mentioned the person's gender...?

*raises eyebrows*

> LOL! And Ano just loves to compare his female Charnames to Moira too.

> You're right; I hadn't anticipated this bend.

Though in my version, Moira was younger than Anomen.

> This is sweet. ;)

I'm glad you liked it.

> Foreshadowing for slayer change?

Just Daddy Bhaal sneaking in.

> Hmm, gold eyes, silver eyes...I'm looking forward to what evolves from

> this.

It will all be explained in due time.

> A (belated) thanks for posting this! :) Enjoyed it a lot.

Thanks!



#25 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 20 August 2002 - 02:38 AM

What a wonderful instalment, Silrana. I loved it all. The dialogues were great (I'm sure you have lots of fun writing those. As I said, they were lovely.:D, the transitions were smooth and seamless. I think you linked all the scenes in a very natural way. Good work! Oh, and poor, poor Yoshimo. His scene was especially touching. I love it every time someone shows his tormented side (although I'm sure I'm not a sadist. I just like a good read;).

Great writing! :)

-Sandalwood (I just can't stop thinking about all those wonderful dialogues! God, I'm being repetitive! ;)



#26 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 20 August 2002 - 03:04 AM

> What a wonderful instalment, Silrana. I loved it all. The dialogues were

> great (I'm sure you have lots of fun writing those. As I said, they were

> lovely.:D, the transitions were smooth and seamless. I think you linked

> all the scenes in a very natural way. Good work! Oh, and poor, poor

> Yoshimo. His scene was especially touching. I love it every time someone

> shows his tormented side (although I'm sure I'm not a sadist. I just like

> a good read;).

I always felt so badly that there was no way we could save Yoshimo in the game. And having his name on the list of people that the statues in the TOB stronghold could call was too cruel.

> Great writing! :)

> -Sandalwood (I just can't stop thinking about all those wonderful

> dialogues! God, I'm being repetitive! ;)

*grin* I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. Thanks!



#27 Guest_darkrose_*

Posted 20 August 2002 - 03:09 AM

> So why don't you settle

> down with a nice girl and start making little Corthalas?”

ROTFL! I love that!

> Mazzy was overwhelmed by this slender thread of hope, and she threw her

> arms around the priestess' neck and wept.

*sniffle*

> Without another word, the man knelt at the altar, and as Molison quietly

> slipped out of the room, he heard the sound of low sobs.

*wails*

> “I… I….” Jarran looked confused. He reached up and gingerly touched the

> red mark left by the slap. Then he pulled Jaheira into his arms and held

> her close. “Thank you,” he whispered.

Lovely. All of it.



#28 Guest_Lord E_*

Posted 20 August 2002 - 03:10 AM

> I always felt so badly that there was no way we could save Yoshimo in the

> game. And having his name on the list of people that the statues in the

> TOB stronghold could call was too cruel.

Wasn't it, though? I'm sure I'm not the only one who LEAPT to click it. I mean, they could have written some little lousy dialogue where we find out he is all right (in case we took his heart to the Ilmateri, which all my characters would do, except LE Miriko, whom I really can't stomach playing to tell the truth).


Makings of a monster

#29 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 20 August 2002 - 03:31 AM

> I always felt so badly that there was no way we could save Yoshimo in the

> game. And having his name on the list of people that the statues in the

> TOB stronghold could call was too cruel.

Definitely cruel, I agree. Like Lord E said, I also leapt when I saw his name on that list, only to be splashed with a bucket of cold water in the next moment. Bah. Yoshi deserved much better.

> *grin* I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. Thanks!

A pleasure. :D



#30 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 20 August 2002 - 03:34 AM

> Wasn't it, though? I'm sure I'm not the only one who LEAPT to click it. I

> mean, they could have written some little lousy dialogue where we find out

> he is all right

Agreed 100%



#31 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 20 August 2002 - 12:26 PM

> ROTFL! I love that!

*grin* Glad you approve.

> *sniffle*

Poor Mazzy.

> *wails*

Poor Yoshi!

> Lovely. All of it.

Thanks! And it's good to see you here. Did the denizens of Hogwarts finally let you out for a bit?



#32 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 22 August 2002 - 06:47 PM

> Thanks! And it's good to see you here. Did the denizens of Hogwarts

> finally let you out for a bit?

Surely you jest. I am always delighted to get rid of the woman, since it means that I do not have to suffer the indignities which she so enjoys heaping upon me. Forcing me to attend that film in that ridiculous outfit was bad enough--now she intends to send me on holiday to America. If you can keep her occupied here, so much the better.

*scowls around indiscriminately, and sweeps off, robes billowing behind him*



#33 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 24 August 2002 - 02:28 AM

> Surely you jest. I am always delighted to get rid of the woman, since it

> means that I do not have to suffer the indignities which she so enjoys

> heaping upon me. Forcing me to attend that film in that ridiculous outfit

> was bad enough--now she intends to send me on holiday to America. If you

> can keep her occupied here, so much the better.

> *scowls around indiscriminately, and sweeps off, robes billowing behind

> him*

To Disney World, perhaps?

*smiles innocently*



#34 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 24 August 2002 - 10:33 PM

> To Disney World, perhaps?

> *smiles innocently*

Fortunately for the Professor, the Headmaster has given him a great deal of correspondence to handle, and he will not be able to leave the school at this time.

*wrinkles nose* So he's sending me instead.





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