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#1 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 11 May 2002 - 06:21 PM

Hi! I'm reasserting the ascendency of the bell curve yet again. :-( Hope all y'all don't mind...

Again, molto mega thanks to Laufey, who's been extremely helpful, kind, generous, and patient in beta-ing for me. :-)

 

Tiziana looked up from her giggling friends, her eye drawn heavenwards by the sun's sinking trajectory. Darn it! She was going to be late, and he never abided by tardiness; and to be late today, of all days…! “Um, I'm sorry, but I've got to go,” Tiziana apologized while simultaneously launching herself to her feet and grabbing her short bow.

Rivulina cast her a knowing grin. “Still trying to shag your sister's boyfriend?” They snickered some more.

Tiziana shook her head exasperatedly but deigned not explain. Why bother? She hadn't managed to convince them yet: they still assumed she must have some ulterior motive for hanging out with him beyond that of archery lessons. Of course, it didn't help that she once had held such aspirations.

The youngster crept carefully through the forest and met him by their usual tree. He grunted, as per his customary wordless salutation and motioned towards a familiar knot. She nodded once in understanding. She broadened her stance, nocked one of his arrows, concentrated on the target, (hoped for Solonor Thelandira's favor,) and released her arrow.

She missed.

He silently handed her another arrow.

She repeated the process with the same result.

And again.

And yet again.

As her failures mounted, so did her frustration. She barely restrained herself from cursing out her bow and slamming it into the nearest tree. Creating a commotion by disabling one's weapon while alone in the forest struck the youth as a singularly bad idea for some reason, however.

Her older colleague shook his head after her last shot -- her aim had worsened, Tiziana conceded -- but he appeared too … what? self-conscious? … to criticize her performance aloud. One of those traits her sister found so endearing, Tiziana mused, but his shyness would not aid her shooting prowess.

“What am I doing wrong?” she finally asked.

Her instructor blinked as she shattered the silence. “The hands,” he murmured. “Aim,” he told her, and she assumed her shooting position. His eye flickered across her form. After a pause, he awkwardly nudged at her left foot, so she adjusted her pose. Then he slid her hand down the wood and stepped away.

Immediately she noticed a difference in the bow's balance. She flashed him a grin and aimed for her target … almost! Another arrow, and another attempt -- yippee! She did it! She capered silently in place, ever mindful of alerting potential predators.

Satisfaction glowed in her mentor's eyes. When she tacitly motioned for another arrow, he shook his head. “It is time for us to rest,” he intoned. Now that he mentioned it, she did feel a bit winded. She leaned against a nearby trunk.

“There you are!” a soft, high pitched voice announced. “I've been looking all over for you two!”

Tiziana tilted her head up and beamed at her sister. “Heya, Day! I was just getting in some last-minute archery practice before your trip.” She peered back towards her target.

Her sister followed Tiziana's glance. “Very well done!” she jostled her sibling affectionately.

This praise whipped the younger lass into an even higher level of ebullience. “Kivan's a great teacher,” Tiziana gushed. She gave him an impromptu hug. “I'm so glad he's my brother … er, not just because of the lessons,” she appended with a flush.

The tinkle of elven laughter, and the elder sister ruffled Tiziana's hair. “That's alright, kiddo; we understand.” The woman slid her arm around the archer's waist and pecked him on his cheek. “I'm sort of attached to him myself.”

Kivan blushed slightly, but his mouth twisted upwards into a rare smile. “Deheriana,” he breathed huskily.

Tiziana looked away. That intimate gaze … no, she felt very much the intruder, watching her sister and her mate. “So, um, I'll be seeing you. Have fun!” Her face blazed when she realized her inadvertent entendre, but thankfully the adults remained oblivious.

“You don't think I'm going to let you off so easily, now, do you?” Tiziana found herself embraced and bussed by her sister. “That's better,” Day asserted. She then assumed a brisk tone. “I fed the cats, so they shouldn't be hungry until around sunup.” She looked questioningly at Kivan, who grunted affirmatively.

The couple walked her back to their cabin. En route, Deheriana reiterated her customary set of instructions and injunctions. Tiziana nodded and mumbled her assent at the proper intervals without actually listening.

“And one more thing: we don't want you out in these woods alone,” Deheriana warned, uncharacteristically sober. Kivan nodded once and folded his arms. Tiziana made to protest, but the older lass waved her silent. “I know you're getting handy with that bow, but … you're my sister. I -- we -- love you and don't want to lose you.”

That one entreaty, that one expression of tenderness, convinced a mutinous Tiziana where logic could not. “Alright, Day; I promise.” The girl shivered unaccountably.

“Good. Take care! See you in a tenday.” Deheriana stared into Kivan's eyes. “More or less,” she amended, her voice pitched sultrily low.

The youngster reddened again. “Um, yes, so, ah, farewell!” Tiziana and Kivan exchanged nods. Before she could stop herself, she blurted, “I love you, Day.” Why had it seemed so important to say this?

A surprised look, a gratified smile. The younger elf's uncharacteristic declaration clearly touched her sister. “I love you too, Tiz. Farewell!”

Tiziana lifted her hand to wave, but the couple had already sunk into the shadows.


#2 Guest_Winter_Bloom_*

Posted 11 May 2002 - 06:49 PM

> Tiziana looked up from her giggling friends, her eye drawn heavenwards

> by the sun's sinking trajectory. Darn it! She was going to be late, and he

> never abided by tardiness; and to be late today, of all days…! “Um, I'm

> sorry, but I've got to go,” Tiziana apologized while simultaneously

> launching herself to her feet and grabbing her short bow.

Hmm, is somebody late for their lesson?

> The youngster crept carefully through the forest and met him by their

> usual tree. He grunted, as per his customary wordless salutation and

> motioned towards a familiar knot. She nodded once in understanding. She

> broadened her stance, nocked one of his arrows, concentrated on the

> target, (hoped for Solonor Thelandira's favor,) and released her arrow.

> She missed.

Darn!

> He silently handed her another arrow.

> She repeated the process with the same result.

> And again.

> And yet again.

Double and triple darn!

> As her failures mounted, so did her frustration. She barely restrained

> herself from cursing out her bow and slamming it into the nearest tree.

> Creating a commotion by disabling one's weapon while alone in the forest

> struck the youth as a singularly bad idea for some reason, however.

That's wise. :-(

> Her instructor blinked as she shattered the silence. “The hands,” he

> murmured. “Aim,” he told her, and she assumed her shooting position. His

> eye flickered across her form. After a pause, he awkwardly nudged at her

> left foot, so she adjusted her pose. Then he slid her hand down the wood

> and stepped away.

> Immediately she noticed a difference in the bow's balance. She flashed him

> a grin and aimed for her target … almost! Another arrow, and another

> attempt -- yippee! She did it! She capered silently in place, ever mindful

> of alerting potential predators.

Whoo-Hoo!

> This praise whipped the younger lass into an even higher level of

> ebullience. “Kivan's a great teacher,” Tiziana gushed. She gave him an

> impromptu hug. “I'm so glad he's my brother … er, not just because of the

> lessons,” she appended with a flush.

> The tinkle of elven laughter, and the elder sister ruffled Tiziana's hair.

> “That's alright, kiddo; we understand.” The woman slid her arm around the

> archer's waist and pecked him on his cheek. “I'm sort of attached to him

> myself.”

Awww.

> Kivan blushed slightly, but his mouth twisted upwards into a rare smile.

> “Deheriana,” he breathed huskily.

Oh no, I know how this trip is going to end. :-)

> The youngster reddened again. “Um, yes, so, ah, farewell!” Tiziana and

> Kivan exchanged nods. Before she could stop herself, she blurted, “I love

> you, Day.” Why had it seemed so important to say this?

> A surprised look, a gratified smile. The younger elf's uncharacteristic

> declaration clearly touched her sister. “I love you too, Tiz. Farewell!”

*snif* She'll never see her sister again. :-)


#3 Laufey

Posted 11 May 2002 - 07:26 PM

> Hi! I'm reasserting the ascendency of the bell curve yet again. :-( Hope

> all y'all don't mind...

> Again, molto mega thanks to Laufey, who's been extremely helpful, kind,

> generous, and patient in beta-ing for me. :-) '

You're welcome. 8) Since I commented before I'll just say that this was really sweet, and I would like to repeat that for once I actually like Kivan. Well done!

Oh, and I'm happy to find out it was cats. :-)


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#4 Weyoun

Posted 11 May 2002 - 11:53 PM

> Tiziana looked up from her giggling friends, her eye drawn heavenwards

> by the sun's sinking trajectory. Darn it! She was going to be late, and he

> never abided by tardiness; and to be late today, of all days…! “Um, I'm

> sorry, but I've got to go,” Tiziana apologized while simultaneously

> launching herself to her feet and grabbing her short bow.

> Rivulina cast her a knowing grin. “Still trying to shag your sister's

> boyfriend?” They snickered some more.

Oh, dear... What nice friends she has. :-)

> Immediately she noticed a difference in the bow's balance. She flashed him

> a grin and aimed for her target … almost! Another arrow, and another

> attempt -- yippee! She did it! She capered silently in place, ever mindful

> of alerting potential predators.

LOL! I see she's really happy for finally hitting that target! :-(

> This praise whipped the younger lass into an even higher level of

> ebullience. “Kivan's a great teacher,” Tiziana gushed. She gave him an

> impromptu hug. “I'm so glad he's my brother … er, not just because of the

> lessons,” she appended with a flush.

> The tinkle of elven laughter, and the elder sister ruffled Tiziana's hair.

> “That's alright, kiddo; we understand.” The woman slid her arm around the

> archer's waist and pecked him on his cheek. “I'm sort of attached to him

> myself.”

> Kivan blushed slightly, but his mouth twisted upwards into a rare smile.

> “Deheriana,” he breathed huskily.

Kinda bittersweet... 8)

> The couple walked her back to their cabin. En route, Deheriana reiterated

> her customary set of instructions and injunctions. Tiziana nodded and

> mumbled her assent at the proper intervals without actually listening.

> “And one more thing: we don't want you out in these woods alone,”

> Deheriana warned, uncharacteristically sober. Kivan nodded once and folded

> his arms. Tiziana made to protest, but the older lass waved her silent. “I

> know you're getting handy with that bow, but … you're my sister. I -- we

> -- love you and don't want to lose you.”

Really bittersweet. ;)

> The youngster reddened again. “Um, yes, so, ah, farewell!” Tiziana and

> Kivan exchanged nods. Before she could stop herself, she blurted, “I love

> you, Day.” Why had it seemed so important to say this?

You do know how to create an atmosphere of sadness very well.

> A surprised look, a gratified smile. The younger elf's uncharacteristic

> declaration clearly touched her sister. “I love you too, Tiz. Farewell!”

> Tiziana lifted her hand to wave, but the couple had already sunk into the

> shadows.

Great story. If a little, well, bittersweet. :-) Will you be writing more on this storyline?

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#5 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 01:15 AM

I love the serials posted on the board, at least the ones I manage to read (free time isn't something I have in abundance), but there's a special magic in a self-contained short story. Heh, maybe that's why I like them so. :-(

I really don't know much about writing to point precisely what's well done, or not. My critiques are bound to be awkward, or badly placed, if I go beyond the impact a story had on me as a reader. I hope you don't mind. :-)

But what am I to say about this particular story? There is such beauty in its simplicity! I like simple things. Why add strange feelings, or complicated desires to our ability to love? Why dream of the complex, when in the purity of three words there is room for countless universes?

"I love you, Day," said Tiziana.

And I loved this story. :-)

-Sandalwood (who should *really* stop listening to Rachmaninoff's Vespers while reading stories like these).



#6 Guest_Dorotea_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 01:25 AM

I find the story enthralling from the start, and I was so pleasantly surprised to find out it was Kivan's story you are going to tell us! It was so much fun to read.

> Tiziana looked up from her giggling friends, her eye drawn heavenwards

> by the sun's sinking trajectory. Darn it! She was going to be late, and he

> never abided by tardiness;

Heh, the first glimpse of the character. :-(

> Tiziana shook her head exasperatedly but deigned not explain. Why bother?

> She hadn't managed to convince them yet: they still assumed she must have

> some ulterior motive for hanging out with him beyond that of archery

> lessons. Of course, it didn't help that she once had held such

> aspirations.

Oh yes, once you let it slip off your tongue - they will never forget it. :-) Still I feel she feels somewhet more than friendship towards her teacher.

>(hoped for Solonor Thelandira's favor,) and released her arrow.

I gather that's elven deity, patron of archers?

> She missed.

> He silently handed her another arrow.

> She repeated the process with the same result.

> And again.

> And yet again.

I would say - Kivan is extremely patient. :-)

> “What am I doing wrong?” she finally asked.

> Her instructor blinked as she shattered the silence. “The hands,” he

> murmured. “Aim,” he told her, and she assumed her shooting position. His

> eye flickered across her form. After a pause, he awkwardly nudged at her

> left foot, so she adjusted her pose. Then he slid her hand down the wood

> and stepped away.

> Immediately she noticed a difference in the bow's balance. She flashed him

> a grin and aimed for her target … almost! Another arrow, and another

> attempt -- yippee! She did it! She capered silently in place, ever mindful

> of alerting potential predators.

Heh. Wonderful. Though I wished for some memories of hers, to account for previous lessons and how they went. How come she only asked him what she is doing wrong today? I guess she was not much interested in hitting the target before? 8)

> Satisfaction glowed in her mentor's eyes. When she tacitly motioned for

> another arrow, he shook his head. “It is time for us to rest,” he intoned.

> Now that he mentioned it, she did feel a bit winded. She leaned against a

> nearby trunk.

> “There you are!” a soft, high pitched voice announced. “I've been looking

> all over for you two!”

Lol. I don't feel the slightest hint of worry here. I guess her sister is very smart and forgiving person.

>

> This praise whipped the younger lass into an even higher level of

> ebullience. “Kivan's a great teacher,” Tiziana gushed. She gave him an

> impromptu hug. “I'm so glad he's my brother … er, not just because of the

> lessons,” she appended with a flush.

Ah! That's when it hit me what exactly you are going to tell us! I feel sorry for everybody in advance...

> Tiziana looked away. That intimate gaze … no, she felt very much the

> intruder, watching her sister and her mate. “So, um, I'll be seeing you.

> Have fun!” Her face blazed when she realized her inadvertent entendre, but

> thankfully the adults remained oblivious.

Ah, the teenagers worries ... still one wonders.

> “Good. Take care! See you in a tenday.” Deheriana stared into Kivan's

> eyes. “More or less,” she amended, her voice pitched sultrily low.

Sob. (Unless you are going to change the outcome.)

> The youngster reddened again. “Um, yes, so, ah, farewell!” Tiziana and

> Kivan exchanged nods. Before she could stop herself, she blurted, “I love

> you, Day.” Why had it seemed so important to say this?

Oh gods, I feel really sad now

> Tiziana lifted her hand to wave, but the couple had already sunk into the

> shadows.

I hope you are going to continue! I wonder who is going to be the Bhaalspawn? If you even going to have one - you may just decide to stay in your alternative universe...

Great story!


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#7 Guest_Rose of Jericho_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 03:08 AM

> Tiziana shook her head exasperatedly but deigned not explain. Why bother?

> She hadn't managed to convince them yet: they still assumed she must have

> some ulterior motive for hanging out with him beyond that of archery

> lessons. Of course, it didn't help that she once had held such

> aspirations.

Ah, so it's a tale of Kivan, eh? I'm pleased to see this. I love it when the creativity branches out so that it's only peripherally BG-related. That, and I've a fondness for Kivan. It's nice to see him.

> The youngster crept carefully through the forest and met him by their

> usual tree. He grunted, as per his customary wordless salutation and

> motioned towards a familiar knot. She nodded once in understanding. She

> broadened her stance, nocked one of his arrows, concentrated on the

> target, (hoped for Solonor Thelandira's favor,) and released her arrow.

> She missed.

> He silently handed her another arrow.

> She repeated the process with the same result.

> And again.

> And yet again.

:-o Good series and timing. I get the gist of her frustration.

> Her instructor blinked as she shattered the silence. “The hands,” he

> murmured. “Aim,” he told her, and she assumed her shooting position. His

> eye flickered across her form. After a pause, he awkwardly nudged at her

> left foot, so she adjusted her pose. Then he slid her hand down the wood

> and stepped away.

Heh. That's so Kivan-y.

> Immediately she noticed a difference in the bow's balance. She flashed him

> a grin and aimed for her target … almost! Another arrow, and another

> attempt -- yippee! She did it! She capered silently in place, ever mindful

> of alerting potential predators.

Heh. :)

> This praise whipped the younger lass into an even higher level of

> ebullience. “Kivan's a great teacher,” Tiziana gushed. She gave him an

> impromptu hug. “I'm so glad he's my brother … er, not just because of the

> lessons,” she appended with a flush.

Hmmm. Are Kivan and Day boyfriend/girlfriend or married?

I'd like to see what happens. :) more?

Rose of Jericho


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#8 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 03:40 AM

That does sound like Kivan. Minus the revenge so far, but I guess that's about to change.


#9 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 03:53 AM

> Hmm, is somebody late for their lesson?

When you measure your lifespan in centuries, what's a couple of minutes between friends?

> Darn!

> Double and triple darn!

Hey, those tree knots can be pretty elusive. :-o

> That's wise. :)

...although it would feeeel really good to give it a whack or twelve.

> Whoo-Hoo!

> Awww.

Thanks. I didn't know whether that was too clicheed or not.

> Oh no, I know how this trip is going to end. :)

Unfortunately. :)

> *snif* She'll never see her sister again. :)

...and she didn't even know it.

I appreciate your comments. Thank you for reviewing.


#10 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 03:57 AM

> You're welcome. :) Since I commented before I'll just say that this was

> really sweet, and I would like to repeat that for once I actually like

> Kivan. Well done!

[Blushes brightly] Well, gee, thank you. That's very high praise! :-o

> Oh, and I'm happy to find out it was cats. :)

Somehow Kivan doesn't strike me as a dog person (that would be more like Minsc imvho)...


#11 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 04:12 AM

> Oh, dear... What nice friends she has. :)

Rule #1 for adolescents: never admit to a crush. Ever! Even when you reach your 30s (if a human), you'll still hear the "Remember when..." stories.

> LOL! I see she's really happy for finally hitting that target! :)

Yeah. [shrugs] I guess she thinks of getting that 1st star in bow the same way young'uns here think of getting their driver's license: it's her ticket to freedom, the final step towards being taken seriously as an adult.

> Kinda bittersweet... :)

Somehow Deheriana just emerged from thin air. Was just writing a light -n- fluffy story about the archery lesson when all of a sudden she just walked into the scene. Strange how that happens.

> Really bittersweet. :)

I don't like it when bad things happen to characters. :-o

> You do know how to create an atmosphere of sadness very well.

Thank you!

> Great story. If a little, well, bittersweet. :) Will you be writing more

> on this storyline?

Goodness, thank you for the compliment!

As for continuing...well, that had not been my intention. Somehow this evening (after I posted this) some more ideas for her spontaneously germinated, so... I don't know yet.

> ---Weyoun



#12 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 04:59 AM

> I really don't know much about writing to point precisely what's well

> done, or not. My critiques are bound to be awkward, or badly placed, if I

> go beyond the impact a story had on me as a reader. I hope you don't mind.

> :)

Me? Mind?! I'm just delighted that you read this and then took the time and effort to offer feedback on my attempt. :-o

I feel the same way you do when trying to respond to others' writing. They write so well, and I don't have the tools for analyzing their work.

> But what am I to say about this particular story? There is such beauty in

> its simplicity! I like simple things. Why add strange feelings, or

> complicated desires to our ability to love? Why dream of the complex, when

> in the purity of three words there is room for countless universes?

> "I love you, Day," said Tiziana.

> And I loved this story. :)

Oh wow. Thank you! It means a lot to me that you enjoyed this.

> -Sandalwood (who should *really* stop listening to Rachmaninoff's Vespers

> while reading stories like these).

[scratches head] hmm, Rachmaninoff's Vespers, huh? [jots it down on list for future listening]


#13 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 06:12 AM

> I find the story enthralling from the start, and I was so pleasantly

> surprised to find out it was Kivan's story you are going to tell us! It

> was so much fun to read.

Goodness, thank you! I'm very glad you enjoyed it.

Kivan...I just always wonder about the guy. We meet him when he's a broken shell, living only for revenge. I'd wished we could have learned more about him before his tragedy.

> Heh, the first glimpse of the character. :)

> Oh yes, once you let it slip off your tongue - they will never forget it.

> :)

Tell me about it!

> Still I feel she feels somewhet more than friendship towards her

> teacher.

Oh, yes. He was her first crush, after all. Now he's her de facto brother-in-law -- her beloved sister's mate; if her sister (whom she practically idolizes) loves him, he must be a wonderful guy. So here's this talented ranger who has no romantic feelings towards her, has nothing to gain, but still generously offers his time to tutor her. Tiziana thinks he's the greatest thing since sliced bread! (Um, do elves *have* sliced bread? :-o)

> I gather that's elven deity, patron of archers?

Bingo!

> I would say - Kivan is extremely patient. :)

Per his BG1 bio, he tracked Tazok for "years," so I'd guess so. Also per BG1 bio, he seems to have difficulty making friends, so imvho he might be less-inclined to lash out at them when they make mistakes.

> Heh. Wonderful. Though I wished for some memories of hers, to account for

> previous lessons and how they went. How come she only asked him what she

> is doing wrong today? I guess she was not much interested in hitting the

> target before? :)

Depending on what her actual target was, eh? :)

Archery is very difficult! I think many of her initial lessons consisted of exercises to strengthen her arms (that string is *hard* to pull back). When she's gotten really ticked in her other lessons, I tend to think she would have said something (the "finally" only referred to w/in this lesson).

Kivan, while usually laconic, was probably even more reticent than usual today. He might not have wanted to antagonize her, since there was disappointing news awaiting her (i.e., that they didn't think she was *quite* ready to go out in the woods by herself).

> Lol. I don't feel the slightest hint of worry here. I guess her sister is

> very smart and forgiving person.

Oh, she's savvy alright: always pictured Kivan's wife as a nurturing individual, perhaps a cleric or a teacher.

> Ah! That's when it hit me what exactly you are going to tell us! I feel

> sorry for everybody in advance...

...or feel happy that they at least had some good times once.

> Ah, the teenagers worries ... still one wonders.

Teenager axiom #1: anything you say has a risque interpretation. Freudian slip?

> Sob. (Unless you are going to change the outcome.)

Unfortunately not.

> Oh gods, I feel really sad now

> I hope you are going to continue! I wonder who is going to be the

> Bhaalspawn? If you even going to have one - you may just decide to stay in

> your alternative universe...

Actually, I hadn't planned on continuing. I'm mulling over some possible follow-up ideas. And yes, Kalinka *is* acquainted w/ Kivan.

> Great story!

High praise indeed. Thank *you* for your feedback. :)


#14 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 06:26 AM

> Ah, so it's a tale of Kivan, eh? I'm pleased to see this. I love it when

> the creativity branches out so that it's only peripherally BG-related.

> That, and I've a fondness for Kivan. It's nice to see him.

Thank you! He was one of my favorite BG1 characters -- he ALWAYS was in my party -- so it was such a disappointment that he was not included in BG2 and that you never learned of his fate. Did he ever go home? (If so, what did he say after all those years away?)

> :-o Good series and timing. I get the gist of her frustration.

Thanks!

> Heh. That's so Kivan-y.

Wow! Am glowing from this praise. :)

> Heh. :)

> Hmmm. Are Kivan and Day boyfriend/girlfriend or married?

The only thing the BG1 bio says is that Deheriana a/k/a Day is Kivan's mate. I like to think of them as being married (otherwise wouldn't it say "lover" instead?), but your guess is as good as mine...probably better, actually. :)

> I'd like to see what happens. :) more?

You know, I hadn't intended to, but ideas have just whirled out.

Thank you for your interest! I'm just thrilled that you seemed to like it.

> Rose of Jericho



#15 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 06:30 AM

> That does sound like Kivan.

Thank you! Tried my darndest.

> Minus the revenge so far, but I guess that's

> about to change.

Bingo! And it's sad: he acts as though he's nothing w/o his "lost Deheriana," but he must have had *something* to go back to.

I appreciate your comments. Thank you for posting!



#16 Arcalian

Posted 12 May 2002 - 06:39 AM

My scribe has told me the tale of Kivan, poor fool. You expand his history well here.


Adrian
The road to the abyss may be paved with good intentions, but it is those with bad intentions that race down that road as fast as they can.

#17 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 01:53 PM

> The youngster reddened again. “Um, yes, so, ah, farewell!” Tiziana and

> Kivan exchanged nods. Before she could stop herself, she blurted, “I love

> you, Day.” Why had it seemed so important to say this?

> A surprised look, a gratified smile. The younger elf's uncharacteristic

> declaration clearly touched her sister. “I love you too, Tiz. Farewell!”

> Tiziana lifted her hand to wave, but the couple had already sunk into the

> shadows.

This was such a sweet little story:) I enjoyed the way Tiziana's archery improved and how happy it made her:) I also liked how you portrayed her genuine love for her sister. I think the ending was the sweetest, two sisters exchanging "I love you", very nice touch. I hope you will continue with more of this story:)

Kara


#18 Guest_Anonymous_*

Posted 12 May 2002 - 06:50 PM

> Oh wow. Thank you! It means a lot to me that you enjoyed this.

Hey, it was a pleasure. :)

> [scratches head] hmm, Rachmaninoff's Vespers, huh? [jots it down on list

> for future listening]

I found out a cool website where you can download the complete Rachmaninoff vespers in mp3 format, if you're interested. A word of caution though. Most of the files are quite large, some reaching 8 Mb's, so if your internet connection leaves you hanging sometimes, I advise using a download utility like Go!Zilla (it's free at www.gozilla.com), which can resume a broken download.

You can find Rachmaninoff's vespers here

Right-click on the file format you desire (mp3), and choose download with Go!zilla. If this doesn't work, right click on the link, select "properties", copy the link's URL address, and paste it on the "add file" option in Gozilla's "file" menu. This is the way I usually make my downloads; of course, you're free to choose yours. :)

Rachmaninoff's "All night Vigil", or vespers, is a "a cappella". It's basically a chorus singing without musical accompaniment. Check out Silrana's definition at her novel's introduction, if you don't know what it is. I've never heard a set of voices sing with such beauty before in my life.

Anyway, check it out if you can, it's really beautiful. The thematic is religious, but the ethereal chorus surpasses any belief the listener might have. That's my opinion, of course. ;-) Oh, and in matters of music (as in many things concerning art), there's no accounting for taste. :)

I hope you enjoy it though. :D

-Sandalwood



#19 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 13 May 2002 - 02:22 AM

> My scribe has told me the tale of Kivan, poor fool. You expand his history

> well here.

Thank you very much! (or to quote *someone*, "Your candor is appreciated." ;-))


#20 Guest_Ursula_*

Posted 13 May 2002 - 02:35 AM

> This was such a sweet little story:) I enjoyed the way Tiziana's archery

> improved and how happy it made her:) I also liked how you portrayed her

> genuine love for her sister. I think the ending was the sweetest, two

> sisters exchanging "I love you", very nice touch. I hope you

> will continue with more of this story:)

> Kara

Thank you for your very generous comments. It makes my day when someone gets some enjoyment out of my writing attempts. :)

Have nothing *planned* as a continuation, but there are some ideas which seem to be precipitating out...






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