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#1 Requiem

Posted 05 August 2001 - 10:33 PM

Well, here's a miracle -- a post two quizzes in a row! As happened last time, Jen and HD totally took over and told me what I was going to write, regardless of what I already had written down... not that I mind, it's just that I'm supposed to be working on a job description for a new position and a presentation for next week instead of madly transcribing their conversation.

Your comments and critiques are very welcome as always. Thanks much to Zan for the research resources. I've read the episode many times now - hope the typos etc are limited -- I'm cross-eyed right now. (And I could hear Leo saying that the first part is more show than tell, but I just couldn't get it to flow otherwise.) *sigh*

Ok, now for the moment of truth....holds nose, closes eyes and pushes post...

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Jen sprawled across the window seat staring out into the pleasant little garden. The crickets had begun their evensong and dusk crept across the yard. She found the crickets' song to be comforting and friendly.

As she stared out the window, she thought back over the past couple of weeks. Finding the planar gem sure turned my life up side down. Now I'm a stranger in a strange land. She had to admit though, that once she had gotten over the shock of being in Faerun, she had found the change exciting.

She was lounging in the sitting room of Nalia's former Nanny. After Jen and Haer'Dalis's failed attempt to go through the portal, Tristan's party had returned to Athkatla and the Five Flagons Inn. At first, Jen had thought to remain with them – after all, they were the only people she knew in Faerun. However, they had immediately plunged into another quest that involved tracking down a serial killer. It was a dangerous undertaking, particularly for one unaccustomed to self-defense from swords and other such weapons. In the end, Jen's desire to fend for herself coupled with a lively sense of self-preservation had lead her to step out of the investigation and seek other employment. Fortunately, Nalia had remembered her beloved Nanny Bea and had gone to see her in the hopes that she could assist in finding Jen a job.

Nanny Bea was now getting up in years. She was a tiny little thing, so small that she could almost have been mistaken for a halfling. She had tremendous energy, curly white hair and mischievous green eyes that sparkled with the joy of living. She loved to laugh and “visit” as she called it, talking constantly about her garden, her grandchildren and her former life with the D'Arnise family. Although quite spry for her years, she had suffered a bad fall not long before and her daughters were pressuring her to sell the little house and move in with one of them. Nanny Bea treasured her independence and had been more than willing to take Jen in as a companion. The two of them had hit it off immediately and Jen felt she would have been happy to stay with Nanny Bea indefinitely except for her desire to lead a more active life as well as to see own home once again.

She heard footsteps and turned, thinking that Nanny Bea was coming into the room. However, the steps moved more briskly than Nanny's aged shuffle and so she wasn't entirely surprised to see Haer'Dalis a few moments later.

“Why so quiet, my Kestrel?”

She laughed, “Quiet? How could things be quiet now that you've arrived? I AM glad to see you Haer'Dalis. Sit down and tell me, did you find the killer?”

He grinned back and instead of taking a nearby chair, pushed her legs off the window seat and dropped down beside her. “Ah, you think this sparrow is the town crier?”

“So you just want to keep me in suspense do you?

“It occurred to me." He admitted. He paused dramatically and then went on, "However, since you've shown this sparrow such an amiable welcome, I will compensate by keeping you in suspense no longer, little hawk. Yes, we did find the killer – it was the local tanner. Unfortunately he escaped although not before killing the worthy Lieutenant Aegisfield along with a number of others. We found the bodies and made a number of other unpleasant discoveries including that of a piece of armor which appeared to have been made from human skin.” He stopped and added thoughtfully, “Although the tanner has fled, I believe the matter to be far from closed.”

She shuddered at the description of the armor of flesh. “Ewww – sounds rather nasty. I've never considered myself to be squeamish and I was going to say I've missed traveling with you, but I'm glad to have missed this particular adventure!”

“We are all very glad to be back as well.”

“I'll bet. And I'm very glad you're back. I've been feeling just a little twitchy. I've been thinking about the conversations on our way back to Athkatla when you talked about there being other doors leading to Earth and just having to find them. I'm anxious to start looking for those doors. Nanny Bea is wonderful, but as much as I like her and am beginning to enjoy life here, I also want to go home.” She sighed. “I'm just not very good at sitting around.”

“I know,” he said and reaching out he gently touched her cheek, his strong, supple fingers tracing the outline of her face and chin. “That's why I came tonight. I knew you would be restless. If you like I'll tell you more about methods of planar travel.”

“Please do.” She settled herself more comfortably and looked at him expectantly.

“Well,” he began, “as I told you, there are many ways of traveling between the planes including portals, spells and conduits.”

“Conduits?”

“Conduits are shafts that connect the Primes to the Outer Planes,” he replied. “There are two types – young and mature. As conduits pass through the Astral Plane it is said that they twist and writhe like snakes, but fortunately the ends remain stable. Now, assuming a berk steps through a mature conduit, he can depend upon ending up in pretty much the same place each time he comes and goes. But a berk stepping into a young conduit will find he doesn't have a way back.” He glanced at her. “Are you still with me?

“Absolutely – there are many ways to travel between the planes and using conduits is one of them. A mature conduit will allow one to go back and forth although a young conduit is a one way trip. Have it I got it so far?”

“You do; now to continue the lesson - the only problem with mature conduits is that something unpleasant may well step through with you. One also has to understand the nature of conduits. There are those that go between planes and those that go through levels of the same plane. You can't pick where you're going to land either. You simply end up where the end of the conduit is anchored.”

“Huh? I thought you said. . . oh - never mind. I get it. If the end of the conduit is anchored in say, Peoria, then that's where you'll land even though you really want to go to Portland. However, if you don't know where the end of the conduit is anchored, you don't know where you'll end up. Is that right?”

“The places you mention are unknown to me but in essence you have it. Now, the entrance to a conduit can't be seen - they are invisible unless you have some method or instrument to help you find them. But if you do spot them, they look rather like a cloudy mirror.”

“Interesting. Would it be easier to find a spellcaster that could send me home?” She grinned, “On my planet, the conduits would be well marked and you'd probably have to buy a ticket. At the very least there would be a toll for their use!”

“ Toll?” He looked puzzled.

“A toll is a use fee”

“Ah.” He laughed. “Well many beings come through the conduits and not all carry coin. And I doubt there are many who would be foolhardy enough to consider a discussion of fees with a Bhaalor or some of the other beings who use the conduits.”

She smiled back. “OK,” she said, “what about maps -- if your folk have been traveling the planes for so long, surely you have maps showing the locations of conduits?

He nodded, “True, there are maps, but one must be cautious in the purchase as there are as many cheats as there are true mappings. There are other ways to find the entrances such as use of True Seeing spells. Your portal gem should also aid us. Actually, that leads to the main purpose of my visit tonight. I came to tell you is that I have located a scholar living in Athkatla said to be a former planewalker. I believe he may be able to help us find a means of locating a route back to your world.”

She looked at him and said slowly, “You used my gem to open the portal, so why do we need this scholar to help us use it to find a conduit?”

“It is true that I have traveled between the planes many times but I have rarely done so using a portal gem. Raelis was the more knowledgeable and it was she who opened the conduit for the Sigil Troupe.”

“Oh, well then off to your scholar we'll go! Does he have a name?”

“He does. His name is Cambrel.” He rose and stretched in feline fashion. “I must be off my dear. However, I will return on the morrow and take you to him.”



#2 Guest_zan_*

Posted 05 August 2001 - 11:15 PM

> Well, here's a miracle -- a post two quizzes in a row! As happened last

> time, Jen and HD totally took over and told me what I was going to

> write, regardless of what I already had written down... not that I mind,

> it's just that I'm supposed to be working on a job description for a new

> position and a presentation for next week instead of madly transcribing

> their conversation.

Ah, been there! But it's good to see another part of this series - and it's sort of pleasant at the same time, when they co-operate like that ;)

> The two of them had hit it off immediately and

> Jen felt she would have been happy to stay with Nanny Bea indefinitely

> except for her desire to lead a more active life as well as to see own

> home once again.

"see her own home"

I like the description of Bea here, though. It is a bit of a "tell" rather than "show"...but it works to set the scene. Though, perhaps you could bring Bea onstage, to talk with Jen, perhaps? Then we could see her physical appearance, and her personality traits in action - and the background about her and Nalia could be kept as is, in Jen's thoughts :-)

> “The places you mention are unknown to me but in essence you have it. Now,

> the entrance to a conduit can't be seen - they are invisible unless you

> have some method or instrument to help you find them. But if you do spot

> them, they look rather like a cloudy mirror.”

A difficult situation....the need to impart information about planar travel, without it sounding like a lecture...but I thought this conversation worked well ;) You might put in a bit of extra character movement, so they're not talking heads - you know, describe what they're doing, or have Haer'Dalis gesture with hands, or use analogies. Hey, he's an actor, how can he explain anything rationally! ;D Seriously, though, I liked your descriptions of the characters elsewhere in the story, and would like to see more to break up the info-heavy conversation here :D

> “Ah.” He laughed. “Well many beings come through the conduits and not all

> carry coin. And I doubt there are many who would be foolhardy enough to

> consider a discussion of fees with a Bhaalor or some of the other beings

> who use the conduits.”

Heheh, splendid image! Imagine a toll booth guy, arguing with a great mass of claws and teeth B)

> “He does. His name is Cambrel.” He rose and stretched in feline fashion.

I can see this too...feline...good description, he strikes me as rather graceful and catlike :P

zan


#3 Requiem

Posted 05 August 2001 - 11:53 PM

> Ah, been there! But it's good to see another part of this series - and

> it's sort of pleasant at the same time, when they co-operate like that ;)

> "see her own home"

Yeah -- I caught that after hitting "post" *clutches head*

> I like the description of Bea here, though. It is a bit of a

> "tell" rather than "show"...but it works to set the

> scene. Though, perhaps you could bring Bea onstage, to talk with Jen,

> perhaps? Then we could see her physical appearance, and her personality

> traits in action - and the background about her and Nalia could be kept as

> is, in Jen's thoughts ;)

Very true. I'd like to re-write this section -- I did a lot of variation on this (I have 6 drafts) and just couldn't get it to work without feeling like it was going on and on and on without moving things forward. *sigh*

> A difficult situation....the need to impart information about planar

> travel, without it sounding like a lecture...but I thought this

> conversation worked well :D You might put in a bit of extra character

> movement, so they're not talking heads - you know, describe what they're

> doing, or have Haer'Dalis gesture with hands, or use analogies. Hey, he's

> an actor, how can he explain anything rationally! ;D Seriously, though, I

> liked your descriptions of the characters elsewhere in the story, and

> would like to see more to break up the info-heavy conversation here :P

> Heheh, splendid image! Imagine a toll booth guy, arguing with a great mass

> of claws and teeth B)

I was having an image of the New Jersey turnpike...

> I can see this too...feline...good description, he strikes me as rather

> graceful and catlike :)

Thanks Zan -- appreciate the feedback. This was a tough chapter for some reason and I finally just wanted to move on... I'll try keep the action break up in mind... :-)


#4 Guest_Silrana_*

Posted 06 August 2001 - 03:17 AM

Ooooh, another Jen story! I think this story is a lot of fun, especially wiht your working in of Haer'Dalis. Who better to discuss plane-jumping with?

> She was lounging in the sitting room of Nalia's former Nanny. After Jen

> and Haer'Dalis's failed attempt to go through the portal, Tristan's party

> had returned to Athkatla and the Five Flagons Inn. At first, Jen had

> thought to remain with them – after all, they were the only people she

> knew in Faerun. However, they had immediately plunged into another quest

> that involved tracking down a serial killer. It was a dangerous

> undertaking, particularly for one unaccustomed to self-defense from swords

> and other such weapons. In the end, Jen's desire to fend for herself

> coupled with a lively sense of self-preservation had lead her to step out

> of the investigation and seek other employment. Fortunately, Nalia had

> remembered her beloved Nanny Bea and had gone to see her in the hopes that

> she could assist in finding Jen a job.

Excellent points here. Heck, I certainly couldn't jump into an adventuring group.

> “It occurred to me." He admitted. He paused dramatically and then

> went on, "However, since you've shown this sparrow such an amiable

> welcome, I will compensate by keeping you in suspense no longer, little

> hawk. Yes, we did find the killer – it was the local tanner. Unfortunately

> he escaped although not before killing the worthy Lieutenant Aegisfield

> along with a number of others. We found the bodies and made a number of

> other unpleasant discoveries including that of a piece of armor which

> appeared to have been made from human skin.” He stopped and added

> thoughtfully, “Although the tanner has fled, I believe the matter to be

> far from closed.”

Urk! Poor Lieutenant Aegisfield! I'm glad I didn't get him killed in my game.

> “I know,” he said and reaching out he gently touched her cheek, his

> strong, supple fingers tracing the outline of her face and chin. “That's

> why I came tonight. I knew you would be restless. If you like I'll tell

> you more about methods of planar travel.”

Ah, H'D's putting on the moves.

> “Oh, well then off to your scholar we'll go! Does he have a name?”

> “He does. His name is Cambrel.” He rose and stretched in feline fashion.

> “I must be off my dear. However, I will return on the morrow and take you

> to him.”

So she might make it home? Can't wait for the next bit!


#5 Guest_Devon_*

Posted 06 August 2001 - 03:48 AM

Ah, so we're finally seeing more of Jen and Haer'Dalis again. I'm happy that you've posted this one so quickly, especially since you like to let it sit on your hard drive for a while. ;)

Your research on the conduits certainly shows and you've worked the explanations in really well. But I really feel for Jen being left alone while the others go off adventuring. Hopefully you'll post the next part soon so we can see what happens.

I really enjoy your writing, and like zan, adding things like facial expressions can help bring more life to the story and characters. I can just imagine Haer'Dalis really warming to his subject as he talks about the planar travel. I loved your opening pargraph, especially the description of the birds' evensong. It's beautiful!


#6 Requiem

Posted 06 August 2001 - 03:57 AM

> Ooooh, another Jen story! I think this story is a lot of fun, especially

> wiht your working in of Haer'Dalis. Who better to discuss plane-jumping

> with?

Thanks! And you're inspiring me here...there's plane-jumping and then there's plane-jumping...perhaps Jen will have a chance to show him her version -- hmmmm...with or without swords...hmmmm

> Excellent points here. Heck, I certainly couldn't jump into an adventuring

> group.

I might want to, but like Jen, I'd probably decide self-preservation has certain advantages.

> Urk! Poor Lieutenant Aegisfield! I'm glad I didn't get him killed in my

> game.

I didn't either until my last game. I kept seeing the dialog in InfExp and wondering what had happened, so this time I just reported to him. bad bad bad.

> Ah, H'D's putting on the moves.

Aww...maybe he's just a nice guy...(yeah, right!)

> So she might make it home? Can't wait for the next bit!

its' getting closer!

Thanks for the comments Silrana!



#7 Requiem

Posted 06 August 2001 - 04:12 AM

> Ah, so we're finally seeing more of Jen and Haer'Dalis again. I'm happy

> that you've posted this one so quickly, especially since you like to let

> it sit on your hard drive for a while. ;)

Yeah -- I know. I keep hoping the process is more like fine wine rather that rotting fruit, but one isn't always sure! And then there's always fruit wines ; Actually, #5 is finished, but I'll sit on it another night just to be sure. 'Sides, it's looong...I've got to figure out how and where to break it up before we all go blind!

> Your research on the conduits certainly shows and you've worked the

> explanations in really well. But I really feel for Jen being left alone

> while the others go off adventuring. Hopefully you'll post the next part

> soon so we can see what happens.

Thanks -- Zan pointed me to the Doomguard Handbook and the Player's Handbook both of which were invaluable. Jen isn't too happy being left out although she really likes Nanny Bea. However, she firmly believes in the adage that s/he who learns to run away, lives to fight another day!

> I really enjoy your writing, and like zan, adding things like facial

> expressions can help bring more life to the story and characters. I can

> just imagine Haer'Dalis really warming to his subject as he talks about

> the planar travel. I loved your opening pargraph, especially the

> description of the birds' evensong. It's beautiful!

*blush* awww..thanks Devon -- I really appreciate hearing that from you. I agree about adding facial and other expressions and need to keep it more in mind. I had five different versions of this chapter (?!!)and was pretty frustrated then suddenly wham! the current one came through. Whew!


#8 Luned

Posted 06 August 2001 - 03:33 PM

> Well, here's a miracle -- a post two quizzes in a row! As happened last

> time, Jen and HD totally took over and told me what I was going to

> write, regardless of what I already had written down... not that I mind,

> it's just that I'm supposed to be working on a job description for a new

> position and a presentation for next week instead of madly transcribing

> their conversation.

You can write, or you can have a life, but not both! (Consarn it!) And hurrah for more Jen!

> As she stared out the window, she thought back over the past couple of

> weeks. Finding the planar gem sure turned my life up side down.

Errr... "upside" is one word. Sorry, but I seem to be in picky mode this morning... problems with AT... and now I'm whining. Sorry again!

> She was lounging in the sitting room of Nalia's former Nanny. After Jen

> and Haer'Dalis's failed attempt to go through the portal, Tristan's party

> had returned to Athkatla and the Five Flagons Inn.

Weird as it looks, the correct form is Haer'Dalis'. No extra S after the second apostrophe.

>At first, Jen had

> thought to remain with them – after all, they were the only people she

> knew in Faerun. However, they had immediately plunged into another quest

> that involved tracking down a serial killer. It was a dangerous

> undertaking, particularly for one unaccustomed to self-defense from swords

> and other such weapons. In the end, Jen's desire to fend for herself

> coupled with a lively sense of self-preservation had lead her to step out

> of the investigation and seek other employment. Fortunately, Nalia had

> remembered her beloved Nanny Bea and had gone to see her in the hopes that

> she could assist in finding Jen a job.

Nice to see that Jen has common sense!

> Nanny Bea was now getting up in years. She was a tiny little thing, so

> small that she could almost have been mistaken for a halfling. She had

> tremendous energy, curly white hair and mischievous green eyes that

> sparkled with the joy of living. She loved to laugh and “visit” as she

> called it, talking constantly about her garden, her grandchildren and her

> former life with the D'Arnise family.

Hey! Where are Andy, Opie, and Barney Fife? *grin* I couldn't resist... I wondered at first why Nanny Bea sounded so familiar.

> She laughed, “Quiet? How could things be quiet now that you've arrived? I

> AM glad to see you Haer'Dalis. Sit down and tell me, did you find the

> killer?”

No, Jen! No! Danger, danger!

> “It occurred to me." He admitted. He paused dramatically and then

> went on, "However, since you've shown this sparrow such an amiable

> welcome, I will compensate by keeping you in suspense no longer, little

> hawk.

I told you not to do it! Now look at him! Give him and inch and he'll take a mile!

Okay, I've scared myself now... I'll try to confine myself to less flaky comments.

Yes, we did find the killer – it was the local tanner. Unfortunately

> he escaped although not before killing the worthy Lieutenant Aegisfield

> along with a number of others.

I know you're on the "low-comma" end of the style spectrum, but I do think this sentence needs one after "escaped".

We found the bodies and made a number of

> other unpleasant discoveries including that of a piece of armor which

> appeared to have been made from human skin.”

And another one after "discoveries".

> She shuddered at the description of the armor of flesh. “Ewww – sounds

> rather nasty. I've never considered myself to be squeamish and I was

> going to say I've missed traveling with you, but I'm glad to have missed

> this particular adventure!”

I'll bet she is!

> “I know,” he said and reaching out he gently touched her cheek, his

> strong, supple fingers tracing the outline of her face and chin. “That's

> why I came tonight. I knew you would be restless. If you like I'll tell

> you more about methods of planar travel.”

Groannnnnnnnn. You're doomed, Jen, just another in a long line of broken hearts....

> She looked at him and said slowly, “You used my gem to open the portal, so

> why do we need this scholar to help us use it to find a conduit?”

Now you're thinking! Always question a tiefling's motives!

> “It is true that I have traveled between the planes many times but I have

> rarely done so using a portal gem. Raelis was the more knowledgeable and

> it was she who opened the conduit for the Sigil Troupe.”

> “Oh, well then off to your scholar we'll go! Does he have a name?”

> “He does. His name is Cambrel.” He rose and stretched in feline fashion.

> “I must be off my dear. However, I will return on the morrow and take you

> to him.”

Promises, promises....

Ooh, can't wait! More! I like the way you use the wormhole concept.

Don't mind me, paying bills always makes me a little wacky.

---Luned


Cheesecake is a state of mind.

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#9 Guest_Dwagon_*

Posted 06 August 2001 - 06:13 PM

> She was lounging in the sitting room of Nalia's former Nanny. After Jen

> and Haer'Dalis's failed attempt to go through the portal, Tristan's party

> had returned to Athkatla and the Five Flagons Inn. At first, Jen had

> thought to remain with them – after all, they were the only people she

> knew in Faerun. However, they had immediately plunged into another quest

> that involved tracking down a serial killer. It was a dangerous

> undertaking, particularly for one unaccustomed to self-defense from swords

> and other such weapons. In the end, Jen's desire to fend for herself

> coupled with a lively sense of self-preservation had lead her to step out

> of the investigation and seek other employment. Fortunately, Nalia had

> remembered her beloved Nanny Bea and had gone to see her in the hopes that

> she could assist in finding Jen a job.

> Nanny Bea was now getting up in years. She was a tiny little thing, so

> small that she could almost have been mistaken for a halfling. She had

> tremendous energy, curly white hair and mischievous green eyes that

> sparkled with the joy of living. She loved to laugh and “visit” as she

> called it, talking constantly about her garden, her grandchildren and her

> former life with the D'Arnise family. Although quite spry for her years,

> she had suffered a bad fall not long before and her daughters were

> pressuring her to sell the little house and move in with one of them.

> Nanny Bea treasured her independence and had been more than willing to

> take Jen in as a companion. The two of them had hit it off immediately and

> Jen felt she would have been happy to stay with Nanny Bea indefinitely

> except for her desire to lead a more active life as well as to see own

> home once again.

nice to see jen settling in welll...doubt she has the skills to survive as an adventurer for long...

> “I'll bet. And I'm very glad you're back. I've been feeling just a little

> twitchy . I've been thinking about the conversations on our way back to

> Athkatla when you talked about there being other doors leading to Earth

> and just having to find them. I'm anxious to start looking for those

> doors. Nanny Bea is wonderful, but as much as I like her and am beginning

> to enjoy life here, I also want to go home.” She sighed. “I'm just not

> very good at sitting around.”

jen has adapted to her changed circumstances ver ell, but i supoose the desire to reutn home must come sooner or later...the discussion with h'd was well written i though, you get all the info across without being boring or anything

> “He does. His name is Cambrel.” He rose and stretched in feline fashion.

> “I must be off my dear. However, I will return on the morrow and take you

> to him.”

i look forward to seeing what happens next:))

Dwagon



#10 Weyoun

Posted 06 August 2001 - 06:35 PM

> She was lounging in the sitting room of Nalia's former Nanny. After Jen

> and Haer'Dalis's failed attempt to go through the portal, Tristan's party

> had returned to Athkatla and the Five Flagons Inn. At first, Jen had

> thought to remain with them – after all, they were the only people she

> knew in Faerun. However, they had immediately plunged into another quest

> that involved tracking down a serial killer. It was a dangerous

> undertaking, particularly for one unaccustomed to self-defense from swords

> and other such weapons. In the end, Jen's desire to fend for herself

> coupled with a lively sense of self-preservation had lead her to step out

> of the investigation and seek other employment. Fortunately, Nalia had

> remembered her beloved Nanny Bea and had gone to see her in the hopes that

> she could assist in finding Jen a job.

A job? Whoa, she's really stuck there, isn't she?

> He grinned back and instead of taking a nearby chair, pushed her legs off

> the window seat and dropped down beside her. “Ah, you think this sparrow

> is the town crier?”

Laska : No, but with the talkin' he does...

Weyoun : *smacks Laska in back of head*

> She shuddered at the description of the armor of flesh. “Ewww – sounds

> rather nasty. I've never considered myself to be squeamish and I was

> going to say I've missed traveling with you, but I'm glad to have missed

> this particular adventure!”

What's the problem? It's only human skin, not elven...

Weyoun : *whispers something in her ear*

Laska : OH! Humans need their skin to live? Well, you learn something every day... *swings drink*

> “Huh? I thought you said. . . oh - never mind. I get it. If the end of the

> conduit is anchored in say, Peoria, then that's where you'll land even

> though you really want to go to Portland. However, if you don't know where

> the end of the conduit is anchored, you don't know where you'll end up. Is

> that right?”

Those conduits are black holes, right? RIGHT?!

Weyoun : *to jeannette* Sorry about that... She saw "Space" last night, a documentary where they showed a computersimulation of a travelling singularity consuming the solar system...

Laska : IT CAN HAPPEN ANY MOMENT NOW!

> “Interesting. Would it be easier to find a spellcaster that could send me

> home?” She grinned, “On my planet, the conduits would be well marked and

> you'd probably have to buy a ticket. At the very least there would be a

> toll for their use!”

Yeah... Everyhting cost money here... *mutters* Kapitalist pigs...

Weyoun : And she saw a documentary about the life and times of Lenin...

> “Ah.” He laughed. “Well many beings come through the conduits and not all

> carry coin. And I doubt there are many who would be foolhardy enough to

> consider a discussion of fees with a Bhaalor or some of the other beings

> who use the conduits.”

Heheheh! I can see it now! A pimply faced teenager saying ; "I'm sorry, sir but I can't let you pass!" to a 10ft tall hulking Cornugon!

> “He does. His name is Cambrel.” He rose and stretched in feline fashion.

> “I must be off my dear. However, I will return on the morrow and take you

> to him.”

Ah, will she get home or not? Let's find out... *realisation hits* HEY! How am I going to get home?

Hmmmm... Well, anyway, great story! Have a drink on me! *raises glass*

---Laska


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#11 Requiem

Posted 07 August 2001 - 02:51 AM

> You can write, or you can have a life, but not both! (Consarn it!) And

> hurrah for more Jen!

So true (regarding having a life or not)! and thanks!

> Errr... "upside" is one word. Sorry, but I seem to be in picky

> mode this morning... problems with AT... and now I'm whining. Sorry again!

No apologies necessary! I did ask for critique and comments! ;D So thanks! (Geez, 3 exclamation points in a row. I must be having an Anne McCaffery moment.) I do appreciate them all and someday (on my many projects list) when I actually post to the fan fic site, you'll see that your suggestions (commas, spelling etc) have been incorporated!

> Hey! Where are Andy, Opie, and Barney Fife? *grin* I couldn't resist... I

> wondered at first why Nanny Bea sounded so familiar.

*snicker* You're a clever one!

> No, Jen! No! Danger, danger!

> I told you not to do it! Now look at him! Give him and inch and he'll take

> a mile!

He's awfully slick, I admit.

> Groannnnnnnnn. You're doomed, Jen, just another in a long line of broken

> hearts....

Well, we'll see. Jen's had a brush with his type before and she's on to him. Does she give in eventually? I really don't know yet -- she's not telling.

> Ooh, can't wait! More! I like the way you use the wormhole concept.

Thanks! Hope to oblige soon!



#12 Requiem

Posted 07 August 2001 - 02:59 AM

> nice to see jen settling in welll...doubt she has the skills to survive as

> an adventurer for long...

Jen's a survivor -- she knows her limits. While I don't know how long she'd survive with this group on the road, she may still have some surprises up her sleeve.

> jen has adapted to her changed circumstances ver ell, but i supoose the

> desire to reutn home must come sooner or later...the discussion with h'd

> was well written i though, you get all the info across without being

> boring or anything

I think she's torn and that's why it's getting so hard to get her home. *grumble* wish she'd make up her mind!

> i look forward to seeing what happens next:))

Thanks!



#13 Requiem

Posted 07 August 2001 - 03:06 AM

> A job? Whoa, she's really stuck there, isn't she?

...stuck? Maybe. Independent? Extremely!

> Laska : No, but with the talkin' he does...

> Weyoun : *smacks Laska in back of head*

*snicker*

> > Those conduits are black holes, right? RIGHT?!

> Weyoun : *to jeannette* Sorry about that... She saw "Space" last

> night, a documentary where they showed a computersimulation of a

> travelling singularity consuming the solar system...

> Laska : IT CAN HAPPEN ANY MOMENT NOW!

> Yeah... Everyhting cost money here... *mutters* Kapitalist pigs...

> Weyoun : And she saw a documentary about the life and times of Lenin...

Well, at least she's watching educational TV!

> Heheheh! I can see it now! A pimply faced teenager saying ; "I'm

> sorry, sir but I can't let you pass!" to a 10ft tall hulking

> Cornugon!

*giggle*

> Ah, will she get home or not? Let's find out... *realisation hits* HEY!

> How am I going to get home?

> Hmmmm... Well, anyway, great story! Have a drink on me! *raises glass*

Thanks, Laska! I will! (have a drink) ;D





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