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Bhaal's Youngest: Chapter 1


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#1 Guest_Dadri_*

Posted 12 March 2005 - 07:07 AM

Totally edited to match up with the rest of the story. Bhaal's POV, WARNING: bad words.


I scowl through the haze of souls. Their numbers are thinning. Of course, they are mine, they are killing each other and themselves pretty recklessly. I miss my pixie daughter. I knew she was doomed to begin with, but she sure was fun. When…if I ever get back in power, I'll get her back. Things are looking grim at the moment.

I've been doing a lot of soul searching. I've got too many evil children. Yeah, yeah, I know how crazy it sounds to talk to people about being 'evil' or 'good' or even 'neutral'. But how many lectures have I put up with by Myrkul explaining that these alignments are things that can be measured? Didn't Cespenar give me a colored chart, explaining how I can embue people with the sort of drive I prize be able to use my items and keep those damn crazy knights from using them? Yeah, that's what I'm talking about. And you know how those guys ramble on about the forces of good and the forces of evil....well, guess what, I can group people that way too.

Anyway, I have too many evil children. How can anyone have too many evil children, you ask? In the end, there is only gonna be one child left. If that one's evil, then they'll claim my power, as any driven mortal would. But that will doom me forever. I'll be one of those pale, maddened shattered things on the astral plane. If, on the other hand, that one surviving child is good, then they'll reject my power, but still doom me, because good people would rather rip their own eyes out than give someone the power of murder. So, unless I find someone who can put personal loyalty to me over ideals or personal power, I'm screwed. How did I ever think this was a good idea?

Oh yeah, power. I was, perhaps a little bit...giddy? It sounded so good: I won't die, I'll just live on through my children, they're each born with a shred of my power, and I'll just harvest that. When they die, their power, which they mostly got through me, will be added into a pool. Of course, as they grow, they'll add their own power and my power inside them will intensify. It'll be loaning money with killer interest rates. Of course, in my glee at being able to overcome death, I forgot some minor details. Like, oh, being able to trust the harvestor in charge, my high priestess. She wouldn't dare betray me, right? Riiiight. I'm afraid that I've had a few years to think this over. Back when this crop were infants, sure, she would easily slaughter them to get me raised back, but by now, even a slow priestess would have realized that she could have that power with interest, all she has to do is let the little tykes grow and grow and kill themselves. Meanwhile, I'm bound to them like a ghost haunting them. I can watch them, I can get closer to them than any person in their lives, feeling what they feel, seeing things they don't show others, lessening or intensifying emotions they have, but there is a price. I feel each and every death. The closer I'm looking when it happens, the worse it is. Also, as they die, I have less and less influence on the world itself. My power growing is a very pleasant feeling, but that's not going to do me any good since I'm divorced from it. I can't effect it at all.

Given the choice, I'm not sure what's worse: To have a good child destroy my soul 'for the greater good' or an evil child claim my power and leave me to go insane and waste away on the astral plane for eternity? I'd really like to rule out both options. Bet Jergal's laughing his ass off at me right now.

#2 Guest_Kulyok_*

Posted 12 March 2005 - 10:37 AM

The problem with evil people was that they couldn’t ever be trusted to let their loyalty rule over their self interest. The problem with good was that their loyalty was overruled by their selflessness. What he needed was something in between that could be ruled by loyalty alone, and then he needed to gain that loyalty. An Evil child would claim his power for their own, a Good child would deny it and have it destroyed, foolish as that was, and his soul with it, as horrifying as that was. Given the choice, Bhaal wasn't really sure whether he would rather have a good child destroy his power and his soul, or let an evil child take his power an leave him a wondering forgotten god for all of time...it was a hard choice and one he really hoped he wouldn't have to make.


I liked that one. ;) Actually, it would be interesting if Bhaal's offspring will be loyal to his father till the end and then would willingly resurrect him. Pity such option wasn't in the game... could be fun ! ;)

#3 Guest_Q'alooaith_*

Posted 12 March 2005 - 12:29 PM

Hmm, three meaty blocks of text..

It's good, the inner workings of a gods mind.. Maybe step this in between your two prologs, miht help break up the huge dialogs, which is all thought is, a dialog to the self..

#4 Guest_Dadri_*

Posted 12 March 2005 - 09:04 PM

I liked that one. Actually, it would be interesting if Bhaal's offspring will be loyal to his father till the end and then would willingly resurrect him. Pity such option wasn't in the game... could be fun !


That is Bhaal's plan in this story. I thought there should be a reasonable explaination why he eggs some of his children on harder than others... and it might be nice to know where he's coming from too.

#5 Guest_Dadri_*

Posted 12 March 2005 - 09:14 PM

Hmm, three meaty blocks of text..

It's good, the inner workings of a gods mind.. Maybe step this in between your two prologs, miht help break up the huge dialogs, which is all thought is, a dialog to the self..


Thank you! Yeah, I think I should have put this in the prologs...but if I put too much there, the prologue would be too long for the story... But I'm sure the story is going to end up being pretty long, based on just what I have so far... I think I will have to trim with a chainsaw. Not to worry, I won't post too much at once, though. Granted, I will be posting a bit more often when I'm not spread so thin at home. 8)

#6 Laufey

Posted 25 March 2005 - 07:13 PM

Bhaal scowled through the haze of souls. Their numbers were thinning. Of course, he’d lost quite a few to their bloodlust. He’d been particularly fond of his cute evil pixie daughter, but he couldn’t really expect the pixie community to put up with a homicidal pixie when she gave into his suggestions so readily and came up with creative fatal pranks of her own. She had been doomed to begin with, which was a shame. When…if he ever regained power, he would remember how much fun that had been and possibly work something out to get her back. Things were not looking good at the moment. He had too many evil children. While this would amuse him if he were free to roam and pillage the world, it was disruptive to his current plan. In the end, only one would live, and that one would be offered his power. If that one were evil, then they would claim his power, dooming him forever. If that one were good, then they would reject that power, but still doom him, because the good would rather rip their own eyes out than give someone the power of murder. He needed someone who walked the line in between. He would continue to encourage recklessness with his evil and good children alike, though less in the good children: perhaps they could be corrupted. He needed someone loyal, trustworthy, with a sense of duty but without the thoughtless hatred of all evil. He needed someone sensible, yet unafraid to kill. He needed an unusual occurrence, a neutral alignment.


Heh, I love the idea of an evil pixie Bhaalspawn. :twisted: I can just see her fluttering about, poking people's eyes out with a toothpick or something.

As for his former plan- it had seemed like such a good idea at the time. Of course, at that time, he had been a tall healthy god, raw power soaking every pour, evil radiating from him like the smell of sweat filling a room. He had long lived with it, but even then the sheer power he possessed had made him giddy. His optimistic solution to death sounded so good: He would not die, he would live on through his children, they would inherit his power, and he would gain it back through their deaths. At the time, he had taken for granted that his high priestess would not risk betraying him. His current state of existance was hardly enough to make him feel giddy. He’d had years of nearly powerless misery to think about this supposedly flawless plan.


Ah, poor little Bhaal - what a 'Doh' moment he's in for. :twisted:

He had bound himself to his many offspring. He felt their strong emotions, and he could feed those emotions in turn, but there was a price. When they died, he both felt pleasure at the growing essence pooling and pain at their death. As they died, he had less and less influence on the actual world, though he could feel the power growing. He had spread his power to his offspring and as they grew, they added their own power to his, and when they died, their power returned to a pool, along with his. It was like loaning out money with high interest, but the problem with doing this was that you had to have a steward to collect this money and interest and keep from stealing it out from under you. Once upon a time, he’d thought his high priestess would never dare; or that she would believe she couldn’t…now he had come to another conclusion.


I enjoyed your Bhaal pov - it almost made me sympathetic towards the old bastard. :twisted:
Rogues do it from behind.

#7 Guest_Dadri_*

Posted 28 March 2005 - 02:32 AM

Heh, I love the idea of an evil pixie Bhaalspawn. I can just see her fluttering about, poking people's eyes out with a toothpick or something.


Exactly. :roll:

Ah, poor little Bhaal - what a 'Doh' moment he's in for.


Yeah. I think the party is over and he's just realized that the bottle he emptied wasn't wine after all... can he get to the hospital in time?

I enjoyed your Bhaal pov - it almost made me sympathetic towards the old bastard.



He's in the worst seat in the house. The little bit of Bhaal essence that drives our characters (and Sarevok) crazy is just a tiny bit of his being... and a tiny bit of his power. And he was full of it... :wink:

#8 Guest_IriaZenn_*

Posted 25 November 2006 - 07:52 PM

Totally edited to match up with the rest of the story. Bhaal's POV, WARNING: bad words.

Yay! Wait bad words are a bad thing?


I scowl through the haze of souls. Their numbers are thinning. Of course, they are mine, they are killing each other and themselves pretty recklessly. I miss my pixie daughter. I knew she was doomed to begin with, but she sure was fun. When…if I ever get back in power, I'll get her back. Things are looking grim at the moment.

Evil little pixie was probably so cute. Poor thing

I've been doing a lot of soul searching. I've got too many evil children. Yeah, yeah, I know how crazy it sounds to talk to people about being 'evil' or 'good' or even 'neutral'. But how many lectures have I put up with by Myrkul explaining that these alignments are things that can be measured? Didn't Cespenar give me a colored chart, explaining how I can embue people with the sort of drive I prize be able to use my items and keep those damn crazy knights from using them? Yeah, that's what I'm talking about. And you know how those guys ramble on about the forces of good and the forces of evil....well, guess what, I can group people that way too.

Sure you can. ;)

Anyway, I have too many evil children. How can anyone have too many evil children, you ask? In the end, there is only gonna be one child left. If that one's evil, then they'll claim my power, as any driven mortal would. But that will doom me forever. I'll be one of those pale, maddened shattered things on the astral plane. If, on the other hand, that one surviving child is good, then they'll reject my power, but still doom me, because good people would rather rip their own eyes out than give someone the power of murder. So, unless I find someone who can put personal loyalty to me over ideals or personal power, I'm screwed. How did I ever think this was a good idea?

Somewhere between that eighth and tenth glass of wine.

Oh yeah, power. I was, perhaps a little bit...giddy? It sounded so good: I won't die, I'll just live on through my children, they're each born with a shred of my power, and I'll just harvest that. When they die, their power, which they mostly got through me, will be added into a pool. Of course, as they grow, they'll add their own power and my power inside them will intensify. It'll be loaning money with killer interest rates. Of course, in my glee at being able to overcome death, I forgot some minor details. Like, oh, being able to trust the harvestor in charge, my high priestess. She wouldn't dare betray me, right? Riiiight. I'm afraid that I've had a few years to think this over. Back when this crop were infants, sure, she would easily slaughter them to get me raised back, but by now, even a slow priestess would have realized that she could have that power with interest, all she has to do is let the little tykes grow and grow and kill themselves. Meanwhile, I'm bound to them like a ghost haunting them. I can watch them, I can get closer to them than any person in their lives, feeling what they feel, seeing things they don't show others, lessening or intensifying emotions they have, but there is a price. I feel each and every death. The closer I'm looking when it happens, the worse it is. Also, as they die, I have less and less influence on the world itself. My power growing is a very pleasant feeling, but that's not going to do me any good since I'm divorced from it. I can't effect it at all.

Anni :: rolls on the floor laughing gasping for breath ::

Given the choice, I'm not sure what's worse: To have a good child destroy my soul 'for the greater good' or an evil child claim my power and leave me to go insane and waste away on the astral plane for eternity? I'd really like to rule out both options. Bet Jergal's laughing his ass off at me right now.


Anni: I know I am.

Like I said I'm reviewing the whole thing!

#9 Guest_Dadri_*

Posted 28 November 2006 - 09:44 PM

Yay! Wait bad words are a bad thing?


I thought I'd play it safe...I suck at warnings...but I'm trying. :twisted:

Evil little pixie was probably so cute. Poor thing


Yes, adorably deadly. :cry:

Somewhere between that eighth and tenth glass of wine.


Lol!

Anni :: rolls on the floor laughing gasping for breath ::


Boy, am I glad I'm not him! *mischievous laughter*

Anni: I know I am.

Like I said I'm reviewing the whole thing!



That's fine! I don't mind. :shock:




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