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[Laufey]

Those Oh-So-Popular Notes:

- One (1), count ‘em, one (1), use of the F-word.

- Anywho, here we go… in an odd decision, I’ve gone and written a chapter that focuses largely on… well… you know her, you hate her, you’ve fantasized jamming her in an electric chair and having a barbeque… and I’m sure you’ve tumbled to who I’m talking about by now.

Aerie? Count me in with Theo in the Evil, Puppy-Kicking squad. And how much do I need to pay to be the one to pull the switch? (Don't worry, I don't mean any harm by this - and just like Theo already said, the mere presence of Aerie certainly isn't enough to put me off the story.)

Tyler grumbled. “Yes, mother…” he said, serving up a sardonic reply to the Sabre’s pilot as he turned and reached for the end of his harness belt.

“Just checking. I don’t want any accidents… remember the time you smacked your forehead against the rear windshield of your turret?”

Ouch! Btw, I was having a hard time following who is who here...is the Sabre pilot meant to be Aerie? At first I was uncertain, because I didn't think it sounded too much like her, but then I got even more confused...er...rambling a bit I'm afraid.

“Er… t-this is Sideshow One, Flight Officer Alagar.” She tried to scratch her head then abruptly realized she had a flight helmet on. The knuckles of her gloved hand bumped up against the white-painted helmet, brushing across the black letters that spelled out her callsign: “S-E-R-A-P-H.” She spoke again over the still open comm channel. “You’re one of the new transfers from Fort Rostov, right? Um… well uh… welcome to the squadron. Er… lessee…pair up with Spirit… I guess. She’s quiet, but she knows the ropes.”

All right, this is clearly Aerie, but the previous woman didn't sound much like her. Was that somebody else then?

Tyler cut in over the comm, snagging the attention of the woman in the pilot’s seat. “Bandits 11:00 high, boss… couple of klicks out and closing fast…”

“Right. Um. Gotcha. Squad, this is Seraph. Break formation and engage at will. Don’t stray too far from the Gallante, she needs our protection. Bard, uh… ok… close up and form on me… we’re going after that pack of Grikaths… I’m uploading targeting info. Ready?”

Hm...not in any way trying to be mean here, but Aerie as a fighter pilot brings up some problems for me. I find it difficult to believe that she could hold such a position, especially that of a squad leader, with the insecurity and stuttering. Wouldn't that be very dangerous in the thick of combat? And would her subordinates really want to take orders from her?

Basically, I think that if you want to make her convincing to me as a frontline fighter, you need to expand more on this and define her character more.

“Why… that would be me. If you’ve got something to say, ‘sir’… please say it so I can get back to doin’ my fuckin’ job.”

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Go Immy!

Oh, and I like both Arwen and Eowyn. Does that make me a complete weirdo?